A Long Farewell
A lonely cemetery visit40 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I could hear these heavy faltering foot steps in the graveyard. It's echoing the grief of losing loved ones. Even the old head stones felt sad for the grieving person.
Well done.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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I could hear these heavy faltering foot steps in the graveyard. It's echoing the grief of losing loved ones. Even the old head stones felt sad for the grieving person.
Well done.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you for a the review and the comments. I glad you felt the words conveyed emotion.
Beth
Comment from Teri7
Beth, This is a very well written 3 Line poem you have penned about a visit to the cemetery. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery that fits so well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Beth, This is a very well written 3 Line poem you have penned about a visit to the cemetery. You used great descriptive words and very nice imagery that fits so well with your words. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you Teri. I really appreciate the review and you nice comments.
Beth
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nice three line poem that you have written for the contest. I wish you the very best in the contest. I hope that you had a wonderful Thanksgiving with your family and that you will have a delightful time with them come Christmas time. Did
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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This is a very nice three line poem that you have written for the contest. I wish you the very best in the contest. I hope that you had a wonderful Thanksgiving with your family and that you will have a delightful time with them come Christmas time. Did
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you Patricia. I appreciate the review and contest. It was nice being with my kid and grandkids for Thanksgiving. I hope you had a nice one too.
Betj
Comment from Ben Colder
Good one, Beth. These 3 liners are sometimes hard to do. You did well with this one. Reminds me I need to place flowers on the wife's grave. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Good one, Beth. These 3 liners are sometimes hard to do. You did well with this one. Reminds me I need to place flowers on the wife's grave. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thanks for review and comment. I don't like writing these short poem but I'm trying to challenge myself to try them. My husband is in the National Cemetery and the kids like to go there on day when the flags or wreaths on the graves. I think there are thousands of graves and they will all get wreaths at Christmas thanks to donations.
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Comment from Lea Tonin1
That's pretty cool. I really like this. Especially your last line really grabs it makes it a nice package! I think this is actually a very powerful woman. Such a short amount of space to write in so it really deserves to find a smart so and I hope you have the greatest evening!
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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That's pretty cool. I really like this. Especially your last line really grabs it makes it a nice package! I think this is actually a very powerful woman. Such a short amount of space to write in so it really deserves to find a smart so and I hope you have the greatest evening!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you Lea. I'm not fond of writing short poem but I'm to do it anyway. I'm glad you liked it and I'm really pleased with six stars.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
Due to my many adventures in the Health System, a short while ago I finally arranged for my wife's headstone, so my faltering footsteps will be among those stones often soon. It's all part of Life that God grants us and there's no other path to take.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Due to my many adventures in the Health System, a short while ago I finally arranged for my wife's headstone, so my faltering footsteps will be among those stones often soon. It's all part of Life that God grants us and there's no other path to take.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you Jim. I'm so sorry the love of you live is there instead of with you. Of course, only her body is there but it where you will go to think about her and remember the good times.
Beth
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Thank you so much for your kind words.
Comment from Navada
Everything about this, from the "faltering footsteps" to the "aging stones" to the colour choice to the image of an isolated grieving individual alone by a fresh grave, speakes of sadness and loneliness. It is very evocative and impactful. Best of luck for the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Everything about this, from the "faltering footsteps" to the "aging stones" to the colour choice to the image of an isolated grieving individual alone by a fresh grave, speakes of sadness and loneliness. It is very evocative and impactful. Best of luck for the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you sense what I was hoping for in these short words. I really appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
What a beautiful and moving image, excellent presentation too, and your poem is likewise beautiful and moving. Three meaningful (and challenging) lines. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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What a beautiful and moving image, excellent presentation too, and your poem is likewise beautiful and moving. Three meaningful (and challenging) lines. Well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank Wendy, I really appreciate the review and you thoughtful comments.
Beth
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Gravesights and headstones, I do not get. You pay as much to leave this world as your parents paid to get you into it. And how often are they visited? Christmas? Easter? My attitude is the deceased has moved on to a life without suffering unless they made really poor choices and did not seek forgiveness.
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reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Gravesights and headstones, I do not get. You pay as much to leave this world as your parents paid to get you into it. And how often are they visited? Christmas? Easter? My attitude is the deceased has moved on to a life without suffering unless they made really poor choices and did not seek forgiveness.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Don't tell anyone but I feel the same way. However, a lot of people are comforted by visiting their loved ones graves and I'm trying to see things from others point of view. My husband's grave is in the National Cemetery and my children seem to like to go there. It is beautiful. Especially with the flags and Christmas wreaths. I know he isn't there, but if he could was able to know we visit, he would like knowing we care to remember him that way.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Your poem is so true. When a person visits a cemetery, many of the stones are from years ago. You wonder where your relatives are buried and the story behind their past. So you set out to do research or family history and find out the location.
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reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Your poem is so true. When a person visits a cemetery, many of the stones are from years ago. You wonder where your relatives are buried and the story behind their past. So you set out to do research or family history and find out the location.
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Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thank you Rosemary. I visited many cemeterys around where I grew up and after I got into genealogy, I realised I shared DNA with many of the graves there. I wonder what those people were truely like and if they would have liked me.
