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Getting clean from meth isn't easy

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Comment from lyenochka
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Excellent descriptions even from the details of the Formica tops and Gary trying to wipe it with his sleeve. I like the spelling errors in Gary's writing which is so common in a generation of computer-only users. It like the humor of "diabolical vs. dialectical." So glad that Gary has connected with his mother. But I'm concerned that he keeps calling it her disease as if there's a hint of blame despite the fact he finds her "heroic."

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Hi there; thanks for stopping by to read and review. I believe Gary does blame his mother a bit for his diagnosis. Since the illness is genetic, he has to believe that he has gotten it from her. Its human nature to try to find and assign fault. Thanks for catching the humor and stumbling in Gary's writing. I worked pretty hard on that. I appreciate your encouraging words,
    ~patty~
Comment from Heidi M
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Great job with your research to make this authentic, Patty. I loved how you substituted diabolical for dialectical. Gary's probably thinking it's pretty diabolical about now! I thought his misspellings were realistic.
One minor suggestion:
Most head for coffee, and look for a place to wait until breakfast is ready...I would suggest this: 'Most head(ed) for coffee and look(ed) for a place to wait until breakfast (was) ready...'
I love that Gary is imagining about his Mom's reaction to receiving his letter. He's thinking about someone else instead of himself.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Hi Heidi; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I will incorporate the suggestions you made. I think I loss track of my tense there. I appreciate your comments and encouragement,
    ~patty~
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
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D.B.T (Dialectical Behavior Therapy): This therapy is often used for high-risk, tough-to-treat patients, often with multiple diagnoses. It was initially designed to treat patients with suicidal behaviours and Borderline Personality Disorder, but it has been adapted to treat other mental health issues that cause problems with relationships, work, and emotional well-being. People with Borderline Personality Disorder often have difficulty regulating emotions. This typically causes disruptive moods, destructive behaviour and problems with interpersonal relationships..... yep, I am currently undergoing that therapy it is not pleasant for sure, but other forms have failed me. As usual you nailed it with this one Patty it is truly amazing writing your insight is so spot on. Love Meia x

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Hey there Meia, thanks for stopping by to read and review. Is the DBT working for you? I'm doing well right now, but wonder if doing some more therapy - especially one that is designed for my diagnosis - wouldn't be a good thing. I hope it helps you, and that you are doing good, too.
    Love, patty
Comment from chcbeck
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I love the style in which the Writing of the letter changes it makes the character more believable. You cover some tough themes within your writing and it is well written . A great piece thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your comments on the changes in style - I had to work hard on that. Your kind words of encouragement mean a great deal,
    ~patty~
Comment from Badger_29
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Although you say that his letter writing has a lot to be desired, you present this package very well, and there is a lot of depth and human emotion/feelings. Reading between the lines, these are subjects which are near and dear to me, I suffer from bipolar I, ADHD, OCD, and Tourette's syndrome, so Iam very familiar with a lot of the concepts which you are presenting here.
I have more to say, but am out of time, will comment more in the near future.
Well Written I love your change of font style and color. Well done!
Blessings,
Brother Badger

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I appreciate your warm comments and for you sharing your own struggles with me. I will add you to my daily prayer list.
    ~patty~
Comment from MelB
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I started correcting the errors in the first paragraph and then realized you might have meant to do it, since this was the letter from Gary. I'm glad I read your notes before I continued correcting. I'm glad he is reaching out to his mom and that he can call soon.

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 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. The errors in Gary's writing were part of me trying to differentiate his writing style from my own. Both my husband and my son are very articulate when they speak and then when they write, it all falls apart. I appreciate your kind words of encouragement,
    ~patty~
reply by MelB on 25-Mar-2017
    My husband and son are the same way. My husband transposes letters.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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He sounds sincere in his desire to get clean and do better in his relationship with you and his sister. I am happy for you and him and hope it all works and he makes it through re-hab with flying colors. Good luck to all. Hugs Nancy

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 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017


reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
    Thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. This fiction book is merely my hopes and dreams of my son getting into rehab at some point SOON. Gary's story is loosely based on my son's addiction, and my struggle to get through.
    ~patty~
reply by nancy_e_davis on 25-Mar-2017
    Okay, I understand. N