Loss
The heartache of bereavement ...36 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
You nailed this one, Wendy! I've sat on that bench, surrounded by pain and loneliness, filled with questions about why and how I was supposed to go on. All I could see or feel was darkness. But in the end, thankfully, the good memories brought light back into my life.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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You nailed this one, Wendy! I've sat on that bench, surrounded by pain and loneliness, filled with questions about why and how I was supposed to go on. All I could see or feel was darkness. But in the end, thankfully, the good memories brought light back into my life.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Yes, I thought you would relate. My brother-in-law was similar, absolutely bereft, and in cold, lonely darkness for a long time. Thank you for an understanding and supportive review.
Wendy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
shadows and light, warmth and cold - you've tied these things together well, and I think this is a sad but well-thought out 3-line poem. I wonder if others realize the thought that you put into these seemingly easy challenges.
Good luck, Wendy - I'm cheering for you.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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shadows and light, warmth and cold - you've tied these things together well, and I think this is a sad but well-thought out 3-line poem. I wonder if others realize the thought that you put into these seemingly easy challenges.
Good luck, Wendy - I'm cheering for you.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2024
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Thank you Pam! Super review. I was thinking of my brother-in-law here, and his wife was truly the sunshine and warmth of his life. He was so bereft in his cold, dark, lonely world when she died quite young. And no, people probably don't realise the thought involved - but that's okay. I appreciate your good wishes and cheers!
Wendy
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Wendy
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Wow. This is kind of depressing. Sounds like somebody died. That's not necessarily depressing if they go to the right place.
First he's grieving, and then he loses the light and the warmth of the sun, and then he dies
Complete cycle
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Hi, Wendy
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Wow. This is kind of depressing. Sounds like somebody died. That's not necessarily depressing if they go to the right place.
First he's grieving, and then he loses the light and the warmth of the sun, and then he dies
Complete cycle
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the very kind review. With the death of his wife, who held the warmth, light and sunshine, he is now struggling in darkness.
Wendy
Comment from Paul McFarland
It is hard for me to review shorties, but you have done a good job with this one. All three lines convey a very dark mood, and the picture goes very well with the poem.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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It is hard for me to review shorties, but you have done a good job with this one. All three lines convey a very dark mood, and the picture goes very well with the poem.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much Paul. I always appreciate your reviews, and I agree - a short poem is hard to review.
Wendy
Comment from BOO ghost
Oh, a three-line poetry contest. Notice the s letter alliterations coupled into this poem. The black words match the picture dark shadows. It's a dark place losing a loved one. Darkness fills the cold night when the nocturnal creatures lurk in search of food or fodder. This picture sets the theme. Heaven is hung in black tonight. But a new star is born, as a comet streaks the sky. Well done!
BOO;
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Oh, a three-line poetry contest. Notice the s letter alliterations coupled into this poem. The black words match the picture dark shadows. It's a dark place losing a loved one. Darkness fills the cold night when the nocturnal creatures lurk in search of food or fodder. This picture sets the theme. Heaven is hung in black tonight. But a new star is born, as a comet streaks the sky. Well done!
BOO;
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you for reviewing. Her death has caused the blackness- she was his light, warmth, and sunshine.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
Great use of alliteration and consonance in your poem. I also like assonance of "shroud" and "surround" which echoes how grief has enveloped the mourner. Best wishes in the contest!
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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Great use of alliteration and consonance in your poem. I also like assonance of "shroud" and "surround" which echoes how grief has enveloped the mourner. Best wishes in the contest!
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Comment Written 18-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much. A lovely review!
Wendy
