5-7-5 (Man Cold)
A little wifely humor56 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
We have to work so hard for sympathy! It's simply not possible to keep a stiff upper lip whilst sneezing! Aaaa-chooo! Love the illustration! I think I have a cold coming on. Hot whiskey and lemon please!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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We have to work so hard for sympathy! It's simply not possible to keep a stiff upper lip whilst sneezing! Aaaa-chooo! Love the illustration! I think I have a cold coming on. Hot whiskey and lemon please!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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Hehe, your such a good sport, thank you!! Glad you liked it, it was fun to write, even my husband couldn't help but laugh.
Thank you for the great review and wonderfully fun feedback.
Hope your week is wonderful and cold free! :)
Comment from paulah60
Clearly, this is written by a woman, and I hear ya sister!
You have nicely poeticised a universal truth. And, a woman's anthem: thank god men don't have to give birth!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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Clearly, this is written by a woman, and I hear ya sister!
You have nicely poeticised a universal truth. And, a woman's anthem: thank god men don't have to give birth!
Comment Written 15-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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:) hehe, if men had babies I believe the worlds population would be exceedingly smaller :) It was fun to write, so glad you liked it. Thank you so very much for the wonderful review and fun feedback.
Have a fabulous week!
Comment from emjaihammond
I definitely have met this man! Such a cute poem about the way men are when they are sick. A different truth than the one we tell ourselves. I enjoyed the poem and the wonderful picture as well. Great!
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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I definitely have met this man! Such a cute poem about the way men are when they are sick. A different truth than the one we tell ourselves. I enjoyed the poem and the wonderful picture as well. Great!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2013
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:) Thank you so very much for the great review and feedback. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
Have a wonderful week!!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Oh-h-h-h, turning the screws in on us poor, hapless males, are we? Well, I have to agree, we are big babies when it comes to getting the slightest of ailments.
I saw my wife give birth to both of our children, and I'm here to tell ya', based upon what I witnessed in that delivery room, if the world depended on me to have children and repopulate, lest we all perish as a species? Well...
...GoodBye, mankind! It ain't happening!
I guess your poem has merit after all, LOL...
Nice job!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Oh-h-h-h, turning the screws in on us poor, hapless males, are we? Well, I have to agree, we are big babies when it comes to getting the slightest of ailments.
I saw my wife give birth to both of our children, and I'm here to tell ya', based upon what I witnessed in that delivery room, if the world depended on me to have children and repopulate, lest we all perish as a species? Well...
...GoodBye, mankind! It ain't happening!
I guess your poem has merit after all, LOL...
Nice job!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Dean, Your review and feedback made me smile. My husband would agree with you, after over two decades of working together when we have the same cold he always seems to have a much more "deadly" strain. I wrote it all in fun and full of love. :)
Thank again for the fun feedback :)
Comment from l.raven
Very well said...not sure what a man cold is...but I've had soon pretty bad one...And I'm a women...LOL I love the poem and the poem couldn't be any better...
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Very well said...not sure what a man cold is...but I've had soon pretty bad one...And I'm a women...LOL I love the poem and the poem couldn't be any better...
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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:) Thanks for the wonderful feedback and review. I've worked with my husband for over 20 years and basically a if my husband and I end up with the same cold I still go to work, but his is always the end all of illnesses.
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That's a man...LOL your so welcome...xxoo
Comment from allborn66
This is a very amusing piece. I think your word choice is brilliant. You communicate your theme well. The tone is appropriate to the piece.
Barbara
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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This is a very amusing piece. I think your word choice is brilliant. You communicate your theme well. The tone is appropriate to the piece.
Barbara
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Barbara, thank you so much for your kind and wonderful feedback. I sincerely appreciate it :)
Have a wonderful week :)
Comment from annatberry
Great poem!!! That was well done, very cute and had great humor, with only a few words. I enjoyed reading it. I loved your picture it went perfect with your poem.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Great poem!!! That was well done, very cute and had great humor, with only a few words. I enjoyed reading it. I loved your picture it went perfect with your poem.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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:) Thank you so much for the thoughtful review and wonderful feedback. I appreciate it all very much, you kindness made my evening.
:)
Comment from Righteous Riter
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a cold man
Good attention capturing photo. The syllable count is correct. Good alliteration with deaths/door...thinks/this/the(assonance). Clear message that is short, simple and funny.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a cold man
Good attention capturing photo. The syllable count is correct. Good alliteration with deaths/door...thinks/this/the(assonance). Clear message that is short, simple and funny.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much, I always look forward to and appreciate your feedback. Your review is so thoughtful, my weakness is syllable count and I'm always thankful for the double check on it.
Have an awesome week!
:)
Comment from Gungalo
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
This is a for sure man's cold. Heheh just when you thought things couldn't get any worse.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
This is a for sure man's cold. Heheh just when you thought things couldn't get any worse.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Thank you, this was fun to write, glad you liked it. Thanks for the wonderful review and feedback.
:)
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Smile.
Comment from mermaids
You have me laughing here. Your saying men are more dramatic when ill. I think many women would agree with your words. Excellent 5-7-5 form.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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You have me laughing here. Your saying men are more dramatic when ill. I think many women would agree with your words. Excellent 5-7-5 form.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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So glad that this poem brought you a smile, I really enjoyed writing something with a bit of humor. Its a bit different for me to write. I must say that since I have worked with my husband for over 20 years I know the "man cold" all to well.
Thank you for your kind review and wonderful feedback.
:)