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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This was an extremely interesting chapter, full of variety and action. I wonder what they were going to do to that intruder? kay
to safely do it > to do it safely

 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Thank you for the kind review. I searched this area and couldn't find it. I read it twice. I'll go to the manuscript and do a search for it, then correct it.
Comment from Ben Colder
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Though I have missed many chapters in your story, I still find this interesting enough to continue. I do hope they arrest everone in volved and bring the girls home to safety. Good one Barb.

 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Please don't ever quit reading my work. You mean a lot to me. Thank you.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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I know I am late to the party but finally had a chance to read one of your posts. Apparently I will need to read more because I was enthralled even though I was coming in blind. Very well written and entertaining. Engaging characters.

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 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Begin Again
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You certainly ended this chapter with a bang! Since Sami recognized him that means a lot of problems have been created, especially if he also recognized her. They will have to keep him, but where and how? Great job, Barbara.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Noah has a plan. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That was some ending, Barbara. So this man is one of the kidnappers, and now he knows where Sami is, he can't be allowed to go free. So what are they going to do with him? I felt sorry for poor Jasper, my neighbour in Spain had a great dane, and she was the sweetest giant I've known. Sadly she died when she was only 10. Well done. I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra

 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Noah has a plan. LOL Thank you for the kind review. I grew up with one, Danes are truly a gentle giant.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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You've crafted a tense and gripping scene with the unexpected intrusion into Sami's room. The suspense was thick as we watched the reaction to the threat. The dialogue was perfect. It shows the sense of urgency and danger. Sami's quick thinking and Jasper's protective instincts was great. I thought Noah's actions showed his leadership. The revelation about Ryan's identity was a surprsie. Great job at building suspense and keeping the momentum of the story moving forward!

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 Comment Written 05-May-2024


reply by the author on 05-May-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.