The French Letter
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Comment from Pantygynt
Are we, I wonder, approaching the end of this strange and somewhat melodramatic saga?
I found the writing in this episode lurched from the brilliant to the somewhat overblown.
Now this for instance I loved:
'... her arm wrapped around the shoulder of my question mark.' What a neat piece of descriptive writing.
Whereas this tickled my funny bone when I don't think it was meant to:
'Helen looked at me as though I was crazy. "Perhaps you have forgotten, Charles, but we are being pursued by members of a drug cartel - people who will stop at nothing."' Now why did the image of a trench-coated bobby soxer clad in a beret saying "Now, listen very carefully, I shall say this only once" flash across my mind's eye at this point?
please don't get me wrong. It was fascinating and enjoyable but i am not certain whether this episode was part of a comedy or a thriller.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Are we, I wonder, approaching the end of this strange and somewhat melodramatic saga?
I found the writing in this episode lurched from the brilliant to the somewhat overblown.
Now this for instance I loved:
'... her arm wrapped around the shoulder of my question mark.' What a neat piece of descriptive writing.
Whereas this tickled my funny bone when I don't think it was meant to:
'Helen looked at me as though I was crazy. "Perhaps you have forgotten, Charles, but we are being pursued by members of a drug cartel - people who will stop at nothing."' Now why did the image of a trench-coated bobby soxer clad in a beret saying "Now, listen very carefully, I shall say this only once" flash across my mind's eye at this point?
please don't get me wrong. It was fascinating and enjoyable but i am not certain whether this episode was part of a comedy or a thriller.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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I may have to think about that bit again!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
My goodness, this part was brilliant. I don't like Jeanne, and I'd like to know what she has over Helen that would keep her on her side even though she knows something isn't right. Now what will Charles do? If I were him, I'd turn around and walk away. Would Helen expect that? This is so full of intrigue, my friend, I can't wait for the next part. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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My goodness, this part was brilliant. I don't like Jeanne, and I'd like to know what she has over Helen that would keep her on her side even though she knows something isn't right. Now what will Charles do? If I were him, I'd turn around and walk away. Would Helen expect that? This is so full of intrigue, my friend, I can't wait for the next part. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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...and so the mutual admiration society continues! LOL
Glad you enjoyed it and that I?m still holding your interest. I appreciate the sixth star. All the best, Tony.
Comment from apky
Uh-oh, trouble in Charle's paradise, I presume. I just wonder how this particular conflict between him and Helen, with Mme Durand firmly wedged between them, is going to be solved. This was another wonderful read with unexpected twists and turns.
A couple of glitches below to look into.
Not any longer(.) Come and sit down.
There seemed to (be) a spark of electricity
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Uh-oh, trouble in Charle's paradise, I presume. I just wonder how this particular conflict between him and Helen, with Mme Durand firmly wedged between them, is going to be solved. This was another wonderful read with unexpected twists and turns.
A couple of glitches below to look into.
Not any longer(.) Come and sit down.
There seemed to (be) a spark of electricity
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your probing comments and for picking up the errors. Always appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Sugarray77
Very good, Tony. Your moving pieces are coming together to make it easier to make solid assumptions... even when there are unexplained points (like why Helen is so focused on Jeanne). Good job.
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Very good, Tony. Your moving pieces are coming together to make it easier to make solid assumptions... even when there are unexplained points (like why Helen is so focused on Jeanne). Good job.
Melissa
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Many thanks, Melissa, for your encouraging comments. Much appreciated! I hope the connection between Helen and Jeanne will become clearer soon. All the best. Tony.
Comment from AdaJulie
There is so much to this story, I am just joining it now and feel less than qualified to give it a sound review at this moment. I will however give you praises as a general over view. You story is solid, character development in depth and from what I see your writing is perfect. I will continue on in my readings....great job
Ada
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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There is so much to this story, I am just joining it now and feel less than qualified to give it a sound review at this moment. I will however give you praises as a general over view. You story is solid, character development in depth and from what I see your writing is perfect. I will continue on in my readings....great job
Ada
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2019
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Many thanks, Ada, for your most encouraging comments. Much appreciated! Tony.
Comment from WryWriter
Two cats out of the bag in this fine chapter! And the plot thickens...intriguing. Only two suggestions for you to consider:
I paused (omit for) just long enough to make it sound like an accusation.
He was prepared to sponsor your further career.
He was prepared to sponsor and further your career.
As always, enjoyed reading your book!
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Two cats out of the bag in this fine chapter! And the plot thickens...intriguing. Only two suggestions for you to consider:
I paused (omit for) just long enough to make it sound like an accusation.
He was prepared to sponsor your further career.
He was prepared to sponsor and further your career.
As always, enjoyed reading your book!
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Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Very many thanks for your review and useful suggestions. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Tootsie55
Yay! The SIXES ARE BACK IN TIME! This was an excellent chapter. Full of drama and some home truths on Madame Durand if Helen will see it. No spags and great reading keep em coming.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Yay! The SIXES ARE BACK IN TIME! This was an excellent chapter. Full of drama and some home truths on Madame Durand if Helen will see it. No spags and great reading keep em coming.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Very many thanks for your generous award of six stars and for your kind words. Much appreciated. All the best, Tony.