Act of Endurance
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Comment from lyenochka
There's a lot I didn't understand in this poem but I like the concept of people being like crystals, who though struggling between good (Jesus) and evil (satan), we have the potential to shine brightly for God if we stay in His Light.
Each line could have a grammatical change to clear up confusion such as the first line:
"Heart a total crystal it without a blemish, "
I would suggest:
Heart -- a complete crystal without blemish
But of course, it's your poem and should have your own style.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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There's a lot I didn't understand in this poem but I like the concept of people being like crystals, who though struggling between good (Jesus) and evil (satan), we have the potential to shine brightly for God if we stay in His Light.
Each line could have a grammatical change to clear up confusion such as the first line:
"Heart a total crystal it without a blemish, "
I would suggest:
Heart -- a complete crystal without blemish
But of course, it's your poem and should have your own style.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I agree having made more revision to enhance its read hopefully more, struggling with grammar but finding delights in readers perceiving my intents. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute and touching views.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
The crystal heart of the believer is very fragile and can be swayed too easily by strong emotion.... Jesus holds on and Satan throws horror into the mix..... But Jesus shines into the crystal heart, drowning out all else..... :) Thank you for sharing! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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The crystal heart of the believer is very fragile and can be swayed too easily by strong emotion.... Jesus holds on and Satan throws horror into the mix..... But Jesus shines into the crystal heart, drowning out all else..... :) Thank you for sharing! :)
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Glad aspects in this particular read were captivating to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Sandra Montanino
I can see by your entry here that you are a true poet and I can also see that I am not. I am afraid I am not following the full meaning of your poem, but with mention of Jesus and Satan, this work has a powerful message.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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I can see by your entry here that you are a true poet and I can also see that I am not. I am afraid I am not following the full meaning of your poem, but with mention of Jesus and Satan, this work has a powerful message.
Comment Written 22-May-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2019
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Not you its me, lacking proper grammar to clearly define my intents, thanking you dispute given flaws for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from Joan E.
Wow--your parallel artwork selection certainly caught my attention! I admired your tercets and use of alliteration to intensify your message. Thanks for your notes of additional context as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Wow--your parallel artwork selection certainly caught my attention! I admired your tercets and use of alliteration to intensify your message. Thanks for your notes of additional context as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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My writes are under constant revisions, efforts hopefully bring a more precise read. Glad aspect in this revision was found appealing to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello TPAC
I read your poem several times and you have baffled me- here is what you are saying to me
that if there is a Heart of total crystal without a blemish we are free of sin, because of Jesus and Satan would not be able to tempt us?
Gert
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Hello TPAC
I read your poem several times and you have baffled me- here is what you are saying to me
that if there is a Heart of total crystal without a blemish we are free of sin, because of Jesus and Satan would not be able to tempt us?
Gert
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Perhaps not clearly stated, the intent was a person in between that couldn't give a comment. Revisions will come. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.
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You are welcome TPAC
Gert
Comment from Earl Corp
I dont think i got this poem's meaning. But on the other hand i' not a poetry guy, so my opinion doesnt matter. Even with your notes at the bottom i didnt get it. That doesnt mean that its not a beautiful poem.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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I dont think i got this poem's meaning. But on the other hand i' not a poetry guy, so my opinion doesnt matter. Even with your notes at the bottom i didnt get it. That doesnt mean that its not a beautiful poem.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Know my writes has its issues, finding it interesting dispute connection an assumed excellent. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from kiwijenny
A heart of crystal without a blemish,
no given judgement a part give and take,
a mart there void per your serve say. ....what does a mart there void per your serve say mean?
God bless
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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A heart of crystal without a blemish,
no given judgement a part give and take,
a mart there void per your serve say. ....what does a mart there void per your serve say mean?
God bless
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Place your own order. This write seems to baffle its reader although confused submit a positive as its perhaps. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching remarks.