The Second Coming...Entry Denied
150 words35 total reviews
Comment from RodG
This story definitely deserves the blue ribbon, SE. I really like how you have blended Christian belief with modern-day politics. I also like how how both describe and characterize Christ. A terrific closer. Rod
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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This story definitely deserves the blue ribbon, SE. I really like how you have blended Christian belief with modern-day politics. I also like how how both describe and characterize Christ. A terrific closer. Rod
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much Thought provoking was the goal.
Comment from phill doran
Hello SE
This really is a very good write. It is crisp, emotive and very direct (and very apt on many levels at present).
I have sought it out just to read and rate - there is nothing to add or comment upon other than to compliment you.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Hello SE
This really is a very good write. It is crisp, emotive and very direct (and very apt on many levels at present).
I have sought it out just to read and rate - there is nothing to add or comment upon other than to compliment you.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the celestial bouquet and your efforts to share your thoughts. It is greatly appreciated.
Comment from kathleenspalding
OOooo! Good one! Congratulations on your win with this timely 150 word flash fiction. Very well written with excellent artwork, and I love the authors notes. Thank you for writing and sharing and raising awareness!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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OOooo! Good one! Congratulations on your win with this timely 150 word flash fiction. Very well written with excellent artwork, and I love the authors notes. Thank you for writing and sharing and raising awareness!
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much. Yes, it is a commentary., meant to give readers a pause.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much.
Comment from jenintorre
Another very clever flash fiction. I loved it but sorry no sixes left. Flas fiction is my favourite form of wriiting and you are very talented ag it. Cheers. Jen.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Another very clever flash fiction. I loved it but sorry no sixes left. Flas fiction is my favourite form of wriiting and you are very talented ag it. Cheers. Jen.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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It's a great disciplinre Thanks for reading.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It does make you wonder about who we're turning away. They could know the cure to cancer or something and we're pushing them away. You did a great job and this makes us think.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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It does make you wonder about who we're turning away. They could know the cure to cancer or something and we're pushing them away. You did a great job and this makes us think.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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I think the situation is very complex. Thanks for reading.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Ingrid,
I was working on a piece very similar to this... darn it! lol
This is very well written and the sad thing is that's probably what would happen.
Of course we all know Jesus was white with blue eyes because of the wealth of description given in the Bible... you'd think someone might have mentioned this little fact...
I myself have frequently been mistaken for the man himself.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Hi Ingrid,
I was working on a piece very similar to this... darn it! lol
This is very well written and the sad thing is that's probably what would happen.
Of course we all know Jesus was white with blue eyes because of the wealth of description given in the Bible... you'd think someone might have mentioned this little fact...
I myself have frequently been mistaken for the man himself.
All the best
G
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Great minds thank alike. I'm jealous of your hair. Thanks for the review
Comment from Spitfire
You set up the situation in paragraph with a tired and sloppy immigration officer. "Rubber stamped" serves two purposes here--stereotyping the less obvious one. Satiric poke at Trump. "Gentle protest' enhances the image of Jesus as well as the reference to prayers.
Blue eyes is a hoot. I've often wondered about this.
Terrific ending.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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You set up the situation in paragraph with a tired and sloppy immigration officer. "Rubber stamped" serves two purposes here--stereotyping the less obvious one. Satiric poke at Trump. "Gentle protest' enhances the image of Jesus as well as the reference to prayers.
Blue eyes is a hoot. I've often wondered about this.
Terrific ending.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Thanks so much for the stars. This came out of a conversation about prejudice being fueled by hate by some of the same folk who are the noisiest about religion.
Comment from jmdg1954
Well with much time on my hands watching football on this rainy Sunday in New Jersey, I counted 150 words.
I thought your story was superb and can he very true. A great entry for the contest in my opinion! Best of luck,
John
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Well with much time on my hands watching football on this rainy Sunday in New Jersey, I counted 150 words.
I thought your story was superb and can he very true. A great entry for the contest in my opinion! Best of luck,
John
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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It's raining here too. Thanks for the endorsement.
Comment from prettybluebirds
A clever and well-done short story. I always write these stories on my word processor first to make sure the count is accurate. I have noticed that FS is count is often incorrect. Best of luck in the contest. It looks like a winner to me.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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A clever and well-done short story. I always write these stories on my word processor first to make sure the count is accurate. I have noticed that FS is count is often incorrect. Best of luck in the contest. It looks like a winner to me.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2018
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Weird, huh. I use Word 10 and believe in its accuracy, but when someone told me mine was only 149 words I changed it, but made a note so that the committee could see my effort. Thanks.