Shall I compare thee...
A cooler version of Shakespeare's Sonnet 1845 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
"Shall I compare thee to a winter's eve?
Thou art more frigid and more icy cold.
Rough winds do shake the autumn leaves. I grieve
Because their fine display is pyrite gold..."
I must say, I liked your chillier rendition much better than that William whatizname fella, 'T'. Excellent sonnet structurally, too, in flawless iambic pentameter, at least as far as I could tell. A bit ---darker, sexier. That's probably why I enjoyed it so much.
Well done!
***** +
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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"Shall I compare thee to a winter's eve?
Thou art more frigid and more icy cold.
Rough winds do shake the autumn leaves. I grieve
Because their fine display is pyrite gold..."
I must say, I liked your chillier rendition much better than that William whatizname fella, 'T'. Excellent sonnet structurally, too, in flawless iambic pentameter, at least as far as I could tell. A bit ---darker, sexier. That's probably why I enjoyed it so much.
Well done!
***** +
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
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You're welcome.
Comment from Carrie Carson
I'm sorry, I am out of sixes. But I would be tempted to give this a twelve. And I freely admit I miss that stream, turns out it wasn't endless...I'm married to my prince.
Great job, form, flow, rhyme and imagery. If there's a quality in this I missed, well, damn me.
Outstanding. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I'm sorry, I am out of sixes. But I would be tempted to give this a twelve. And I freely admit I miss that stream, turns out it wasn't endless...I'm married to my prince.
Great job, form, flow, rhyme and imagery. If there's a quality in this I missed, well, damn me.
Outstanding. :) Carrie
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
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Certainly, you're welcome. :) Carrie
Comment from Cajungirl
This is really good old William would smile at this version of a Shakespeare's sonnet. I enjoyed the read and the art work is great.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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This is really good old William would smile at this version of a Shakespeare's sonnet. I enjoyed the read and the art work is great.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from TAB_that's me
You did this very well in the Shakespearean sonnet style. I can feel the cold and loneliness of this poem. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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You did this very well in the Shakespearean sonnet style. I can feel the cold and loneliness of this poem. Good luck in the contest.
Teresa
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Cleve Tony very clever. Made me smile.
You did a very good job with you sonnet,
The Bard would be proud. Good luck in the contest. I have already said uncle, so many great sonnets in it, Well done. Nancy
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Cleve Tony very clever. Made me smile.
You did a very good job with you sonnet,
The Bard would be proud. Good luck in the contest. I have already said uncle, so many great sonnets in it, Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from cleo85
I may be wrong; bur I see it not as much as a parody than a take of; even a contradiction. You tell a story which is just the opposite of Shakespeare's poem. It is his style; but it is contemporary work of literature based on sonnet 18. I am not qualified to judge your work on technical therms, but I think you did an outstanding job.
I am honored to provide the illustration. Thank you for using my painting.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I may be wrong; bur I see it not as much as a parody than a take of; even a contradiction. You tell a story which is just the opposite of Shakespeare's poem. It is his style; but it is contemporary work of literature based on sonnet 18. I am not qualified to judge your work on technical therms, but I think you did an outstanding job.
I am honored to provide the illustration. Thank you for using my painting.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Thanks very much for your review, Cleo - also for the use of your very fine artwork and for the six stars. You are absolutely right about 'parody' - I've amended the subtitle to 'A cooler version of Shakespeare's Sonnet 18'
Comment from Visheshta Dahiya
nice poem.!!!
beautiful words, the typical Shakespeare vocabulary.
i think you should separate the lines according to the rhyme scheme. most of the people have done it for the same contest.
a lovely and well written poem.
best of luck in the contest
Visheshta
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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nice poem.!!!
beautiful words, the typical Shakespeare vocabulary.
i think you should separate the lines according to the rhyme scheme. most of the people have done it for the same contest.
a lovely and well written poem.
best of luck in the contest
Visheshta
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
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welcome :)
Comment from Pili Pubul
I enjoy your humor and terrific ability creating your Shakespearean version.
Perfect sonnets, great imagery , a delight to read and smile.
Good luck in the contest my friend. Pili
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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I enjoy your humor and terrific ability creating your Shakespearean version.
Perfect sonnets, great imagery , a delight to read and smile.
Good luck in the contest my friend. Pili
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from royowen
This is an absolutely brilliant parody of the original! Its very funny and I'm sure Shakespeare would roll over in his grave if he heard it! Its well rhymed, the rhythm is as tight as the original! The language used is clever and imaginative. A good work. If I had six you would have it! Blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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This is an absolutely brilliant parody of the original! Its very funny and I'm sure Shakespeare would roll over in his grave if he heard it! Its well rhymed, the rhythm is as tight as the original! The language used is clever and imaginative. A good work. If I had six you would have it! Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from Rondeno
LOL Great. You've turned Shakespeare on his head (bard = drab). The minor key to Will's C Major. Clever, clever, clever. Well done, Tony!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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LOL Great. You've turned Shakespeare on his head (bard = drab). The minor key to Will's C Major. Clever, clever, clever. Well done, Tony!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!