The Dream
Blank verse - unrhymed iambic pentameter - competition39 total reviews
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, there are only two words to describe this work for me - splendid and brilliant - a well constructed and lyrical "blank," free verse, with an enchanting and philosophical message delivered in a mythical vision of reality - beautifully and masterfully articulated by an obviously extremely creative wordsmith...
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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In my opinion, there are only two words to describe this work for me - splendid and brilliant - a well constructed and lyrical "blank," free verse, with an enchanting and philosophical message delivered in a mythical vision of reality - beautifully and masterfully articulated by an obviously extremely creative wordsmith...
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Evesayshi. I appreciate your review and kind words. Sorry about the late reply. My internet has been down off and on for the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
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Absolutely no problem and no explanation is necessary - we all have our daily challenges - you are indeed welcome - an inspired and inspiring work...
Comment from TAB_that's me
Your meter is perfect. You have great enjambment. I think you did a marvelous job at this blank verse especially for being as long as it is and having no rhymes in it. You have some very obscure proximate rhymes but they are so far away that they are not easy to spot. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Your meter is perfect. You have great enjambment. I think you did a marvelous job at this blank verse especially for being as long as it is and having no rhymes in it. You have some very obscure proximate rhymes but they are so far away that they are not easy to spot. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Many thanks, Teresa, for your most complimentary six-star review. Very much appreciated! Sorry about the late reply - my internet has been down for most of the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from scd41
Your Blank Verse contest entry is promising. The author notes are interesting and help in getting the indepth meaning of the poem. I liked the line most 'dreams do not die, although at times they pause'.Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Your Blank Verse contest entry is promising. The author notes are interesting and help in getting the indepth meaning of the poem. I liked the line most 'dreams do not die, although at times they pause'.Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, scd41. I appreciate your review and kind words. Sorry about the late reply. My internet has been down off and on for the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Crennan87
The description and imagery in this piece is remarkable. I was hooked on the first line, but really, the beginning of each stanza pulled be me back again. Your words were so carefully and expertly placed. I enjoyed this piece immensely.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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The description and imagery in this piece is remarkable. I was hooked on the first line, but really, the beginning of each stanza pulled be me back again. Your words were so carefully and expertly placed. I enjoyed this piece immensely.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Crennan. I appreciate your review and kind words. Sorry about the late reply. My internet has been down off and on for the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
This is a very smart poem! You have chosen words well that complement each other as gracefully as your subject. There were so many lines that touched my mind and hard that it is hard to point them all out, but my favorite was: "It whirled and spun and tore itself to shreds, as people do when zeal outruns intent." - Brilliant!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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This is a very smart poem! You have chosen words well that complement each other as gracefully as your subject. There were so many lines that touched my mind and hard that it is hard to point them all out, but my favorite was: "It whirled and spun and tore itself to shreds, as people do when zeal outruns intent." - Brilliant!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, davisr. I appreciate your review and kind words. Sorry about the late reply. My internet has been down off and on for the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
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I've been there before!
Rhonda
Comment from Janet7053
TFawcus, This last part is replete with beautiful imagery of the bluejay fluttering about with the string for his nest and fledglings three. How nice.
The lessons learned by the boy are rise and fall, ebb and flow. Let your life make music as you reach new heights or new depths; all are learning experiences.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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TFawcus, This last part is replete with beautiful imagery of the bluejay fluttering about with the string for his nest and fledglings three. How nice.
The lessons learned by the boy are rise and fall, ebb and flow. Let your life make music as you reach new heights or new depths; all are learning experiences.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Thanks, Janet. I appreciate your review and kind words. Sorry about the late reply. My internet has been down off and on for the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Glasstruth
Wow! This just blew me away. The cocoon, moth and the promised land represents humans in a metaphoric way. Writing this in iambic pentameter is amazing. Had to check if it rhymed, hard to see it on my cell phone. It's a compliment, in that it sounds so rhythmic. Awesome!!!!!! Les
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Wow! This just blew me away. The cocoon, moth and the promised land represents humans in a metaphoric way. Writing this in iambic pentameter is amazing. Had to check if it rhymed, hard to see it on my cell phone. It's a compliment, in that it sounds so rhythmic. Awesome!!!!!! Les
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2015
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Many thanks, Les, for your most complimentary six-star review. Very much appreciated! Sorry about the late reply - my internet has been down for most of the past ten days. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from cbat
I liked the flow of the poem and have to applaud the infusion of so many incredible words.
Although the poem was a little long it was easy to follow.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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I liked the flow of the poem and have to applaud the infusion of so many incredible words.
Although the poem was a little long it was easy to follow.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for your kind review, cbat. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting poem. The Luna moth is fascinating to watch, but the depth of the story is more poetic. I knew when I saw the photo, there was a poem inside. Well done as always. Enjoyed it.
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reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Interesting poem. The Luna moth is fascinating to watch, but the depth of the story is more poetic. I knew when I saw the photo, there was a poem inside. Well done as always. Enjoyed it.
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Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Many thanks for your kind review, Ben. Glad you enjoyed it. Tony