Comment from Gungalo

Exceptional

What a beautiful kid's story. It is full of fun any kid would love to have. The wording is such that it be well understood and I had fun reading it too. Sigh, this is precious:

They woke in the morning to a bright sunny day,
And went for a swim before packing away.
Then they had breakfast and one final song,
Before Daddy Mouse said, 'It's time we were gone.'
Timmy and Tommy ran up to their dad,
Shouting, 'This is the best time that we've ever had!

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012

Thank you, Gungalo! I always appreciate your reviews, they mean such a lot to me. I am so glad you liked it! xsx

reply by Gungalo on 28-Jan-2012

Kids will love it girl.

Comment from Linda England Bonam

Excellent

What a cute story that you weaved into your poem. I enjoyed reading it very much. You did such a good job with all the conversations, which isn't too easy in a poem! I am impressed!

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 Comment Written 28-Jan-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012

Thank you, Linda! I am so pleased you liked my story, and I appreciate your comments, thank you! xsx