Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL - I empathize with that bee you hear buzzing!

Although "how long" varies for each of us. . .once you establish a routine,
losing out on expected zzz's can really be annoying! And it always seems
to take five days or so to get back into the groove.

Good one :-)

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks friend. I do have Sleep Apnoea and use a CPAP machine as well but the thing just would not let me sleep real good last night. Appreciate the fine review.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

This is so great. You've hit upon something that bugs us all. Almost everyone I know has trouble sleeping.

Great poem. I didn't even notice the morn/dawn business. I was too busy enjoying the poem. Your rhyming was very good.

Love the picture. 8-)

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks for the agreement on the morn and dawn. Someone else said if I say that is how it goes then that is how it goes hehe. Thanks again.

reply by damommy on 22-Apr-2016

I'm a little familiar with British and Australian accents, so it helps me to understand.

But that's right - if you say so, it's so. 8-)

reply by Anonymous Member on 24-Apr-2016

I'm a little familiar with British and Australian accents, so it helps me to understand.

But that's right - if you say so, it's so. 8-)

reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016

Thanks friend, appreciate your follow up and glad someone understands Brits and Aussies hehe.

reply by damommy on 24-Apr-2016

You're welcome.

reply by Anonymous Member on 26-Apr-2016

You're welcome.

Comment from Lena Borghi

Excellent

I often wake in the middle of the night with a "bee in my bonnet," so thanks to you, I now know what to call it! Thanks for your notes about the dialectal differences for rhyming. Glad I read them. Good interspersed rhymes.

Just a thought, if I may: should your question mark perhaps be at the end of the last line? Hope you don't mind my asking.

I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.

Lena

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Hey thanks for the suggestion I will definitely look into that. Appreciate your lovely review.

Comment from pmait

Excellent

Gee whizikers, ya took my bee I was gonna buzz about, but does that mean torn and yawn rhyme, too? The "bee in the bonnet" is familiar in the Midwest USA. I get them in the middle of the night, too, so identify with your predicament.
Your poem is funny, and I enjoyed it. I noticed that the second stanza is a limerick. You could easily convert the first one to be one, if'n ya wanna.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Hi new friend, don't think we have met before. Most of my poetry when I do it is limerick or AB AB. Have had some sad attempts at poem contests but I find them a waste of time. Glad some of you "Up Over" folks relate to the bee in the bonnet saying. A song - Christmas Carol, I wrote (it is in here in my Really Truly Christmas Carols" book) was inspired at 5am in the 'morn' hehe had to dive out of bed to get the lyrics down! And yes you got it on torn and yawn and lawn and born and worn, hehe.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Yes Geoff, you tell 'em love. I've had the same complaints mate, not just you, I think they pronounce Ir Darn or some such thing. Haven't seen you around mate, good to make contact, How's Louise? Nice little poem, if you don't have something to inspire you, be inspired by lack of sleep or not being inspired, one can always find something, well done, mate, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks, Bro had to cover myself. Read the reviews I have found quite a bit of sympathy even a Pommy that agrees 110% of course. One reviewer even said "If you say dawn and morn rhyme then it does!" Yay! Glory! Thanks.

Comment from sage17611

Excellent

I like this poem, the picture is hilarious. If you say "morn" rhymes with "dawn", well it does. The poem is funny and has a nice flow and rhyming theme. Good job with this piece.

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2016

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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2016

Thanks new friend I just quoted you to a couple of other reviewers and I appreciate your tolerance hehe. I had to cover myself because too many times we Aussies and probably POmmies (from England) write stuff in here and all the Uncle Sam mob get into us because we don't emphasize the "rrrr's" or bend pronunciation to go with them hehe. Have to look for your stuff as I get time. Been in writer's block land for a bit.

reply by sage17611 on 22-Apr-2016

Yesss! I know what you mean, these people are brutal with punctuation, but I have learned to ignore them, I have my own unique writing style, and I'm not changing anything! Just do "you", is my advice.