Christine's Poems
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Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very nice poem for the challenge.
-Good imagery and progression of thoughts.
-You definitely get across the peacefulness of the surroundings.
-A couple of my favorite lines are:
* "To fix my gaze upon the sky and watch the white clouds pass me by."
* "A glimpse of heaven I have seen, while lying on the hill of green."
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
-A very nice poem for the challenge.
-Good imagery and progression of thoughts.
-You definitely get across the peacefulness of the surroundings.
-A couple of my favorite lines are:
* "To fix my gaze upon the sky and watch the white clouds pass me by."
* "A glimpse of heaven I have seen, while lying on the hill of green."
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Hi Respa1 Thanks very much for your review and support again This was such a inspirational image and i am glad you enjoyed this and my tiny glimpse of heaven i enjoyed writing this and your comments mean a lot to me Cheers for a stress free lovely day Christine😃😃
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You are quite welcome. Ideas came through well.
Comment from Mark Valentine
You can feel the stress melting away as one paciifc image after another washes over you - the safe sanctuary - the white clouds passing over, closing youe eyes amidst the tranquility, and then, once re-energized, the re-awakening. The language matches the picute perfectly, and the whole thing brings peace and renewal. A wonderfully crafted poem!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
You can feel the stress melting away as one paciifc image after another washes over you - the safe sanctuary - the white clouds passing over, closing youe eyes amidst the tranquility, and then, once re-energized, the re-awakening. The language matches the picute perfectly, and the whole thing brings peace and renewal. A wonderfully crafted poem!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2016
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Hi Mark, Many Many Thanks for your wonderful support and fabulous rating for my poem I am stoked. I am so glad this melted the stress and Your comments have made my day and so glad I went with this. Truly grateful And many Cheers to you Christine😃😃😃
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Hi Mark, Many Many Thanks for your wonderful support and fabulous rating for my poem I am stoked. I am so glad this melted the stress and Your comments have made my day and so glad I went with this. Truly grateful And many Cheers to you Christine😃😃😃
Comment from RoostyNester
Very nice and soothing poem. I can feel the grass as I walk through your poem. How beautiful the nature is in all it's glory.....God decorated the world with beauty and peace.
Very nice and soothing poem. I can feel the grass as I walk through your poem. How beautiful the nature is in all it's glory.....God decorated the world with beauty and peace.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Chrissy,
I enjoyed your poem for the challenge group. You did a great job expressing the serenity & feeling of solitude that allows one to regroup.
Your internal rhyme pattern is great, too.
No greater gift I could not find a captured memory in my mind
[maybe I am not reading this right, but does it need the word 'as' after the word find? Or could it read
No greater gift could I find as a captured memory in my mind
[please forgive if I have misunderstood].
Good job a7 thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
Chrissy,
I enjoyed your poem for the challenge group. You did a great job expressing the serenity & feeling of solitude that allows one to regroup.
Your internal rhyme pattern is great, too.
No greater gift I could not find a captured memory in my mind
[maybe I am not reading this right, but does it need the word 'as' after the word find? Or could it read
No greater gift could I find as a captured memory in my mind
[please forgive if I have misunderstood].
Good job a7 thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016
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Hi Jan, Thanks so much for your review and for your suggestion I have added an 'as' a captured memory .... I think that eorks better and still keep within my meter. i can't wait to read everyones poem but have to go off to work now so will catch up tonight. lovely to hear from you Cheers Christine
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Christine,
What a beautiful picture you painted. I could just imagine lying on the grass and letting all thought drift away. Thus becoming rejuvenated. This picture does provoke many thoughts. Wonderful writing.
God Bless,
Darlene
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Christine,
What a beautiful picture you painted. I could just imagine lying on the grass and letting all thought drift away. Thus becoming rejuvenated. This picture does provoke many thoughts. Wonderful writing.
God Bless,
Darlene
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2016
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is so soothing in content and construction. The meter is as rhythmic as a lullaby and the rhyme is seamless. I absolutely loved the 'metamorphic re-arrange' as that is what epiphanies are all about. Well done lovely lady and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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This is so soothing in content and construction. The meter is as rhythmic as a lullaby and the rhyme is seamless. I absolutely loved the 'metamorphic re-arrange' as that is what epiphanies are all about. Well done lovely lady and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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Comment Written 01-Aug-2016