A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "~Handwriting on the Wall~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
44 total reviews
Comment from Cookie333
This one gives the reader much to ponder. The future, of health care perhaps and what constitutes being worthy of receiving treatment?
The handwriting will and is on the wall
Thank you
Karen
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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This one gives the reader much to ponder. The future, of health care perhaps and what constitutes being worthy of receiving treatment?
The handwriting will and is on the wall
Thank you
Karen
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thanks for the awesome review, Cookie333!
Comment from Gungalo
Well while this is resent great Dean it doesn't grab my interest like the other did. Perhaps is is the text. I don't know but nevertheless you get a five for the outstanding production.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Well while this is resent great Dean it doesn't grab my interest like the other did. Perhaps is is the text. I don't know but nevertheless you get a five for the outstanding production.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2013
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Thank you Gungalo. I really appreciate that...
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SMile.
Comment from elchupakabra
These dark pictapoems work on so many levels and this one is no different. I really love the picture you combine with the poem in this instance, the rhyming quatrains maximize the aesthetic with a smooth flow and the subtle heartbeat monitor in the background was the extra touch, especially the flatline at the end. Fantastic work here, thanks for sharing. I will get to your chapter asap, it's Football Sunday lol so it may take some time.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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These dark pictapoems work on so many levels and this one is no different. I really love the picture you combine with the poem in this instance, the rhyming quatrains maximize the aesthetic with a smooth flow and the subtle heartbeat monitor in the background was the extra touch, especially the flatline at the end. Fantastic work here, thanks for sharing. I will get to your chapter asap, it's Football Sunday lol so it may take some time.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Hah, yep, football Sunday takes precedent over all else in my household too, elchupakabra, LOL! I appreciate your wonderful review...
Comment from GWHARGIS
I don't know why this scared me so much. I think I was reading the words you wrote and listening to that damned whispering voice and I felt like someone was standing behind me. Creepy atmosphere you are able to create. I really liked the author's notes as well. Made the whole process a lot more chilling. Have a great day. Gretchen
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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I don't know why this scared me so much. I think I was reading the words you wrote and listening to that damned whispering voice and I felt like someone was standing behind me. Creepy atmosphere you are able to create. I really liked the author's notes as well. Made the whole process a lot more chilling. Have a great day. Gretchen
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Gretchen. I chose that soundtrack because it reminded me of someone praying over the deathbed of a loved one, or friend. It creeped me out when I heard it, and I knew, that was the one I wanted to use...
Comment from poet.wayne
So true! And another element at play here... the concept of "concierge care"... the ones who either can pay more themselves, or have better insurance, receiving either better quality of care, or priority care...
And the vanity factor too.. Hollywood starlets having toes operated on to make the so-called "toe cascade" neater...
Just remember the parable of the rich man and Lazarus...I have no problem with being Lazarus in this life, for I know later I'll be the rich one... and my God will take care of me in His will!
You do raise some certainly valid points here!
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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So true! And another element at play here... the concept of "concierge care"... the ones who either can pay more themselves, or have better insurance, receiving either better quality of care, or priority care...
And the vanity factor too.. Hollywood starlets having toes operated on to make the so-called "toe cascade" neater...
Just remember the parable of the rich man and Lazarus...I have no problem with being Lazarus in this life, for I know later I'll be the rich one... and my God will take care of me in His will!
You do raise some certainly valid points here!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks PW, and you're absolutely right. The only rewards that truly matter are the ones we accumulate in the great here-after!
Comment from Treischel
Your verse raises a delema that the medical profession clearly faces even today. What is the quality of life, if it is merely artificially sustained in a state of coma, for example? Should a 70 year old patient get a heart transplant over a 25 year old patient. Your poem raises that sort of issue. It is written well, in perfectly rhymed abab quatrains. The imagery is striking. The thoughts are carried eloquently, if a bit melodramatically. Of course, that is your specialty, and you do it well.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Your verse raises a delema that the medical profession clearly faces even today. What is the quality of life, if it is merely artificially sustained in a state of coma, for example? Should a 70 year old patient get a heart transplant over a 25 year old patient. Your poem raises that sort of issue. It is written well, in perfectly rhymed abab quatrains. The imagery is striking. The thoughts are carried eloquently, if a bit melodramatically. Of course, that is your specialty, and you do it well.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Hah, yes, it is a bit melodramatic. But I've always felt some topic need to be addressed a such. Like television news anchor who are required to put on far too much make-up to look good on tv, I felt this particular topic needed to be a bit over-the-top as well to highlight the potential dangers it presents.
Thanks for your insights and fantastic review, Tom...
Comment from S A Bullen
Dean, this is excellent. I know each writer has a picture in their mind as to how they would like their piece to be perceived, but we each see different things. In this poem I see graffiti and ' in whose pale hand it is written' suggesting to me that the artist is lacking life (health and colour). The 'crimson blood taken hold by gravity' suggesting their lives are doom and gloom and on a downhill path. Cruel word scrawled mercilessly in pain.... a visual expression of the pain in their hearts. Encased in ebony and embraced in death. The blackness of death. This is really good. Sheryn :-) or I should do :-(
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Dean, this is excellent. I know each writer has a picture in their mind as to how they would like their piece to be perceived, but we each see different things. In this poem I see graffiti and ' in whose pale hand it is written' suggesting to me that the artist is lacking life (health and colour). The 'crimson blood taken hold by gravity' suggesting their lives are doom and gloom and on a downhill path. Cruel word scrawled mercilessly in pain.... a visual expression of the pain in their hearts. Encased in ebony and embraced in death. The blackness of death. This is really good. Sheryn :-) or I should do :-(
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Hey, I'll take :-), or, :-( all day long when it's accompanied by a fabulous review like this, Sheryn!
Thanks so much!
Comment from joneau2
A very thought provoking write, the accompanying effects professional and enhancing, as always. That ability is what I wish to obtain. Again, one hell of an effort.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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A very thought provoking write, the accompanying effects professional and enhancing, as always. That ability is what I wish to obtain. Again, one hell of an effort.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Hey, coming form you, joneau2, this really means a lot!
Thanks...
Comment from Darkhorse555
the hand writing in pale hands on the wall as you began shaking my friend as the thick blood runs down the wall in a bleak future call in a cleaner excellent piece my old friend
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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the hand writing in pale hands on the wall as you began shaking my friend as the thick blood runs down the wall in a bleak future call in a cleaner excellent piece my old friend
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thanks, DH, I truly appreciate your fantastic comments, my friend!
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good perfect rhyming with wall/all...written/frostbitten...gravity/depravity...pain/gain...harm/alarm...walls/halls...yourself/shelf. Good alliteration with cerebral/cortex...simple/sound/shrill. The photo in this piece captures the readers attention but it is the descriptive words that hold it to the end. Good write my brother.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Good use of the abab rhyme scheme. Good perfect rhyming with wall/all...written/frostbitten...gravity/depravity...pain/gain...harm/alarm...walls/halls...yourself/shelf. Good alliteration with cerebral/cortex...simple/sound/shrill. The photo in this piece captures the readers attention but it is the descriptive words that hold it to the end. Good write my brother.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2013
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Thank you very much, Righteous Riter, my friend. I sincerely appreciate you giving me your insights on this one!