This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Veronica and James talk murder!"Third book in the time travel trilogy
32 total reviews
Comment from aryr
A great chapter Sandra. There is a deep sense of frustration and the unknown for both Veronica and James. In their hearts they know it is wrong to want the death of the Vice Admiral but they know the reality of the outcome of history. Mildred I think will surprise them, she tends to be a protective she bear and when she hears about the history change, she will do all she can to prevent it. I loved the switch you provided to the children, the shells and the pencil holders. A good distraction tool. Very much enjoyed and appreciated. Happy New Years to you and yours. Wishes that 2019 is a fantastic year of writing, as well has good health, happiness and prosperity. Big hugs and smiles.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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A great chapter Sandra. There is a deep sense of frustration and the unknown for both Veronica and James. In their hearts they know it is wrong to want the death of the Vice Admiral but they know the reality of the outcome of history. Mildred I think will surprise them, she tends to be a protective she bear and when she hears about the history change, she will do all she can to prevent it. I loved the switch you provided to the children, the shells and the pencil holders. A good distraction tool. Very much enjoyed and appreciated. Happy New Years to you and yours. Wishes that 2019 is a fantastic year of writing, as well has good health, happiness and prosperity. Big hugs and smiles.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thanks so much, Alie. I know everyone of them hate the idea of committing murder, but unless they can think of something that I can't.... I'm glad you enjoyed the scene with the children. I used to do that with the shells, such fun! I'm wishing you the same for 2019 my friend. Big hugs! :)) Sandra xxx
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You are so welcome Sandra.
Comment from damommy
Oh, dear. I'm with James. I can't see Mildred murdering anyone, but it has to be done. I felt the tension of the earlier conversation between Veronica and James. But then I also felt the happiness of the children's excitement. Well done!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Oh, dear. I'm with James. I can't see Mildred murdering anyone, but it has to be done. I felt the tension of the earlier conversation between Veronica and James. But then I also felt the happiness of the children's excitement. Well done!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Aw, thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend, and all those shiny stars. I know what you mean re Mildred. I can't wait to get stuck into the scene where Veronica tells her, LOL. Honestly, Yvonne, I am beginning to think my characters are real! I think it's time to bring in the men in white jackets! Thank you my dear friend. :)) Sandra xxx
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I can see why you feel they're real. I catch myself feeling the same way. It's a great story when I think about them after I've read it. If you need the white jackets, so do I.
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Oh good, perhaps we will get to have tea together, if they send us to the same lock-up! lol. xxx
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They probably wouldn't send us to the same lock-up because they'd be afraid of what we'd get up to. LOL
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LOL! Could you just imagine it!! Hmm, that would make a good story! LOL xx
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You could write a great one about two goofy women. hahahaha
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Now, what names do you think I should give them???? LOL
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I'll leave that up to you.
Comment from Ulla
Awe,this is just a wonderful chapter, Sandra, and it goes from plotting a murder to the tender moments with the children. No, I can't see Mildred committing murder either. But, hey, you'll never know. Ad something surely has to happen. Oh, I love this story. Can't wait to reading on. A big hug from a sunny and very mild Spain. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Awe,this is just a wonderful chapter, Sandra, and it goes from plotting a murder to the tender moments with the children. No, I can't see Mildred committing murder either. But, hey, you'll never know. Ad something surely has to happen. Oh, I love this story. Can't wait to reading on. A big hug from a sunny and very mild Spain. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the lovely 6 stars, my dear friend. I do envy you the mild weather. I used to fine the end of February was the coldest time. It even snowed one year on Graham's birthday on the 28th February, something the people where we lived had never seen happen before. So, you never know, you might be in for some next month! Thanks for this lovely review, and I'm sending you a big hug back, even though it's from freezing England! :)) Sandra xxx
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So right you are, Sandra. Winter does happen in February, and then spring is suddenly there. Every year it's the same. Weird! I so love your story. Ulla xxx
Comment from Treischel
Wow! I certainly have missed a lot, but the story continues to flow well with romance, drama, and intrique. I guess I missed how Mildred got so involved. Normally I only review poetry, but you are one of the few whose prose I review. Congrats on you new book series - one published, one in process, and this volume in construction. I hope your well.!
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Wow! I certainly have missed a lot, but the story continues to flow well with romance, drama, and intrique. I guess I missed how Mildred got so involved. Normally I only review poetry, but you are one of the few whose prose I review. Congrats on you new book series - one published, one in process, and this volume in construction. I hope your well.!
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Tom. Yes, I've been quite busy. My short story ended up as a three book trilogy. This is the last one in it. Mildred has evolved a lot! lol. I've also written an adventure story for my 11 year grandson, who is dyslexic. He is so proud of himself for beginning to master a few words, quite broke my heart with his joy. He asked me if I'd write a book about him, so 'Eric and the Aliens' has now been published. I was able to give him it for Christmas, Tom, I had the best Christmas ever, just watching his face when he opened the book. :))
Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend. I really appreciate it. Big hugs. Sandra. xxx
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How wonderful! I wrote a couple of poems for my grand nephews that I'll be posting later in the week, so I know what you mean.
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I will look forward to reading it! :)) xx
Comment from Mistydawn
This is another great addition to your story. It's so well-written, interesting that it draws you into the story. It must be heartbreaking to Veronica knowing that if Mildred doesn't kill someone her family could be lost forever. I can't even imagine her pain. Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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This is another great addition to your story. It's so well-written, interesting that it draws you into the story. It must be heartbreaking to Veronica knowing that if Mildred doesn't kill someone her family could be lost forever. I can't even imagine her pain. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, my friend. What a lovely review. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part. Have a wonderful new year, and I wish you everything you could possibly wish yourself. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Maybe ... when I'm sent back and told [tell] her what I've found out.
I found this one spag Sandra. You've probably been told by now, but I thought I should tell you just in case someone else didn't. Loved this one. It was so homey. Being with James and the children did Veronica good. She will be able to handle what lies ahead easily now. She has a purpose. Good Chapter. Nancy
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Maybe ... when I'm sent back and told [tell] her what I've found out.
I found this one spag Sandra. You've probably been told by now, but I thought I should tell you just in case someone else didn't. Loved this one. It was so homey. Being with James and the children did Veronica good. She will be able to handle what lies ahead easily now. She has a purpose. Good Chapter. Nancy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Nancy, happy New Year! Did you stay up? I was in bed and fast asleep! lol. Thank you so much for spotting that, I've made the correction. Yes, all mums need to have some relaxing play time with their children, it puts thing into perspective. But, as you say, now she has a purpose. She was just flaying around before not really knowing what the powers wanted her to put right. Now it affects her directly, she'll be determined to sort it out. Thanks my friend, for the lovely review. Big hugs! :) Sandra xxxx
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No, I was sleeping like a baby. Happy New Year!
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Sandra, I wish you a happy and successful New Year.
I realise that I haven't reviewed you for a while, and thought it was about time I looked in again. Been busy and have had health problems associated with my diabetes which has kept me low at times.
Your story has captivated me hence the six stars.
I confess I had to look up the details about the battle of Jutland. Which seems to have been a draw between the German fleet and the British. Although we appear to have managed despite our losses, to keep the German fleet at bay and out of the Atlantic.
I like the fresh feel to the writing and the concept of trying to alter history, or trying to keep history on track. I have many thoughts on this subject that time and space forbids me to even hint at.
I must find more time to review you, and wish you well for 2019... ~Mel~ xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Sandra, I wish you a happy and successful New Year.
I realise that I haven't reviewed you for a while, and thought it was about time I looked in again. Been busy and have had health problems associated with my diabetes which has kept me low at times.
Your story has captivated me hence the six stars.
I confess I had to look up the details about the battle of Jutland. Which seems to have been a draw between the German fleet and the British. Although we appear to have managed despite our losses, to keep the German fleet at bay and out of the Atlantic.
I like the fresh feel to the writing and the concept of trying to alter history, or trying to keep history on track. I have many thoughts on this subject that time and space forbids me to even hint at.
I must find more time to review you, and wish you well for 2019... ~Mel~ xxx
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Mel. and a really happy, healthy and successful new year to you too!
Jutland has to happen or the future will be changed drastically. The last two chapters goes into detail of what would happen if the Vice Admiral is allowed to change that battle and we lose the war. Allowing one person to live who shouldn't have done, or the other way round, someone dies who shouldn't have done, can create a huge difference. Increase that by thousands, and it doesn't bear thinking about.
Thank you so much for the six stars, and this lovely review. I really do appreciate them. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from JDRBAR
I was so near to breaking point,
worry about the older Mildred now I realise that parallel world doesn't exist while I'm still in this world.
Gotta ask time: I realize that in UK English, you omit the articles "a" and "the" a lot. Is there a rule that governs this? Like in the first sentence above. Is that sentence correct in UK English? Or would it, (as I would automatically do) be "to A or THE breaking point?
I find the second sentence awkward to read. It may be perfectly correct, but I would write it as.....Mildred, now realizing that that parallel world
Just my suggestion
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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I was so near to breaking point,
worry about the older Mildred now I realise that parallel world doesn't exist while I'm still in this world.
Gotta ask time: I realize that in UK English, you omit the articles "a" and "the" a lot. Is there a rule that governs this? Like in the first sentence above. Is that sentence correct in UK English? Or would it, (as I would automatically do) be "to A or THE breaking point?
I find the second sentence awkward to read. It may be perfectly correct, but I would write it as.....Mildred, now realizing that that parallel world
Just my suggestion
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Hi Diane, this is an interesting review. I can see where you are coming from with the 'that that parallel world...' I've added 'the'
now I realise that THE parallel world doesn't exist while I'm still in this world...
But the first sentence, no that's how we say it. Unless it's something like, ...I saw her yesterday and I think she's just about reached HER breaking pointing...
We have loads of differences to the US English. One that jumps out at me, is MATHS, we add the 'S' you don't. I can never understand that because there are so many variants of maths (which is short for Mathematics and also plural.) So, I'm afraid the Americans have to accept our way, as much as we have to accept yours. Where would we be if we were all the same? lol.
Anyway, thank you for reading and reviewing, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Superb chapter. Mildred will do what she has to once she understands what's at stake. Who would refuse to save the world if given the chance?
The bit about making pencil holders from shells was a nice touch, reminding us what Veronica had at stake. Mildred won't let her lose her family, not if she knows that's a consequence of inaction.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Superb chapter. Mildred will do what she has to once she understands what's at stake. Who would refuse to save the world if given the chance?
The bit about making pencil holders from shells was a nice touch, reminding us what Veronica had at stake. Mildred won't let her lose her family, not if she knows that's a consequence of inaction.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Aww, thank you, Phyllis, for the wonderful, shiny 6 stars. I used to make the shell pots years ago and put my pot plants in. :))
Happy New Year, my friend, I hope your health continues to improve, you're doing well! Big hugs! Sandra xxxx
Comment from WryWriter
Wow! This is a great chapter. Held my interest until the end. Pacing in this, along with transition and spell-binding excitement is right on target. Only one suggestion:
fit to burst with the love I felt for them now (that) I was back in my own time.
I love the cliffhanger ending!
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Wow! This is a great chapter. Held my interest until the end. Pacing in this, along with transition and spell-binding excitement is right on target. Only one suggestion:
fit to burst with the love I felt for them now (that) I was back in my own time.
I love the cliffhanger ending!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, my friend! Thanks also for catching that missing word, I've added it now. Big hugs, :)) Sandra xx