Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Kuta Moon, Part 1"Murder Mystery
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Comment from rtobaygo
Excellent flow and continuity. Good balance between showing and telling, Characters and dialogue very believable. Background setting well done. Did detect any spags.
Thoroughly enjoyed reading your post.
Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Excellent flow and continuity. Good balance between showing and telling, Characters and dialogue very believable. Background setting well done. Did detect any spags.
Thoroughly enjoyed reading your post.
Kudos!
Take care,
Ray
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, Ray. Thank you much for your gracious and very generus review. I'm always glad when I can get a post out without too many SPAG's! Sure appreciate you taking time to read.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Norbanus
Another excellent advancement of the story, but the reader is left with little more than guesses to work our a solution.
With a little luck, we'll run into someone who knows more than they think they do." (super phrase)
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Another excellent advancement of the story, but the reader is left with little more than guesses to work our a solution.
With a little luck, we'll run into someone who knows more than they think they do." (super phrase)
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Our ominiscent killer is not going to like the idea of the Feds AT ALL! Contrary to the usual, this serial killer is focused on getting the attention of one man alone.
Thanks, N, for your continued support and encouragement. I really appreciate it.
Bev
Comment from robina1978
A federal agent gets now also assigned to the job. Jana says he is good, but not perfect as nobody is. They are going to alter their story a bit when talking, not in the official report.
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A federal agent gets now also assigned to the job. Jana says he is good, but not perfect as nobody is. They are going to alter their story a bit when talking, not in the official report.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, Ine. Thanks so much for this excellent review. I appreciate your support and interest. :0) Bev
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very welcome Bev as always, Ine
Comment from misscookie
Anohter great chapter my friend
filled with all sort of drama and who how and whys even a few maybes.
There was never a dull moment.
thank you for sharing.
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Anohter great chapter my friend
filled with all sort of drama and who how and whys even a few maybes.
There was never a dull moment.
thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hiya, Miss Cookie. Thank you so much for faithfully following my novel. I sure appreciate your generosity and support. Hugs, Bev
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It is my pleasure. until next time.
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your very welcome, until next time.
Comment from GregoryCody
I think this was a great read. Very well written and spaced correctly. The on,y thing is that people tell me to space a line between quotes. Is this true for all books or just opinion? There was just one part that didn't. Third prgh. Great read!
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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I think this was a great read. Very well written and spaced correctly. The on,y thing is that people tell me to space a line between quotes. Is this true for all books or just opinion? There was just one part that didn't. Third prgh. Great read!
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, Gregory. Thank you much for stopping by to read my chapter. I've gotten conflicting advice on the quotations. I use a professional grammar checker now (Grammarly) and tend to go by whatever it recommends.
Thanks again for your generosity and encouragement.
Warm regards, Bev
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Hmm, well I'd love your take on it. I write humorous essays (memoirs) about my mother like "The Polaroid Bubble" up here (Im compiling into a book) and I think it looks better spaced out after people told me but I don't know which is correct. I had a professional editor go through it and she did Not space them. Hmmm.
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There's so much conflicting information out there on certain topics. And I am far from being any kind of expert LOL. I've been fortunate to have gotten mostly good advice from my fans. :0) Bev
Comment from Sam Mendonca
Very well written with the writer's usage of descriptive wording bringing the reader along with the story-line.
Your characters in the story are very interesting and leaves the reader wondering where the story-line will go from here.
Nice writing. :)
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Very well written with the writer's usage of descriptive wording bringing the reader along with the story-line.
Your characters in the story are very interesting and leaves the reader wondering where the story-line will go from here.
Nice writing. :)
Comment Written 29-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, San. Thanks for your generous and encouraging review. I appreciate you stopping by! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from barkingdog
End of Part One. Do we go somewhere else now? I'm wondering what Part Two is if not a continuation of this.
Maybe this Dred fellow takes the story in a new direction. I like his name. I see Stallone's character Judge Dred. Did you see that futuristic movie?
With Jana's reaction, Dred's going to be an interesting force.
Another fine chapter, Bev. Your sixes are in jail again. LOL
Good luck in the BOM.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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End of Part One. Do we go somewhere else now? I'm wondering what Part Two is if not a continuation of this.
Maybe this Dred fellow takes the story in a new direction. I like his name. I see Stallone's character Judge Dred. Did you see that futuristic movie?
With Jana's reaction, Dred's going to be an interesting force.
Another fine chapter, Bev. Your sixes are in jail again. LOL
Good luck in the BOM.
:) ellen
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hiya, Ellen. I did not see that Stallone movie. Here I thought I was being original LOL. Dred's appearance will be a catalyst but he's not the only one. hehehehe
Love it - my sixes are in jail. Thanks for the thought of giving this write one. I really appreciate it, Ellen.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from wordsfromsue
Bev, I'm reading this in the dark with a cat on my lap. The dark lends to the spooky atmosphere!
I can't believe you're leaving us hanging like this. I want part 2 NOW!
I really liked your descriptions of Rick and Jana in the car. You're good with descriptor writing.
Well, I'll have to be patient till next time.
Hmm, did I see a veiled reference to Donald Harvey? He was a nurse who snuffed out a lot of patients that way, creepy thing!
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Bev, I'm reading this in the dark with a cat on my lap. The dark lends to the spooky atmosphere!
I can't believe you're leaving us hanging like this. I want part 2 NOW!
I really liked your descriptions of Rick and Jana in the car. You're good with descriptor writing.
Well, I'll have to be patient till next time.
Hmm, did I see a veiled reference to Donald Harvey? He was a nurse who snuffed out a lot of patients that way, creepy thing!
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hello Sue. Part two is in the hopper now. I promise to deliver more chills! Thanks so much, buddy, for your so-generous rating and lovely review. Your encouragement and support means a lot to me. Hugs, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
It appears there is a witness who saw someone standing over a victim. However, the description is nearly unbelievable. So much so they are afraid to tell anyone for fear it would do nothing to help the case, since there is much prejudice toward those who live on the reservation. Now the Feds have arrived. They really feel the pressure is on them now.
I wonder if the Feds will be able to solve this case. I'm anxious to read more, Bev.
Hugs,
April
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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It appears there is a witness who saw someone standing over a victim. However, the description is nearly unbelievable. So much so they are afraid to tell anyone for fear it would do nothing to help the case, since there is much prejudice toward those who live on the reservation. Now the Feds have arrived. They really feel the pressure is on them now.
I wonder if the Feds will be able to solve this case. I'm anxious to read more, Bev.
Hugs,
April
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 29-May-2013
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Hi, April. The Feds appearing at this time will certainly be a catalyst. Thank you so much for your faithful following of my story and generous review. I really appreciate, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Great as always. I found no errors, just good writing and more curiosity over who is doing this! I can't stand it. But I will try to be patient and wait. =} Rox
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Great as always. I found no errors, just good writing and more curiosity over who is doing this! I can't stand it. But I will try to be patient and wait. =} Rox
Comment Written 28-May-2013
reply by the author on 28-May-2013
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Thanks so much, Rox. I sure appreciate the generous review and words of encouragement. Warm regards, Bev