Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Rejected"for various occasions
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Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem flows so smoothly. I love how it builds up anticipation with every line! The romance with some restraint makes it so powerful! The ending caught me off guard - perfect. Yes, that last line is just brilliant.
This was a joy to read!
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Your poem flows so smoothly. I love how it builds up anticipation with every line! The romance with some restraint makes it so powerful! The ending caught me off guard - perfect. Yes, that last line is just brilliant.
This was a joy to read!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from MissMerri
This is so cute and so cleverly written... I wish I had a six to give today. The sonnet is perfectly rendered with flawless meter and rhyme, and the story, told from the POV of the green banana, has all sorts of merit woven into its cleverly conceived lines. I loved it, start to finish, and of course, after the surprise ending, wanted to read it again just to enjoy and appreciate the excellent writing. I suspect there is a prize in your future. MM
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This is so cute and so cleverly written... I wish I had a six to give today. The sonnet is perfectly rendered with flawless meter and rhyme, and the story, told from the POV of the green banana, has all sorts of merit woven into its cleverly conceived lines. I loved it, start to finish, and of course, after the surprise ending, wanted to read it again just to enjoy and appreciate the excellent writing. I suspect there is a prize in your future. MM
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Unrequired love writing prompt. This poem was very apeeling. I don't care for squishy love poems and this one had a firmer tone. Thanks for sharing.
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An excellent entry for the Unrequired love writing prompt. This poem was very apeeling. I don't care for squishy love poems and this one had a firmer tone. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Sanku
This speaks of unrequited love .I liked the closing couplet very much .The not ripe enough!! They come after series of lustful longings This is written in the style of mock heroic poems ,i think Great idea..
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This speaks of unrequited love .I liked the closing couplet very much .The not ripe enough!! They come after series of lustful longings This is written in the style of mock heroic poems ,i think Great idea..
Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This form is very similar to the Awdl Sonnet that includes internal rhyming on certain syllables. I published a book of Awdl Sonnets around 4 years ago. I found your sonnet to be a delightful read, well metered and rhymed and I enjoyed reading something a bit different here on Fanstory, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2025
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This form is very similar to the Awdl Sonnet that includes internal rhyming on certain syllables. I published a book of Awdl Sonnets around 4 years ago. I found your sonnet to be a delightful read, well metered and rhymed and I enjoyed reading something a bit different here on Fanstory, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2025
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I just can't help myself when writing rhymes, as every single time, a tune appears.
A sign my mind is caught up in designs, as music can sometimes dispel my fears.
This must be you? (It looks like your pic here, on the cover). Did you ever try setting of them to music? I immediately heard in my mind this stanza set to a melody in the folk style of the 70s (probably Carol King, maybe David Gates).
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Hi there,
Yes, that is me, and no, I haven't set my rhymes to music. I appreciate your interest here and I wish you luck with your lovely Sonnet x x x
