The Gardens at Weatherbury
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Comment from Bill Schott
This is another revelation within the magical garden. Hmm, an armadillo ninja, that's a new one for sure. Nick new job is proving to be a merry time of discovery. The light tone is quite alluring for a child I'm sure.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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This is another revelation within the magical garden. Hmm, an armadillo ninja, that's a new one for sure. Nick new job is proving to be a merry time of discovery. The light tone is quite alluring for a child I'm sure.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Yeah, this one is aimed at an upper elem/middle school but hopefully enough for the parents to enjoy as well... ? :) :) My other stuff is 'heavier fantasy' ...LOL! ;) :) Thanx! ;)
Comment from country ranch writer
Some days are different than others finding the cabinet beat up lying on the ground with no one around. The garden knome sure got bent out of shape honking he was being blamed for the cabinet being tossed.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Some days are different than others finding the cabinet beat up lying on the ground with no one around. The garden knome sure got bent out of shape honking he was being blamed for the cabinet being tossed.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this one, C-R -- good to hear from you!! ;) Have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sallyo
Good lively chapter, illuminating character and ending on a tasty kind of cliffhanger... I have a couple of suggestions below...
"Hey!" He interjected
"Hey!" he interjected
I realized the cabinet was scratched and dented, like someone had tried to break it open.
I realized the cabinet was scratched and dented, as though someone had tried to break it open.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Good lively chapter, illuminating character and ending on a tasty kind of cliffhanger... I have a couple of suggestions below...
"Hey!" He interjected
"Hey!" he interjected
I realized the cabinet was scratched and dented, like someone had tried to break it open.
I realized the cabinet was scratched and dented, as though someone had tried to break it open.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Thanx so much, Sallyo, for your review and suggestions! ;) Always appreciate both, ma'am -- take care and have a wonderful week! ;) Yvette
Comment from susand3022
Oh! another little silly coming out to play! I love your imagination! When you're all done teaching math, you need to move yourself to the creative writing department of that school! LOL
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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Oh! another little silly coming out to play! I love your imagination! When you're all done teaching math, you need to move yourself to the creative writing department of that school! LOL
Comment Written 01-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2019
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LOL! :) Thanx for dropping in for this little fun one.... I keep telling people that this is intended for younger readers (middle school or maybe even upper elem)...I do hope folks just enjoy this for the fun that it's supposed to be!! ;):) Thanx for you compliment, but I am here to tell you: when this blonde walks away from that school building...I AIN'T EVER going back! ;) :) LOL! Take care! ;) Yvette
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvette. It seems everyone in the shed is riled up. My favorite line of this chapter is the quote from Constantine; "Do I look like the kind of fella that would beat up an unsuspecting cabinet?!" While I was pondering that I caught the pink armadillo. Lots of details in this chapter. Z
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Hello Yvette. It seems everyone in the shed is riled up. My favorite line of this chapter is the quote from Constantine; "Do I look like the kind of fella that would beat up an unsuspecting cabinet?!" While I was pondering that I caught the pink armadillo. Lots of details in this chapter. Z
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Yeah, once we get the know the little pink guy, it's out into the gardens we go..... at least I think that's the plan.... :) :) Take care and have a great Labor Day celebration, sir! ;) Yvette
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If you don't know...he doesn't either?! :)) Z
Comment from lyenochka
Oh-oh, a pink ninja armadillo? That sounds cute! I imagine Mattel wanting to do that merchandising. Good move Nicholas' part to offer to get Constantine's hat but did he intend to open the cabinet?
Some gnome graffiti got in your notes. But we are all so used to them.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Oh-oh, a pink ninja armadillo? That sounds cute! I imagine Mattel wanting to do that merchandising. Good move Nicholas' part to offer to get Constantine's hat but did he intend to open the cabinet?
Some gnome graffiti got in your notes. But we are all so used to them.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the heads-up on the gnomes.... sassy little characters, you know! ;) :) Appreciate your stopping by on this one, Helen -- always enjoy your point of view! ;) :) Take care and enjoy the Labor Day celebrations! ;) Yvette
Comment from Janetsue
This is a 'Fantasy' story and I like it a lot. The interaction between the characters is interesting and believable. Gnomes appear to be a bit touchy, and Constantine is flavoring the tale with an enjoyable level of humor. Write on, my friend!!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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This is a 'Fantasy' story and I like it a lot. The interaction between the characters is interesting and believable. Gnomes appear to be a bit touchy, and Constantine is flavoring the tale with an enjoyable level of humor. Write on, my friend!!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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So glad you're enjoying this one Janet... I'm aiming it at a younger (say, middle school or so) crowd, but I'm hoping it is enjoyable to parents as well to encourage 'read alongs', you know? :) Thanx for the review and take care! ;) Yvette
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Comment from BeasPeas
This is very well written. Your characters are exuberant and ornery which give a lot of energy to your piece. Descriptions are excellent. I must admit to stumbling a bit here. I think it just needs to be rearranged for smoother read: "A pink, armored ball rolled out from a hole revealed behind there." Marilyn
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This is very well written. Your characters are exuberant and ornery which give a lot of energy to your piece. Descriptions are excellent. I must admit to stumbling a bit here. I think it just needs to be rearranged for smoother read: "A pink, armored ball rolled out from a hole revealed behind there." Marilyn
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the review, Marilyn, and I'm so very glad you enjoyed! I have since changed that little awkwardness, but thanx for the heads up, ma'am;) ;) Take care and have a great week! ;) Yvette
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry, I was kept awake by bad weather and had drifted off with this in my lap early this morning! I'm glad I put it in the bookcase to remind myself! Adorably magical and a new character added to the bunch. I'm so glad you made the armadillo pink.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Sorry, I was kept awake by bad weather and had drifted off with this in my lap early this morning! I'm glad I put it in the bookcase to remind myself! Adorably magical and a new character added to the bunch. I'm so glad you made the armadillo pink.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xo
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2019
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Thank you so very much for touching base with Nicholas and Constantine, ma'am -- so very appreciated, as always!! ;) Hope you guys fare well this week -- be sure to check in and give us a "hey! we're okay!" holler when you can! ;) :) Take care! ;) Yvette :)
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is well-written. I think it flows well. The pink armadillo ball at the end reminds me a bit of the armadillo in the animated "The Road to El Dorado" released back in 2000. I was a little unsure what: My goodness he was exercised actually meant. I would have said, "He was excited." or "He was worked up." Nice job on characterization and dialogue, especially, and action.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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This is well-written. I think it flows well. The pink armadillo ball at the end reminds me a bit of the armadillo in the animated "The Road to El Dorado" released back in 2000. I was a little unsure what: My goodness he was exercised actually meant. I would have said, "He was excited." or "He was worked up." Nice job on characterization and dialogue, especially, and action.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2019
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Thanx for the review, Loren, and I'm so very glad you enjoyed! I have since changed that to 'excited'.... thanx for the heads up, ma'am;) ;) Take care and have a great week! ;) Yvette
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You are welcome. I am a little confused as to who is Loren. This is Crystie. Although I may have called someone else by another name once in a while elsewhere, too :)
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I am so sorry Crystie -- his picture was right there above yours on the listing and, even though I was typing to you, my poor brain must have put in his name.... my sincerest apologies for the blonde mistake!! ;) :)
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That's ok. I might make the same slip another day if I'm typing on a phone instead of a full size computer. :)
