Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 44 "Downward Fall"Dawn of Chaos
33 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Action flow smoothly. Easy to follow and understand story line. Descriptive language used well throughout held reader's interest. Write on.
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
  |
Action flow smoothly. Easy to follow and understand story line. Descriptive language used well throughout held reader's interest. Write on.
Comment Written 03-May-2015
reply by the author on 03-May-2015
Gracious comment, a long attempted effort which you have granted me a win. Thank you for fulfilling this quest. Action flow smoothly. Easy to follow and understand story line. Keep this up I might think of myself as a poet, not just a writer. Thank you for all.
Comment from Sis Cat
The poem starts with what appears to describe a parachute accident, and then reveals it is "just a leaf decayed by seasons." I enjoyed how you portray the leaf's terror and helplessness. I felt for it. Your imagery and descriptions convey this Icarus-like descent. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
|
The poem starts with what appears to describe a parachute accident, and then reveals it is "just a leaf decayed by seasons." I enjoyed how you portray the leaf's terror and helplessness. I felt for it. Your imagery and descriptions convey this Icarus-like descent. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
-
Lovely response and a generous rate which I thank you. I learnt from you the work has mystery. A surprising end to captivate the reader. Key focus points is terror and helplessness. Things such as Icarus-like , I see now as important in the work presentation. Continuing aims to make the exceptional.
Comment from Glasstruth
The free falling is a metaphor for change and how quickly it comes. Endurance is to learn how to cope with life's changes, like the free fall where decisions and thoughts, spontaneous as the fall itself, and for one thing, the end is unavoidable. Well crafted. Les
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
|
The free falling is a metaphor for change and how quickly it comes. Endurance is to learn how to cope with life's changes, like the free fall where decisions and thoughts, spontaneous as the fall itself, and for one thing, the end is unavoidable. Well crafted. Les
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-May-2015
-
Now that is a review. Not just ...it is good. I thank you for your generous response. I feel your gleam. Once settle how to explore authors work.
Maybe I should listen to my own statement and apply its fact. Try again. I do thank you for your review; and always felt lack in my presentations. I am glad the free fall intent was conveyed to the reader. I agree the work is well crafted: all elements of story events contain. I believe the lack is order or items arrangement. Perhaps certain items viewpoint misguiding or a need to be enhanced more. I want the exceptional.