the ants
Dodoitsu poem33 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
ciao!
As long as they stay outside, I have no issues with ants.
Like bees, they are organized and very efficient. They know there is strength in unity something we humans have yet to learn.
Ants decompose organic waste, turn the soil and are a source of food for many other creatures.
They are very strong and can carry 50 times their own weight.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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ciao!
As long as they stay outside, I have no issues with ants.
Like bees, they are organized and very efficient. They know there is strength in unity something we humans have yet to learn.
Ants decompose organic waste, turn the soil and are a source of food for many other creatures.
They are very strong and can carry 50 times their own weight.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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yes they are organised and efficient .humans can learn a lot from them.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
It seems so obtuse to write as required for this form (dodoitsu) of Japanese poetry. It makes it challenging (the per line syllable count) when use to reading English poetry. Good luck. It seems you have met the requirements.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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It seems so obtuse to write as required for this form (dodoitsu) of Japanese poetry. It makes it challenging (the per line syllable count) when use to reading English poetry. Good luck. It seems you have met the requirements.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Santha,
This is a well written poem for the club. It uses the personification of ants.
It also seems a metaphor for soldiers at war.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Hi Santha,
This is a well written poem for the club. It uses the personification of ants.
It also seems a metaphor for soldiers at war.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.
Joan
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much...
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You are most kindly welcome, Santha.
Joan
