Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

I've told you before I've been where Gary is. Mine was prescription meds. No less dangerous to a screwed up mind as heron only when a patient stops saying 'I'm not like them' can they be helped. Thank you for this slice of life reality. Mabaker

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and kind words. I also appreciate your share. Gary has come a long way, but he has miles to go.
~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Gary is most definitely in denial. And he's certainly making no effort
in regards to the group. But the commotion from Chad has made him
see things differently, it seems.

It feels stupid.- HERE - "feels" doesn't seem to fit - perhaps "seems" stupid

The calm voice did little in the way to calm Chad down - "calm" twice
The soothing voice did little.......


A great chapter, making it a pleasure to read, Patty--
The only thing I would question (if I may) is saying they could use a pen as a weapon (which I agree on), but surely a pencil is just as lethal - I know of a man who lost his eye as a child when his little brother stuck a pencil into it.


Margaret

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Hi; thank you so much for your thoughtful and concise review. I made notes from your comments and suggestions for edits, and I will address them this morning. I appreciate yours and any help I get with this project,
~patty~

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Such a reaction from being denied a mundane request. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2017

Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments and kind words.
~patty~

Comment from MelB

Excellent

You only group for another hour. - only (have) group

Gary is making some progress, realizing the denial in his actions and abuse. A little sarcasm on the journal, but hopefully, it will help. Oh bummer - is the story going to be over already?

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

Hi Mel;
Thank you for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate you catching the nit-I will edit right now. Yes, Gary's story is coming to an end. I think you will enjoy the final chapter,
~patty~

reply by MelB on 02-Apr-2017

You're welcome.

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

This has a very nice start as the doctor is trying to get Gary to realize that he has more in common with the others in the group than he thinks. And the first part of solving a problem is knowing that you have one.
In the next part we get a good look at a disturbed Chad and how something as small as not getting a second helping of macaroni and cheese and turn violent.
This was an eye opener for Gary.
Great writing.
Looking forward to the conclusion.
Michael

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

Hi Michael; thank you for continuing to read along. I appreciate your comments and encouragement. Gary has come a long way in his journey,
~patty~

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend this is well written and from what I understand from this chapter is having this condition that Gary has takes acceptance for all his past mistakes and realising their are other like him writing things down will help him focus on the problem well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

Hi Jill; thank you for continuing to read along. Gary has come a long way in his journey,
~patty~

Comment from Nikki-Nicole

Excellent

Nice artwork.
Thanks for the author's notes.- Very helpful.
Free of grammatical errors!
Both mental illness and addiction come in many forms. It can happen to anyone.
GREAT READ!!
I look forward to reading more.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Good luck with your future writing!
-Nicole-

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

Hi Nikki; Thank you for stopping by to read and review. This chapter is the next to the last, and its been tough to write. The story represents my hopes and wishes for my own son to go through rehab. Gary's story is the way I cope,
~patty~

Comment from DLBoo

Excellent

Compelling story, Patty. Fabulous, moves right along. I did find one error in tense
Gary's vision are cloudy. Don't you mean is cloudy? Just sounds wrong to me when I read it. I of course may be mistaken. I look forward to reading your next chapter and seeing what happens next.

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 Comment Written 02-Apr-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2017

Hi - thanks for catching the nit. As always, I appreciate your time to read and review,
~patty~