Comment from Jean Lagace

Excellent

I don't usually read poetry. This being said, I must admit that I got caught by that one, rocked by the rhythm of each stanza, the reading like being on a small boat and feeling the waves.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Jean, thanks for venturing onto the poetic waters for this one. I appreciate your time, interest, and kind review. :)

Comment from Tatarka2

Exceptional

I thought this was just about perfect. So inspirational, and you stayed within the iambic pentameter, while still conveying your message lyrically. The rhyme was appropriate, added to the poem's message, and helped it move along. Congratulations on a job well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Tatarka, thank you so much for the sixer, and for the great review. Both are appreciated. :)

David

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

A work of art as I see it.
Good abcb rhymes. Good use of enjambment with alliteration throughout. Very descriptive words and a superb accompanying picture

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thanks very much, emr. As always, I appreciate it!

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the abcb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming as well as internal rhyming. Good description that paints a clear picture in my mind. Good alliteration. I see nothing that I would add, take out or adjust in this piece. Good work.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you very much, RR. :)

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

I enjoyed this so much I had to read it again. Internal rhyme is hard to maintain throughout and keep the integrity of the poem in tact, but you have done a beautiful job. Can't choose a favorite line as I liked them equally. As in life there are those who do not succumb to defeat, but only get stronger. So sorry I am out of sixes. Please take a virtual..

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

DALLAS, I'll take the virtual and be just as happy and grateful as I would if the green + sign was lit. Thank you very much for your kind words.

David

Comment from DionysusDeVille

Excellent

Even as we fall in life, we can be reborn anew and even stronger than before. I see this idea being brought to life beautifully in this artwork

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thank you very much, Dionysus! I appreciate it anytime the god of wine weighs in. I tip my glass to you, with gratitude. :)

David

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

Another fine example of internal rhymes by the master. As usual, this is perfect. No nits or anything like that. Well done.

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 Comment Written 17-Jan-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014

Thanks so much, Chas. I appreciate it very much, as alwayas.