God's Dilemma
Return of Patrick McKee39 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. You should win the contest.
Great imagery. It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
The form is well executed and follows the contest rules. ..
Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Excellent poem entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. You should win the contest.
Great imagery. It flows well with beautifully descriptive words that paint a clear mental picture.
The form is well executed and follows the contest rules. ..
Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy Blue Rose
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Gypsy. This took a "hell" of a long time to write.
Comment from robyn corum
Paul,
Interesting! So, we don't really know if God is pleased that He has fewer things to worry with up there in Heaven or not. Maybe He and His crew are actually getting to enjoy a little break. Who knows? fun stuff!
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Paul,
Interesting! So, we don't really know if God is pleased that He has fewer things to worry with up there in Heaven or not. Maybe He and His crew are actually getting to enjoy a little break. Who knows? fun stuff!
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Robyn. God has always had problems with us Irish.
Comment from jenintorre
I would give you 7 stars for this if I could and if this does not win the competition then there is simply something seriously wrong. This poem is hilarious and so clever.
I particularly like, 'sinners on the lower deck' cure aids T shirt'
and 'where in hell he was'. Brilliant!!!! Love Jen.
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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I would give you 7 stars for this if I could and if this does not win the competition then there is simply something seriously wrong. This poem is hilarious and so clever.
I particularly like, 'sinners on the lower deck' cure aids T shirt'
and 'where in hell he was'. Brilliant!!!! Love Jen.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Jen. You are too kind, but I love it.
Comment from C.A.Currie
OMG! I laughed so hard I could hardly breathe! I am thinking that Pat McKee is a politician - but I could be wrong. A google search had several results - but the politician appeared to be the best fit. LOL Thanks for sharing. I would become a fan but FS only lets you do that so many times in a day - so perhaps another time..
Hugs & Blessings from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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OMG! I laughed so hard I could hardly breathe! I am thinking that Pat McKee is a politician - but I could be wrong. A google search had several results - but the politician appeared to be the best fit. LOL Thanks for sharing. I would become a fan but FS only lets you do that so many times in a day - so perhaps another time..
Hugs & Blessings from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Christine. Stay calm. Breathe in. Breathe out.
Comment from pome lover
well, I haven't read the others, but this one is quite fascinating.
To tell a long story is verse is challenging and you not only met it, but the reader can see the fun you had writing it.
If ole Pat should happen to want more company the present administration should be there before too long.
This is an enjoyable, original piece.
Katharine
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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well, I haven't read the others, but this one is quite fascinating.
To tell a long story is verse is challenging and you not only met it, but the reader can see the fun you had writing it.
If ole Pat should happen to want more company the present administration should be there before too long.
This is an enjoyable, original piece.
Katharine
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Katherine. You are right about the present administration.
Comment from Lilly Flowers
What an extraordinary, creative poem. Because it's posted under 'humor,' I knew it wasn't going to be a commentary on all the evil in the world, so I was anxious to see where it would lead.
I'm glad there weren't more evil people who were sent to hell, but rather that hell itself had changed. That line about God hiring Pat McKee is a hoot. I loved the whimsy! Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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What an extraordinary, creative poem. Because it's posted under 'humor,' I knew it wasn't going to be a commentary on all the evil in the world, so I was anxious to see where it would lead.
I'm glad there weren't more evil people who were sent to hell, but rather that hell itself had changed. That line about God hiring Pat McKee is a hoot. I loved the whimsy! Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Thanks, Lilly. We may have to check on old Pat in an other poem to see how he's doing.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Paul a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your Rhyming poem contest entry. It was a entertaining and fun piece of poetic storytelling. Good job and good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Hello Paul a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed your Rhyming poem contest entry. It was a entertaining and fun piece of poetic storytelling. Good job and good luck in the contest. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks for the review. I just couldn't let Patrick rest. This was the fourth poem about him.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very innovative. Great rhyming and imagery.
But I fail to understand why the direct attack on a living person, and by extension, an entire nation. Why insult the Irish and feed the English/Irish animus? What if someone wrote the same of a New England Yankee?
I liked your poem. It would be better with a nondescript enemy. This site could be filled with anti Trump material, but what would be the gain?
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reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Very innovative. Great rhyming and imagery.
But I fail to understand why the direct attack on a living person, and by extension, an entire nation. Why insult the Irish and feed the English/Irish animus? What if someone wrote the same of a New England Yankee?
I liked your poem. It would be better with a nondescript enemy. This site could be filled with anti Trump material, but what would be the gain?
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Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks for the review, Wayne. Since I am Irish, I thought I might get away with poems like this. This is the fourth poem about old Patrick.
Comment from Fleedleflump
This is huge amounts of fun all the way through. You manage to tell a legible tale without breaking format, which is in itself impressive, but it also happens to be clever and entertaining.
No nits or notes.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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This is huge amounts of fun all the way through. You manage to tell a legible tale without breaking format, which is in itself impressive, but it also happens to be clever and entertaining.
No nits or notes.
I very much enjoyed the read.
Mike
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Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thanks, Mike. I can't seem to get rid of old Patrick.