This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Time Is Running Out!"Third book in the time travel trilogy
40 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello, Sandra. This is another good addition to Veronica and her time travel adventures. Mildred is a strong supporting character and adds a depth and sounding board that enhances this story. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hello, Sandra. This is another good addition to Veronica and her time travel adventures. Mildred is a strong supporting character and adds a depth and sounding board that enhances this story. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Aw, thank you, Susan. That is such a lovely review. I'm really pleased you like my characters. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Sandra,
Another well-penned chapter. I loved the interactions between Mildred and Veronica. Imagine - putting your head into someone's stomach to see what they've eaten?
I'm glad the key to the door was found and Mildred's plan was so quickly accepted and put into action - the people in the hospital have a fighting chance to survive this next attack,
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi, Sandra,
Another well-penned chapter. I loved the interactions between Mildred and Veronica. Imagine - putting your head into someone's stomach to see what they've eaten?
I'm glad the key to the door was found and Mildred's plan was so quickly accepted and put into action - the people in the hospital have a fighting chance to survive this next attack,
Looking forward to more,
~patty~
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Patty, for this lovely review. I just had this thought, (being a bit warped) if it was possible to walk through something would you be able to see what was inside! lol. I thought Mildred would appreciate that line. LOL. Thanks my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Sandra, another good chapter you clever thing you. You really keep up the pace. The only line that I paused on was Mildred ' she threw back her arm pointing to the door.' I know what you mean and it's not an error - just sounds funny, throwing her arm back. 'swung round pointing at the door' - just a suggestion, not a criticism. Who am I to criticise, still struggling through a damn poetry book. As you tell me, I will get there - time will tell - Love Dorothy xxx
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi Sandra, another good chapter you clever thing you. You really keep up the pace. The only line that I paused on was Mildred ' she threw back her arm pointing to the door.' I know what you mean and it's not an error - just sounds funny, throwing her arm back. 'swung round pointing at the door' - just a suggestion, not a criticism. Who am I to criticise, still struggling through a damn poetry book. As you tell me, I will get there - time will tell - Love Dorothy xxx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Dorothy for all those stars again, you are so kind. I'll take a look at that line and use something else. Now that you have mentioned it, I visualise Mildred ripping her arm out and throwing it at the door! LOL. :)) Thanks again, my friend. xxx
Send me an email and let me know what's been happening. It will all just fall into place soon, I'm sure of it. I remember the time mine did. After so many errors, I was previewing my poetry book on KDP for yet another time, and each page was perfect as each one was turned over. My stomach was cramping and I could feel prickles of sweat on my forehead as I got closer to the end. And then, Graham nearly shot out his chair when I let out a loud yell and started shaking my arms in the air, while I shouted 'I did it!!!' LOL! So funny. I have a mental picture of you doing this. :)) xxx
Comment from apky
Oh, this is so typical Sandra, whipping the reader along the chapter at speed, then suddenly stopping when the going is at a pitch and the reader wants to know what happens next!
I won't repeat my litany about your writing - it's grand and you know it too.
BTW have you heard anything from Margaret Snowdon? I miss her writing (not to mention her helpful reviews of my chapters here).
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Oh, this is so typical Sandra, whipping the reader along the chapter at speed, then suddenly stopping when the going is at a pitch and the reader wants to know what happens next!
I won't repeat my litany about your writing - it's grand and you know it too.
BTW have you heard anything from Margaret Snowdon? I miss her writing (not to mention her helpful reviews of my chapters here).
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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LOL, don't you just love me? It won't seem like that when it's published, you'll just turn the page. But, it's fun to be able to do it on here. Thank you so much, Aki, for this lovely review. :))
Margaret hasn't been well, but I think she's much better now. I don't think she will be back from what she told me the last time I heard from her. I think, like a few others on here, she has become a bit disillusioned with the site. Such a shame.
Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Indeed such a shame. I'd like to keep in touch with her. Do you think she'll read anything I send her through her Contact site here?
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I doubt it, but you can reach her on Facebook. Try that. :))
Comment from giraffmang
hi Sandra,
Another great continuation. I like being behind and getting a big chunk at once. LOL Maybe I'll do it more often. Good quick thinking here on Mildred's part.
deliberately set-up to thwart us - not sure you need the hyphen here. if it was a set-up it's used, but in this instance I don't think it's applicable. The difference between an actual set-up and being set up (as in engineered).
These weren't your normal everyday rats. If I had a saddle handy, I could ride one--they were huge! - nothing wrong with this. It's just an 'aside'. I just finished reading James Herbert's 'Ash' last week and it featured lots of rats in hidden passageways! lol Of course he's pretty famous for his trilogy of 'Rats' books. Not sure if you're familiar with him as a writer but he's awesome. British Stephen King - although in my opinion superior.
"Why would you want to open it. - maybe a question mark in here.
no good us getting' them out in the street, - need to drop the 'g' of gettin'.
"Yes--and well done. That was a touch of genius, Mildred. - ned closing speech marks here.
"This old noddle of mine works well when I needs it to."- should clip the to to t' here.
aw the light was on. He then stepped back to allow Mildred to walk through first. "So, how are you planning to get all the patients down here?" - font size changes here.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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hi Sandra,
Another great continuation. I like being behind and getting a big chunk at once. LOL Maybe I'll do it more often. Good quick thinking here on Mildred's part.
deliberately set-up to thwart us - not sure you need the hyphen here. if it was a set-up it's used, but in this instance I don't think it's applicable. The difference between an actual set-up and being set up (as in engineered).
These weren't your normal everyday rats. If I had a saddle handy, I could ride one--they were huge! - nothing wrong with this. It's just an 'aside'. I just finished reading James Herbert's 'Ash' last week and it featured lots of rats in hidden passageways! lol Of course he's pretty famous for his trilogy of 'Rats' books. Not sure if you're familiar with him as a writer but he's awesome. British Stephen King - although in my opinion superior.
"Why would you want to open it. - maybe a question mark in here.
no good us getting' them out in the street, - need to drop the 'g' of gettin'.
"Yes--and well done. That was a touch of genius, Mildred. - ned closing speech marks here.
"This old noddle of mine works well when I needs it to."- should clip the to to t' here.
aw the light was on. He then stepped back to allow Mildred to walk through first. "So, how are you planning to get all the patients down here?" - font size changes here.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi Gareth, thank you again!! I've had occasions when I've missed parts and been able to read a few in one go, it's like reading from a kindle, except for finding the nits. Saying that, I was in the middle of a book (paper back) last night, and came across a few errors,which is unusual for a Clive Cussler novel, so perhaps if you;re looking for a job you could offer to edit his! lol.
I don't know James Herbert, but you have me intrigued. I've read many of Steven King's books, so I'll definitely go searching for James's. Thank you for finding those other nits, I've made the corrections. I wonder why the font changed there, it was copied and pasted all in the same font. I'll have to keep an eye on that in case it happens again. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment from WryWriter
As usual, you have a talented eye as to when to leave the reader hanging. The ending, again, makes me eager to read on. This is so exciting!
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Some edits:
"I would believe these set-backs had been deliberately set-up to thwart us.
(I would change the word "set-up" as you have written so close the word "set-back" and near duplicating it takes the meat out of both. Maybe a word like "perpetrated" would fit?
"Let's not start lookin' on the black side. Tell you what, I'll go and have a quick rummage in the office--there shouldn't be anyone in there this time of day." (Mildred's accent?)
"Yes--and well done. That was a touch of genius, Mildred.(")
"You're right, as always," he told her with (omit extra a) such a gentle smile, it caught me off guard.
Of course Mildred and Tommy will have built up some sort of bond with (omit extra of) all the stress they've had to deal with these last few days.
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I am anxious to find out if they make it in time with ALL the patients. I like the wrench you threw in giving me doubts about the newly operated-on patients. Can't wait to find out!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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As usual, you have a talented eye as to when to leave the reader hanging. The ending, again, makes me eager to read on. This is so exciting!
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Some edits:
"I would believe these set-backs had been deliberately set-up to thwart us.
(I would change the word "set-up" as you have written so close the word "set-back" and near duplicating it takes the meat out of both. Maybe a word like "perpetrated" would fit?
"Let's not start lookin' on the black side. Tell you what, I'll go and have a quick rummage in the office--there shouldn't be anyone in there this time of day." (Mildred's accent?)
"Yes--and well done. That was a touch of genius, Mildred.(")
"You're right, as always," he told her with (omit extra a) such a gentle smile, it caught me off guard.
Of course Mildred and Tommy will have built up some sort of bond with (omit extra of) all the stress they've had to deal with these last few days.
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I am anxious to find out if they make it in time with ALL the patients. I like the wrench you threw in giving me doubts about the newly operated-on patients. Can't wait to find out!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, WW, for this really lovely, helpful review. Well spotted with the first paragraph, how I didn't notice that beats me. I've changed 'set-backs' to 'obstacles' now. I've now corrected the other errors. I appreciate your care in reviewing, that was so kind of you to point them out. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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Hugs!
Comment from Mistydawn
I do hope they figure out a way to move them. Your story is very well written, interesting, suspensful, I had to chuckle at the rat thing that would be quite frightning dead or not, lol. Great job as always.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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I do hope they figure out a way to move them. Your story is very well written, interesting, suspensful, I had to chuckle at the rat thing that would be quite frightning dead or not, lol. Great job as always.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Misty, for reading and reviewing this part. Rats are not my favourite creature, lol, I'd do more than just freeze, if I came across one! I'm delighted you are enjoying the story! Big hugs! :)) Sandra
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with the chapter, Sandra. It was packed with much action and I could feel the tenseness of the situation at hand. I found the part about knowing what Mildred had for breakfast and the rats hilarious in a serious story. You ended at a great point. Will the bombs come tonight? Tune in next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Jan
This old noddle ( noodle ) of mine works
"Here we are," Bill called out, walking quickly over to the door. After studying the labels on various keys, he eventually found the right one, and after inserting it in the lock, he opened the door. "You found the light switch, then," he said, sounding surprised when he saw the light was on. He then stepped back to allow Mildred to walk through first. "So, how are you planning to get all the patients down here?"
(although it doesn't show here, there are 2 different size fonts in this paragraph in the story.)
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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You did a good job with the chapter, Sandra. It was packed with much action and I could feel the tenseness of the situation at hand. I found the part about knowing what Mildred had for breakfast and the rats hilarious in a serious story. You ended at a great point. Will the bombs come tonight? Tune in next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Jan
This old noddle ( noodle ) of mine works
"Here we are," Bill called out, walking quickly over to the door. After studying the labels on various keys, he eventually found the right one, and after inserting it in the lock, he opened the door. "You found the light switch, then," he said, sounding surprised when he saw the light was on. He then stepped back to allow Mildred to walk through first. "So, how are you planning to get all the patients down here?"
(although it doesn't show here, there are 2 different size fonts in this paragraph in the story.)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi Jan, thank you so much for pointing out the change in the font. I've corrected that. It's weird how some words change in transit from my MS Word, to FS when I cope and paste. All sorted.
Noddle / noodle. I've always said 'Noddle' so I thought I'd look it up seeing as you mentioned it. I like to see where the words come from too. Apparently, for the UK slang word for 'head - brain' we say 'noddle' and the Americans' say 'noodle'. I can't find out where is originated from, but apparently, it's ancient! (probably why I know it!) I'm learning so much from this book! But it raises the question how many readers would know this word now. I'm going to find another word that a person like Mildred would use. So, after all that, thank you, Jan, that is another valuable lesson for me. Check out my expressions! Thanks again, my friend, for this very helpful review. :)) Sandra xxx
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You could keep the word as is and make a note about it in the author notes.
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That's true. If I can't find another suitable word, I'll do that. :) xxx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Sandra, well we are now heading in the right direction...
every one needs to start moving...those that are in wheelchairs and pull the ones on gurneys...you know...one wheelchair...one gurney...one wheelchair...one gurney...etc...like a train sweet girl...now that's creative...and I wish the powers would change Veronica live...she is no good this way...she can't even scare a rat...I guess she could go out and watch for the Zeppelins...what can happen???...they will fall right through her...so lets get move'n..roll em...roll em...roll em...love your story told my wonderful SOOOOOOOO sweet friend...love you so many lots...Linda xxoo
How is Sarah doing???...and how is Ian???...say hi for me...lovw xxoo
Kristy is having Noah's birthday party this weekend...they are having it at the turtle pond...it's a place in Florida where they save disabled critters...birds, owls, bald eagles...and lots of turtles in ponds...we have gone several times...Noah likes to go and feed the turtles...well she invited his whole pre-school class...and some of is special friends...she thought about 10 kids...school kids don't want to come most of the time...well this whole week...everyday she goes to pick up Noah... a new kid wants to come...and of course she tells them all yes...so she is now up to 18...LOL...the place brings live birds for them to see...and snakes...and turtles...when we go...there are people walking around carrying them on their arms...and we can pet them...so Noah is very excited...I'll tell Kristy to send me pictures...and I'll send some to you...have a great evening you...much love xxoo
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi Sandra, well we are now heading in the right direction...
every one needs to start moving...those that are in wheelchairs and pull the ones on gurneys...you know...one wheelchair...one gurney...one wheelchair...one gurney...etc...like a train sweet girl...now that's creative...and I wish the powers would change Veronica live...she is no good this way...she can't even scare a rat...I guess she could go out and watch for the Zeppelins...what can happen???...they will fall right through her...so lets get move'n..roll em...roll em...roll em...love your story told my wonderful SOOOOOOOO sweet friend...love you so many lots...Linda xxoo
How is Sarah doing???...and how is Ian???...say hi for me...lovw xxoo
Kristy is having Noah's birthday party this weekend...they are having it at the turtle pond...it's a place in Florida where they save disabled critters...birds, owls, bald eagles...and lots of turtles in ponds...we have gone several times...Noah likes to go and feed the turtles...well she invited his whole pre-school class...and some of is special friends...she thought about 10 kids...school kids don't want to come most of the time...well this whole week...everyday she goes to pick up Noah... a new kid wants to come...and of course she tells them all yes...so she is now up to 18...LOL...the place brings live birds for them to see...and snakes...and turtles...when we go...there are people walking around carrying them on their arms...and we can pet them...so Noah is very excited...I'll tell Kristy to send me pictures...and I'll send some to you...have a great evening you...much love xxoo
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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That sounds a wonderful place for children to go to. I loved that Kirsty has ended up with 18 (and counting) children to take! lol. What disability does a snake have?? LOL, broken legs? (sorry, couldn't resist it) I think places like that should be world wide. We have a seal sanctuary near us in Cornwall, which is lovely to visit. Wish Noah a happy Birthday from me. Are you going up to see them? Yes, do e.mail me some photos, I'd love to see what the little chap looks like, and what the Turtle Pond is like.
Thank you so much for your lovely review and very helpful suggestions. I liked the wheelchair-gurney idea, but they wouldn't be any good going down the stairs and the lift would have to be ginormous! So, come on Linda, let's be having some more ideas from you! :)) lol.
Ian might be having an op on his heart, it depends on how strong everything else is for him to be able to survive it. He and Maggie will be seeing the doctors on Tuesday. We'll know more then.
Sarah is doing well, bless her. I know she's not looking forward to the next op, but as she said, better that than the alternative. Once she is over it all, I'm sure she will be a different person. The stress has brought her down so much. Life can be a bummer.
Love you lots, my friend. Biggest hugs. Sandra xxx
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Hey You, I was so sorry to hear that Ian would have to have another op...but Sandra he is a strong dude for fighting for his life...God Bless him and Maggie...
I'm glad Sarah is doing well...it will be one day at a time...and I so understand the stress she is under...they say God doesn't give us more than we can take...but sometimes I wonder...the good thing is...he is their for us...God Bless her as well...
and now...I don't know...snakes can go blind...of course I don't think I have ever seen one...But stranger things have happened...and what if someone steps on their tails...or heads...besides for the one that stepped on the snake could lose their life...it might cripple the snake...so bring them to the turtle pond...
not going down until after Winter...don't want all that sunshine...ya know ???...and they are making plans for the summers Disney Cruse...and I granddoggie sit...
OK!!!...I can't think of everything...put some ramps down...and send that train down there...separate them when they get to the bottom...and the one on gurneys...the bed ridden...just strap them to their beds and gurneys...stand them up straight...and put them on the lift...look how many you could fit on one lift...there straight up and down...see where's there's a will...there's a way...love you sweet beautiful girl...and biggerest hugs back at you...xxoo...
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LOL! That is so funny! I could just picture them all in the lift, some with their legs stuck out in plaster and their arms. lol. I'll take your ideas to the management, I'm sure Mildred would love it!
I never thought of a blind snake, you're right. And of course, some have their tails and tums squashed, hmm, now I'm feeling really sad for them and I'm not exactly a snake lover, but I wouldn't like them to suffer. There you go, you've taught me something today. I love the idea of granddoggie sitting! We grandcat sit! lol. xxxxx
Comment from damommy
You left me on the edge of my seat. I have to believe they got everyone out.
It looks like it will be hard on Tommy when Gladys goes back to her own time. I hadn't considered something like that happening. Of course, if Gladys were to stay, it would alter life for James and Veronica. Hmmmm.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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You left me on the edge of my seat. I have to believe they got everyone out.
It looks like it will be hard on Tommy when Gladys goes back to her own time. I hadn't considered something like that happening. Of course, if Gladys were to stay, it would alter life for James and Veronica. Hmmmm.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Mildred is such a character, that everyone there would love her. We will have to see what happens ... if it does. Thank you so much, Yvonne, for another lovely review. I'm working on the next part now. So hopefully will be there on Sunday/ish. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra. xxxx