Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Bev.
Wow, this is excellent. You have picked up perfectly from the previous chapter. Your visuals and dialogue are wonderful and brought me into the police office. You showed Ron's discomfort trying to explain what happened at the hospital so well. You've done an amazing job with Father Northrup and continued building the suspense. The last sentence is unexpected and such a great cliff hanger. Another excellent chapter in an excellent book!!!!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Hi, Bev.
Wow, this is excellent. You have picked up perfectly from the previous chapter. Your visuals and dialogue are wonderful and brought me into the police office. You showed Ron's discomfort trying to explain what happened at the hospital so well. You've done an amazing job with Father Northrup and continued building the suspense. The last sentence is unexpected and such a great cliff hanger. Another excellent chapter in an excellent book!!!!
Bye
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Rosalyne, thank you so very much for this grand review. I so appreciate it, my friend. Glad you found the flow from the last chapter to this one smooth. Makes my work very worth it! Hope you have a great week, my friend.
Hugs, Bev
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Hi, Bev.
Six stars doesn't come close to what you deserve. You are so talented a writer and artist!! I can't wait to hear about all the success you receive once done and published!!
Have a great week!
Bye my wonderful friend!
Hugs
Rosalyne :)
Comment from boxergirl
Nice continuation of your story line. Derek is feeling the frustration from trying to catch the serial killer, Edward Pearce.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Nice continuation of your story line. Derek is feeling the frustration from trying to catch the serial killer, Edward Pearce.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks so much, BG. :)
Comment from Bryana
Oh WOW my friend what a chapter. I admire sheriff Oleson, funny thing I have the same last name as him! Norwegian I assume. I'm glad he wants to investigate who committed such murder. he's doing his job.
Now I'm so curious what the priest has to say, I don't think it's a confession, but on the other hand it might be, I wonder if in a case like this when an innocent man might be charged for a crime the priest is allowed to tell about a confession.
I will be waiting anxiously for the next chapter.
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reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Oh WOW my friend what a chapter. I admire sheriff Oleson, funny thing I have the same last name as him! Norwegian I assume. I'm glad he wants to investigate who committed such murder. he's doing his job.
Now I'm so curious what the priest has to say, I don't think it's a confession, but on the other hand it might be, I wonder if in a case like this when an innocent man might be charged for a crime the priest is allowed to tell about a confession.
I will be waiting anxiously for the next chapter.
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Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Hi, Bryana. I have a friend with the last name of Oleson who is Swedish and there a large number, as you probably know, of Swedish immigrant families in Minnesota. Thanks for the enthusiastic and generous review. Good to hear from you! :) Bev
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My husband's family came from Norway but they also said that probably a Swedish ha sneaked into Norway! LOL
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hehehehehe xxxxx
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Even I know she was murdered. What is wrong with that corner. I am not at all happy. Maybe the tox screens with come back, soon. This is not at all okay. I am so enjoying this story. Great job.
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Even I know she was murdered. What is wrong with that corner. I am not at all happy. Maybe the tox screens with come back, soon. This is not at all okay. I am so enjoying this story. Great job.
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks, Barbara. I'm smiling at your comments about the ME. I've been having fun with his character by making him a pompous jerk.
Thanks for the lovely sixer. Means a lot coming from you. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
This story line read rougher than your other post. I had to go back and reread several sections. I suggest you let it rest a day or two and read it aloud.
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reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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This story line read rougher than your other post. I had to go back and reread several sections. I suggest you let it rest a day or two and read it aloud.
ERROR;
several gulps pf (of) the water
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Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks for the review and comments, Charlie. I'm not sure what to make of what you've said as I worked pretty hard to get this chapter just right. But I'll look back to see where some changes might be in order.
Bev
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Hi Bev.
Let the post rest for a couple of days. Read it aloud. If it seems fine with you, leave it as is. Mine is only a suggestion. Charlie
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I understand, Charlie. I've changed a couple of spots that might have been confusing, so I appreciate it. My editing software wasn't cooperating.
Bev
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The human eye will always trump software.
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:)
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Your chapters could never be too long for me, Bev! Another excellent write here. You do an excellent job with your characters. Each and everyone of them are believable and understandable. The action in this chapter is both fast and slow creating the perfect amount of suspense. Extremely well done!
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Your chapters could never be too long for me, Bev! Another excellent write here. You do an excellent job with your characters. Each and everyone of them are believable and understandable. The action in this chapter is both fast and slow creating the perfect amount of suspense. Extremely well done!
Comment Written 18-May-2014
reply by the author on 18-May-2014
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Thanks so much, Marietta. This review was helpful and most encouraging. I appreciate that you felt it flowed well.
Hugs, Bev