Comment from barbara.wilkey

Exceptional

I didn't notice any spag, but maybe I was so captured by the story that I didn't notice them. I am really worried about these women. Gladys is really putting herself in danger from her husband.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

Aw, thank you so much, Barbara, for the wonderful 6 stars, that is so kind of your. Gladys is a different woman when she is out with the suffragettes, as most of them were. I;m glad you enjoyed this part, thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

HI My Little Chick-Dee, I knew they had to get back in a hurry...and I don't think Glady's is out of danger...but this should be interesting with Mildred being seen...and not Veronica...Veronica will never be able to control Mildred...Mildred is her own person my sweet friend...I would think truly back then many women died to have their freedom to vote... I think it is great the way you put a real life happening in here...lets you see what really could happen...it's an awesome chapter sweet girl...Mildred better stay real close to Glady's...but at least Veronica can be by her and not be seen...very well written you....love you so lots...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

LOL, Chick-Dee? what's that?? I hope its a lovely, cuddly baby chicken, lol. Thank you so much for the wonderful 6 stars and the fabulous review, my dear friend. You are a diamond! Veronica will now be able to see and listen in to what happens when Gladys is at home, I wish I could do that! lol. Thanks again, my wonderful friend, love you lots too! Biggest hugs! :)) Sandra xxxx

reply by l.raven on 25-Sep-2018

your a sweet chick...and yes lovely...LOL...I wish I could do it to...LOL...not be seen...I think...LOL...maybe not...LOL....your so welcome you...always sweet angel...soooooooo love you...xxoo

Comment from Ben Colder

Exceptional

Now that would be a race for the moment. The ladies were real ladies back then. In general no offense. They dressed elegantly more so than today. Early nineteen hundreds was something to be admired. Well done Sandy.
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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

Thank you so very much for those colourful golden stars, my lovely friend!! I loved their clothes, and you're right, women did dress so elegantly then. I love dressing up, but when you go out these days, you see the scruffiest women dressed in ripped jeans and covered in tattoos ... they look dreadful. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this part, my dear friend. Big hugs! :)) Sandy xxxx

Just waiting for my next pension to go in and then I'll be getting your book. :)) xxx

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I wonder if the press will sensationalise the apprentice sacrifice of the death of this brave, but foolish woman, as the press has a propensity to do Thames days.. So now Veronica can be seen, but not so Veronica. The episode is focussed oh this one event, England was a long way behind Australia in giving the vote to women. Well done, Sandra, well described episode, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

They did, Roy. I had always thought she deliberately threw herself under the horses hooves, but that wasn't the intention. She wanted to grab the reins of the Kings horse. It was rather foolish, but she was so committed to getting women their rights. Perhaps she had heard that Australian women had already been given the right to vote. The Australian government were a lot more enlightened than the UK government. Still are, I think! Thank you so much, my friend for your lovely review. :) Sandra xxx

reply by royowen on 24-Sep-2018

Such a tragedy Sandra, your writing gears better and betterer.

reply by royowen on 24-Sep-2018

Such a tragedy Sandra, your writing gears better and betterer.

reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

Aw, thank you, Roy, that's such a lovely compliment! :)) xx

reply by royowen on 24-Sep-2018

But true

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

What a riveting scene. Well portrayed! good descriptive detail. Great POV. Great pacing.

I love that Mildred had a handy parasol to hide under so no one would see her talking to herself!

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My brain started to whirr

whir

or is the double R UK spelling?


* Slowly, they began to move, pulling the bunting down, and screwed it up before they threw it all in the rubbish sacks.

Consider making it two sentences:

Slowly, they began to move, pulling the bunting down. They screwed it up before they threw it all in the rubbish sacks.

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We need to be recognised as equals,(no ,) and to be counted for the intelligent people we are

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I looked over at Mildred's worried face as she stood beside Gladys(,) who was shouting out as loud as the rest.


Not reviewing much this month as my Internet in India is slower, and I have some much-needed work for clients to be busy with.

Glad I stopped by when your new chapter was on my front page in the inbox!~

Love,
rd

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

Thank you so very much for your wonderful reviews, Rama. I'll go and make all those corrections, except, 'whirr, ' which does have the double 'r' in the UK English. We are both learning a lot about the different spelling, lol. Thank you, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

reply by rama devi on 25-Sep-2018

Thanks so much for your gracious response, dear friend. I love learning. Yay! :-)))

Comment from rwilliam

Exceptional

I love that you are writing about this. It's fun to see it from anew perspective. As soon as you said they were at the races I knew what was coming. Your story though is making this woman more real to me. I. like that about this piece!

I enjoyed this very much and I didn't catch any fixes. I look forward to reading more of your special story. Good job.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2018

Aw, thank you so very much, Rebecca, for the fabulous review and all those stars! Your words, that Gladys feels real to you, is what every author loves to hear! lol . I really appreciated that, my friend. Big hugs, :)) Sandra xxxx

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Good use of actual history that fit well into the story.

book as if it [was] to blame <--wrong verb
book as if it were to blame<--correct

Outside, there were so many cars[,] and horse [and[ carriages waiting<--Change to...
Outside, there were so many cars and horse carriages waiting

in notes: attend [rally's] and make speeches <--rallies

You've started writing that annoying 'single quote' that Margaret liked. I wish you would use the standard "double quotes" in dialogue, since this is very hard to read.

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

Thank you so much for the corrections, Phyllis, I've gone in and changed them. I did notice Margaret used the 'single quote' so checked on Google which the publishers preferred. They like the single ones. So, I used them in the other 2 books, but I do agree with you, I prefer the double. I can't change now, not in this book, as I want the three to be the same. But, with Eric's book, (have you seen it?) and any other's I write, I will do the double quote. Same reason you stated, the single is hard to see on here. It shows up fine in the books, though. Thanks for your opinion, it means a lot to me. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxxx

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hi Sandra, I've been looking out for your chapter and I am glad to see that here it is. Wonderful writing and you covered the historical event beautifully. Tragic as it is what happened, Gladys will be in big trouble. I can't wait to reading on. I only found a minor thing.
She ... she didn't even have chance to reach out for its reins.' = ... even have a chance ...'
I love this story as you know. A hug. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

Bless your heart, my friend, thank you so much for the shiny 6 stars! You review is so nice. Thank you also for finding that nit! I have been over this so many times, and missed that one totally! All sorted. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This was an exciting chapter, Sandra. I did not expect any of the events, so I read with great interest. I wasn't disappointed. You picked an interesting time to set this chapter. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan


All we've been shown so far are (is) everyday happenings . . .

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

Thank you so much, Jan, for this lovely review and pointing out that error, I went straight in and corrected it. I'm really pleased you liked this part, my friend, thank you! Big hugs. Sandra xxxx

Comment from damommy

Excellent

I've read about the awful things these women went through, and how they were treated in jail. I'm not sure if Emily meant to commit suicide or grab the horse's rain, but I can't see the benefit of either. It probably didn't help the cause as she would considered one of those 'hysterical females' that don't deserve the vote.

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 Comment Written 24-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018

Absolutely. I researched the bit about her throwing herself at the horse. She only wanted to topple it, apparently. What an idiot! No, it didn't do anything to help the cause, but the women got their votes probably because of all the war work they did, and some women did some pretty remarkable things. Thank you so much, Yvonne for reading this part. Big hugs, my friend. :) Sandra xx