Approaching Storms
a Kyrielle poetic form46 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A cleverly worded, well rhymed and metered write Melissa and I loved the imagery and the anticipation of the storm here, a joy to read, a skilful poem showcasing your talent, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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A cleverly worded, well rhymed and metered write Melissa and I loved the imagery and the anticipation of the storm here, a joy to read, a skilful poem showcasing your talent, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi Dolly. Thank you so much for the wonderful comments. I really like the kyrielle form and thought I would bring it out and take it for a spin. :). Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Sugar: excellent images, rhymes, iambic beat and photo of the
storms. Our state of Minnesota had rainstorms last week with
85 mph winds, six cities hit with destruction. We had a downpour of rain and hail. Our neighboring city of 15 minutes away lost power. Our roof
was patched before the storm so we didn't get water in our house.
Stay safe. flylikeaneagle ********************
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Sugar: excellent images, rhymes, iambic beat and photo of the
storms. Our state of Minnesota had rainstorms last week with
85 mph winds, six cities hit with destruction. We had a downpour of rain and hail. Our neighboring city of 15 minutes away lost power. Our roof
was patched before the storm so we didn't get water in our house.
Stay safe. flylikeaneagle ********************
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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thank you so very much for your lovely comments and review. I am glad to hear that you weathered your storm with no damage...Summer storms can be just awful.
Melissa
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Sugarray77: I like storms when I'm inside. Tornado sirens went off at 2am one night to warn the campers at campsites. I like rain especially when I'm safe inside. My flowers enjoy the rain water - God's holy water. Enjoy! Great poem !!! nancy
Comment from Carol Clark2
Well done, Melissa! Great descriptions of the coming storm. I especially like blackish ink, white lances, and boiling clouds that can't hold the strain. Beautiful imagery and wordplay! The repeated line fits wonderfully in each verse. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Well done, Melissa! Great descriptions of the coming storm. I especially like blackish ink, white lances, and boiling clouds that can't hold the strain. Beautiful imagery and wordplay! The repeated line fits wonderfully in each verse. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you, sweet Carol, for the lovely review. I am so delighted that you liked it. So appreciate you.
Melissa
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You're welcome. My pleasure to read your poetry. Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from June Sargent
That is a nasty looking storm - and your kyrielle captures the drama perfectly. I enjoy kyrielles with its repeating line - it builds anticipation. Hurricane just began - hopefully it will not be an active season!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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That is a nasty looking storm - and your kyrielle captures the drama perfectly. I enjoy kyrielles with its repeating line - it builds anticipation. Hurricane just began - hopefully it will not be an active season!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi June. Thanks so much. I tried to build tension into this poem with the approach and subsequent drops pinging on the window pane. It was fun to try it. Its been a while and I just hoped I could write a decent poem. Thanks again, June! Hugs!
Melissa
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Hi June. Thanks so much. I tried to build tension into this poem with the approach and subsequent drops pinging on the window pane. It was fun to try it. Its been a while and I just hoped I could write a decent poem. Thanks again, June! Hugs!
Melissa
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Hi June. Thanks so much. I tried to build tension into this poem with the approach and subsequent drops pinging on the window pane. It was fun to try it. Its been a while and I just hoped I could write a decent poem. Thanks again, June! Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This exactly describes the coming storms here in Florida, sans the "hit the dust." Horizons filled with blackish ink - beautifully describes a coming storm.
We'll done, and I love the picture.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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This exactly describes the coming storms here in Florida, sans the "hit the dust." Horizons filled with blackish ink - beautifully describes a coming storm.
We'll done, and I love the picture.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hello Pam. Thanks so much for the lovely comments. I am so glad you liked it!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
A nicely written Kyrielle Melissa, you are very good at these, you've put a very good theme to the repetitive last line, which is smooth and so very brilliant with its Language, rhyming and structure, well done My friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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A nicely written Kyrielle Melissa, you are very good at these, you've put a very good theme to the repetitive last line, which is smooth and so very brilliant with its Language, rhyming and structure, well done My friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Roy. Thanks so very much!! I am delighted you like it. I have always been fond of the kyrielle form and I thought I would take one out and dust it off. LOL. Hugs!
Melissa
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Excellent job Melissa
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Quite an accomplishment within the Kyrielle form. I like the link between pain and pane in the first and last stanza. The rhymes were well done and didn't seem forced.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Quite an accomplishment within the Kyrielle form. I like the link between pain and pane in the first and last stanza. The rhymes were well done and didn't seem forced.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Tim. Thanks so much. I am glad you like this kyrielle. There are a lot of good rhyming choices with ane/ain my mind was going in so many directions with theme and progression. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your kyrielle is excellent in all respects--skillfully and accurately written
and vividly descriptive of the sounds and actions in nature leading up to a good rain. Effective use of personification
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Your kyrielle is excellent in all respects--skillfully and accurately written
and vividly descriptive of the sounds and actions in nature leading up to a good rain. Effective use of personification
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Janice. Thank you so much for the lovely comments and review. I'm glad you like the kyrielle!! Hugs.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
As a keen observer of natural phenomena I would say you had this just about right and if you don't get under cover very soon you are going to get very wet
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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As a keen observer of natural phenomena I would say you had this just about right and if you don't get under cover very soon you are going to get very wet
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hahaha, thanks Jim. I looked at my poetry for the MEF class a while back and saw the Kyrielle that you taught. Thought I would take it for a spin in the storm. LOL. Much appreciated, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Yikes! We had a lovely vacation in the panhandle and when we returned home, we hit a terrible storm about an hour out. Whew. This weather can really be bad.
Sending you my best, hoping this poem is just a remembrance.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Yikes! We had a lovely vacation in the panhandle and when we returned home, we hit a terrible storm about an hour out. Whew. This weather can really be bad.
Sending you my best, hoping this poem is just a remembrance.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Sally. Thanks. So glad you all got home safely. Yes, this storm happened a while back and I'm glad to say that everything is safe and sound here. I appreciate your great comments. Hugs, sweet friend.
Melissa