Santa's Little Secret, Part III
The Authorized Hidden History of Santa Claus31 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved this. It was more than a history of Santa Claus. It was a family saga. I really loved the transformation part where the reins were literally handed over to Ajkin. This was rich with imagery. Loved how you described the burning coals pulsing the heat out. There was a bit of magic in every section you posted but this last one really gave this reader the full experience. Great job, Jay. Found 2 spags. One a wonky quote mark."it was a modest Adobe house, said ...
Can't for the life of me find the other but I know it was when Anya was speaking.
Brava! I liked your story. Gretchen
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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I loved this. It was more than a history of Santa Claus. It was a family saga. I really loved the transformation part where the reins were literally handed over to Ajkin. This was rich with imagery. Loved how you described the burning coals pulsing the heat out. There was a bit of magic in every section you posted but this last one really gave this reader the full experience. Great job, Jay. Found 2 spags. One a wonky quote mark."it was a modest Adobe house, said ...
Can't for the life of me find the other but I know it was when Anya was speaking.
Brava! I liked your story. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much, Gretchen. I fixed the quote problem. Thanks for pointing it out. Do you recall if the one you couldn't find had to do with a missing quote as well? I'm so happy you found the conclusion so satisfying.
Jay
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I believe it was a quote mark missing. It was very enjoyable. Gretchen