Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Spiritus Unum"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Thatguypk
This is a very good and very clever play on the biblical notion of the twelve disciples, and I like the modernization that you have included women in the numbers. Very forward-thinking. Well done. An enjoyable, and I suppose a thought-provoking piece.
PK
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
This is a very good and very clever play on the biblical notion of the twelve disciples, and I like the modernization that you have included women in the numbers. Very forward-thinking. Well done. An enjoyable, and I suppose a thought-provoking piece.
PK
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Smiling back!
Comment from Susan Newell
This is a fascinating tale about "rebooting" Christianity to start fresh without all the corruption, ritual, pageantry, vestments, etc. that seem to have taken over and driven people away from the original message. Very well written and intriguing.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
This is a fascinating tale about "rebooting" Christianity to start fresh without all the corruption, ritual, pageantry, vestments, etc. that seem to have taken over and driven people away from the original message. Very well written and intriguing.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Hi Susan, thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is very interesting. I wish you had more words to work with. I would like to see the responses from the twelve, and more about the how, whys and more background on why these twelve were chosen.
Good entry.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
Hmm, this is very interesting. I wish you had more words to work with. I would like to see the responses from the twelve, and more about the how, whys and more background on why these twelve were chosen.
Good entry.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Yes, one take would be to interview each one to replace the 12 apostles that would be quite a trick.
Comment from rockinm76233
I enjoyed your story very much. It brings home many things that I'm sure the Lord would love for us to do. I like the way you used the three figures and the message they brought.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
I enjoyed your story very much. It brings home many things that I'm sure the Lord would love for us to do. I like the way you used the three figures and the message they brought.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for these comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Spiritus Unum, is a neat satire on organized religion and the apparent manipulation of what God intended to suit what factions need to do as they want. A new directive to take back the churches is needed.
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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
This story, Spiritus Unum, is a neat satire on organized religion and the apparent manipulation of what God intended to suit what factions need to do as they want. A new directive to take back the churches is needed.
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Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thanks Bill