Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

While my friend, I enjoyed this poem very much. Quite a ghastly picture but with words I truly enjoyed. Quite a message from the guy who killed his wife and she came back to haunt him. Would not be a dream I would want to have.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thank you, GWinterwin. I'm really happy that you enjoyed it. :)

~Dean

Comment from marijmd

Excellent

Yeah this new version is taking some time to get used to!
I just finished a book called the Parasol Protectric - no poison though
An angry woman is something to beware of indeed! especially a parasol wielding dead one.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

You got that right, marijmd. Is your book posted here? If so, I'll have to check it out.

Thanks for the R&R... ~Dean

Comment from MaggieMcCall

Excellent

This is gorgeous! I'm always so impressed when people can say so much within a very strict rhyme scheme. The picture you chose also goes perfectly. Thank you so much for sharing your work with us!

Maggie

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thanks you, Maggie, you're far too kind.

I appreciate the review. :)

~Dean

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Be careful what we ask for, by committing our own dastardly deeds, the wife we killed comes back for the vengeance she deserves. Thanks for another fine poem that give us a hint of what our future might bring, for those who can't refrain and throw that shovel away. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thanks, Ric. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate the R&R... ~Dean

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

Your language as always has a classical flair to it. Then, right in the middle you insert the line, 'I'd thought by treachery to off the bitch.'
That was more shocking than any amount of gore. It was so jarring that I just howled laughing. I know I'm not supposed to find so much humor in this but 'Stay sweet' right before she pushes him into hell when he had poisoned her with bitter almonds, that was a stroke of genius.
'My heart betrayed me, then attacked.' Another great line.
Your rhyme and rhythm were great as usual.
Another great poem from the master of macabre.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Michael, and I'm glad you enjoyed this one. I appreciate you R&R and feed back. All very important. :)

~Dean

Comment from Lovinia

Exceptional

Hi Dean

As usual, a tale of horror spun in the fine wicked web of evil and the macabre. Revenge from the grave ... aha so juicy. He sure got his just desserts.
"chthonian" ... a new word for me ... at first I thought some serious typo. :) Perfect presentation.

"Twirling, twirling, ever whirling -- ..." I love this verse, so hypnotic and mesmerising. So much movement, your words come alive off the page. I'll have twirling parasol's in my head all day.

"Her sockets bore straight through my ..." -- oooh, gives me the shivers, I know a few who have that look ... and they're alive! lol

"She slithered slow to where I lay;

she smelled of earth and death's decay..." -- your phrasing is excellent, arousing the olfactory as well as sublime descriptive imagery.

Huge poetic technique with the alliteration, assonance and consonance, great rhyme and meter. Haunting, yet delicious in its revenge theme ... slow and painful ... good riddance in hell. Great work Dean. Hugs - Lovi xoxox

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, Lovi, my dear friend. I appreciate you taking the time to critique my work, and I'm very grateful for your exceptional rating and kind comments. :}

~Dean

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Deano. I see you are still coming up with great stuff, my friend. I love the twirling parasol and "offing the bitch" has a nice ring to it. LOL You never cease to amaze me with the clever ideas you put forth on here, Deaan. Bravo! Bob

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014

Hah, thanks, Bob, and it's really great to have you drop in on me from time to time. I sure do miss those great detective tales of yours!

Thanks so much for taking time out to R&R this one for me. I am deeply grateful. :)

~Dean

Comment from evilynne

Exceptional

He he he! Foul play meets foul end. I loved the treachery and the wife's revenge. And the pictures are appropriately nightmarish! Evi
P.S. I am not a big fan of FanStory's new look.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, evilynne, my friend. I appreciate you taking the time to critique my work, and I'm very grateful for your exceptional rating and glowing comments. :}

~Dean

Comment from lakeport

Excellent

Poisoned Parasol, Indeed that's a very dramatic expressed story poem, very nice rhyming and flow, I enjoyed reading it, God bless you, lakeport.

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, lakeport. May God bless you & yours also.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Exceptional

Ohhhhhhhhhh - how creepy! One could
never fault your work, Dean - as always,
so cleverly thought up and well presented...
the king of horror - most impressive, my friend.


Margaret

 Comment Written 08-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, Margaret, my friend. You are too kind. I appreciate you taking the time to critique my work, and I'm very grateful for your exceptional rating and wonderful comments. :}

~Dean