Act of Endurance
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27 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello TPAC, this is quite a unique poem. Very enigmatic and I did find it hard to get a general impression as to what you are saying, but it is written nicely and I don't have any suggestions for improvement other than maybe a bit more in your author notes. I get that you are dreaming of what might be, different characters. Thanks for sharing your poem, which I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Ana :)
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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Hello TPAC, this is quite a unique poem. Very enigmatic and I did find it hard to get a general impression as to what you are saying, but it is written nicely and I don't have any suggestions for improvement other than maybe a bit more in your author notes. I get that you are dreaming of what might be, different characters. Thanks for sharing your poem, which I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, Ana :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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I will consider your suggestions, hoping my new revisions address such pits in the write. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute those flaws and welcomed response.
Comment from meeshu
I really like your eclectic use of the English language. I may not understand all of it but I get a feeling for where it flows. well done, tpac.............meeshu
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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I really like your eclectic use of the English language. I may not understand all of it but I get a feeling for where it flows. well done, tpac.............meeshu
Comment Written 22-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2018
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I like your usage of the word eclectic, my revisions are improving my writes, still I have a far way to go. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Something special I want to be
Acts commended, facts done as me, .. I particularly like the concluding lines.
Sonali
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Something special I want to be
Acts commended, facts done as me, .. I particularly like the concluding lines.
Sonali
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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Glad this write captured some appeal, maybe after pulling its pits - a smooth flow. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from sunnilicious
Great spiritual poem. I found it motivational and uplifting. Well thought out and nicely written. Good visual imagery as you sort through your beliefs and feelings. It works together nicely. Keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Great spiritual poem. I found it motivational and uplifting. Well thought out and nicely written. Good visual imagery as you sort through your beliefs and feelings. It works together nicely. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thanking you for your kind statements, but most of my writes suffer pits or flaws: I'm working on them. Still, I appreciate your comments about intented interests.
Comment from Susanjohn
reads as a song...loving the first verse....and the implication of a better life...Virtue towards others be my goal...great line!!! enjoyed reading!!
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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reads as a song...loving the first verse....and the implication of a better life...Virtue towards others be my goal...great line!!! enjoyed reading!!
Comment Written 16-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2016
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Thanking you for your kind words, yet most my writes suffer expression pits. Again thanks for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from frierajac
On one hand, reminds me of "Jonathan Livingston Seagull", and then there is
the idea of an enlightened mind, as the theme. The last line, that sort of way...
reminded me of what I actually said when I read that book by Richard Bach.
A an echoing mind effect.
However, I didn't get the line, " My to fears..." and not "for tomorrows pests'
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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On one hand, reminds me of "Jonathan Livingston Seagull", and then there is
the idea of an enlightened mind, as the theme. The last line, that sort of way...
reminded me of what I actually said when I read that book by Richard Bach.
A an echoing mind effect.
However, I didn't get the line, " My to fears..." and not "for tomorrows pests'
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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Things to occur as " my to fears", never had the pleasure to read Richard Bach. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from KyColonel Randal
I don't know why, but as I was reading this I thought it would make good song lyrics. Thank you for sharing. I notice this is the chapter of a book, so I expect I will be seeing more. I appreciate the opportunity to read your work and offer my input.
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reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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I don't know why, but as I was reading this I thought it would make good song lyrics. Thank you for sharing. I notice this is the chapter of a book, so I expect I will be seeing more. I appreciate the opportunity to read your work and offer my input.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2016
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I appreciate your comment to aid the writes in this book. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.