This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Gladys Finds The Power"Third book in the time travel trilogy
29 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
I know I've told you before, I like this story. It's full of action that keeps me reading and your ghosts are delightful. The dialogue is excellent. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I know I've told you before, I like this story. It's full of action that keeps me reading and your ghosts are delightful. The dialogue is excellent. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Yes, you have, and I thank you, Shirley. I'm delighted you are enjoying this story. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from Ulla
Hi Sandra, this was a fun chapter and I think I had as much fun as Gladys and Victoria. So he's not that easily spooked? Hmm. We'll have to see what Mildred has up her sleeve. I'm so glad I had a six left. It so deserves it. A big hug. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hi Sandra, this was a fun chapter and I think I had as much fun as Gladys and Victoria. So he's not that easily spooked? Hmm. We'll have to see what Mildred has up her sleeve. I'm so glad I had a six left. It so deserves it. A big hug. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review and all the lovely stars, my friend. He thinks he has it in hand, but he doesn't know our Veronica and Mildred, and now Gladys is helping too. Should be fun! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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Sandra, I can't wait to see the trio getting into action. Ulla xxxx
Comment from damommy
I'm surprised that he knew it was a haunting. They'll have to come up with some pretty good stuff to scare him now, but I know they'll do it. I think they should start to do things to him in public without being caught. He'd be hard put to explain the strange things.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I'm surprised that he knew it was a haunting. They'll have to come up with some pretty good stuff to scare him now, but I know they'll do it. I think they should start to do things to him in public without being caught. He'd be hard put to explain the strange things.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I think you will enjoy what Veronica has in store for him, Yvonne, :) and his dearly departed, murdered wife will have something to do with it too! Thank you so much, my friend. Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from SLMorrical
This is a good edition/chapter to your book. It is important to Insure that the children are born. Not being able to scare the Vice Admiral is not a good thing. I know Veronica and Mildred will figure out how to get the outcome of the past that they want. I like that Veronica a time traveler is talking to Gladys ghost. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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This is a good edition/chapter to your book. It is important to Insure that the children are born. Not being able to scare the Vice Admiral is not a good thing. I know Veronica and Mildred will figure out how to get the outcome of the past that they want. I like that Veronica a time traveler is talking to Gladys ghost. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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They have some lovely ideas to sort him out with, Sandra, so stay tuned. He might not be afraid, but he will be very angry! LOL, Thank you so very much for the lovely review, my friend. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Sandra,
So Charles is a little more hardy than anyone expected? Could prove more problematic than first expected.
At least, it will be as this psychopath doesn't get the chance to change the location. - I couldn't get this to scan right for some reason. I think it's the use of 'as'. I think I would use 'if' there. But it may just be me.
he turned his attention to the opened book in front of him.- you could just say open book here.
But it was because of Lady Ann's patience, that I learnt to do a lot more than just walk through walls. - I don't think you need the comma here.
I have to admit that I spotted a few reliances on adverbs in this instalment which I hadn't noticed before. Quite close together as well. - He slowly turned his head / he noisily expelled his breath / He worked steadily for / I repositioned myself instantly / Gladys had quickly moved over. I think they're noticeable because they clump together. Here too - very kindly left the lid off, and slowly moved it towards the map. "Oh, look at his face!" Gladys squealed delightedly.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hi Sandra,
So Charles is a little more hardy than anyone expected? Could prove more problematic than first expected.
At least, it will be as this psychopath doesn't get the chance to change the location. - I couldn't get this to scan right for some reason. I think it's the use of 'as'. I think I would use 'if' there. But it may just be me.
he turned his attention to the opened book in front of him.- you could just say open book here.
But it was because of Lady Ann's patience, that I learnt to do a lot more than just walk through walls. - I don't think you need the comma here.
I have to admit that I spotted a few reliances on adverbs in this instalment which I hadn't noticed before. Quite close together as well. - He slowly turned his head / he noisily expelled his breath / He worked steadily for / I repositioned myself instantly / Gladys had quickly moved over. I think they're noticeable because they clump together. Here too - very kindly left the lid off, and slowly moved it towards the map. "Oh, look at his face!" Gladys squealed delightedly.
All the best
G
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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I went into my MS Word and highlighted all my adverbs, I should have done that before, my word!!! There were loads. I've made some changes to reduce a lot of them and will go over it again later. I'm sure I can still improve on the few I've left. Thank you so much for that, Gareth, I really appreciated it as you know. Sending you an extra hug! :)) Sandra xxx
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lol, no problem. G
Comment from Mia Twysted
A little bit of ghostly fun while trying to save the world it seems.
At first, I was unaware the two searching the office were ghosts. When I realized it made the story more intriguing. I can feel the contempt and spite that they feel for the Admiral. And although I am not sure what war they are fighting I see they want to win. However, do they need to help the man they hate to win the war or stop him?
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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A little bit of ghostly fun while trying to save the world it seems.
At first, I was unaware the two searching the office were ghosts. When I realized it made the story more intriguing. I can feel the contempt and spite that they feel for the Admiral. And although I am not sure what war they are fighting I see they want to win. However, do they need to help the man they hate to win the war or stop him?
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Hello, Mia, thank you for reading this part. I'm afraid you have come in almost at the end. This is book three of this trilogy, and only one is a ghost, the other is a time-traveller. This is the first World War, and they have to stop him changing the timeline, which he is about to do. He is also the husband and the murderer of Gladys the ghost.
I wondered why you gave me a 4 star when you haven't told me what is wrong and needs putting right. Perhaps you can upgrade it again, if there isn't anything you can suggest. Thanks again for reading. :) Sandra xx
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I am actually sorry about the 4 star it was a miss click and it was supposed to be 5.
Time-traveler that sounds like an interesting twist. Now I am left to wonder how the traveler communicates with the ghost. I love the idea.
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I have done that so many times, so don't worry. I see you are quite new here, so welcome, and I hope you enjoy it here as much as I have and still do. This book is supposed to be the final one in the series, but I think I might be leaving it open in case I want to bring them back. The first two books are selling so well, it's a possibility. It would be nice to have you come along, Mia. I'll have a read of your work tomorrow, it's almost my bedtime, UK time. :)) xx
Comment from aryr
A great chapter Sandra. It was refreshing that Gladys found her ability to manipulate things. It was not surprising that the admiral caught on to what she was doing, but I suspect there will be more coming from her and rightly so. Between the three of them they will have their desired affect on him. Very informative and so enjoyed. Hugs and smiles.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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A great chapter Sandra. It was refreshing that Gladys found her ability to manipulate things. It was not surprising that the admiral caught on to what she was doing, but I suspect there will be more coming from her and rightly so. Between the three of them they will have their desired affect on him. Very informative and so enjoyed. Hugs and smiles.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Yes, Gladys will have a bit of fun too, and she deserves it. Now she knows she can, who knows what else she'll get up to. :)) Thank you so much for this lovely review, Alie! :)) Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome Sandra.
Comment from kiwijenny
What a venomous asp is right....ooothis is going to be fun...I sure hope he gets scared finally and his evil schemes are thwarted.
They have to be or we wouldn't exist...hmmmm
God bless
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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What a venomous asp is right....ooothis is going to be fun...I sure hope he gets scared finally and his evil schemes are thwarted.
They have to be or we wouldn't exist...hmmmm
God bless
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Careful now, things might change and we won't be here!! lol. Thank you so much, Jenny, for this lovely review. Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from Mistydawn
Arrogant arse I wish Gladys would've hit him over the head, poured the ink over him lol. I hope Charles's plan works and they drive the jerk insane, lol. insane asylum yeah that's a good place for him, shock therapy, better yet a lobotomy. It's well-written very interesting your characters seem real, believable.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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Arrogant arse I wish Gladys would've hit him over the head, poured the ink over him lol. I hope Charles's plan works and they drive the jerk insane, lol. insane asylum yeah that's a good place for him, shock therapy, better yet a lobotomy. It's well-written very interesting your characters seem real, believable.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2019
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A lobotomy! LOL, now you're talking! Thank you so much, my friend, for the six stars, and this fabulously funny review! I loved it!! Big hugs. :)) Sandra xxx