Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "End of the Farnsworth Line"A complete story in written as a poem.
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Comment from Harambe Unchained
This is an excellent entry in the competition. Just a couple VERY small grammar things for you:
Daughters, he brought up in style. <= I don't think you need this comma and it looks a little bit odd, as if someone was starting to address them in a speech.
I'll see you have a double period at the end. Not sure if you meant for it to be a single or for it to end on an ellipsis. I recommend the former.
Nice job and thank you for the entertaining read. Excellent choice of picture as well. Harambe approved.
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This is an excellent entry in the competition. Just a couple VERY small grammar things for you:
Daughters, he brought up in style. <= I don't think you need this comma and it looks a little bit odd, as if someone was starting to address them in a speech.
I'll see you have a double period at the end. Not sure if you meant for it to be a single or for it to end on an ellipsis. I recommend the former.
Nice job and thank you for the entertaining read. Excellent choice of picture as well. Harambe approved.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and I do appreciate you seeing the two punctuation errors. I'm glad Harambe approves. He looks as though he might be hard to please. He fits right in with my sour faced ladies.
