No Father Needed
Minute Poem-Potlatch Challenge32 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
No wonder we have so much in common. I practically raised myself, too. At five I could come and go as I pleased, no one ever knew where I was, or worried about me. At fifteen, I had my own apartment, and we had a blast, usually stoned. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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No wonder we have so much in common. I practically raised myself, too. At five I could come and go as I pleased, no one ever knew where I was, or worried about me. At fifteen, I had my own apartment, and we had a blast, usually stoned. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Yeah. Wasn't it strange when we were young. Hell, we could just take off and no one worried. All damn day off to who knows where and not a worry. When my family sold our first house, no one had a key to the front door. It had never been locked in the twelve years we lived there even when we went on vacation. Amazing. Different times. LOL mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
Michael. This is just so sweet. Yes, I have to say you are one Irish elf who turned out pretty well. You did not need a man to teach you how to be one, that is for damn sure. Great job on this. Love it!! NG
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Michael. This is just so sweet. Yes, I have to say you are one Irish elf who turned out pretty well. You did not need a man to teach you how to be one, that is for damn sure. Great job on this. Love it!! NG
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Oh. That's such a very nice thing to say. I'm really touched. Thanks love. michael
Comment from barkingdog
Fantastic final lines: 'I raised myself this Irish elf.'
I can relate to this, Mikey. Many of us didn't know our fathers very well if at all. Mine visited. Rather robotic: hug, hand the child a gift, ask a few question, another hug and he was gone until the next holiday or birthday. Eventually, there were only cards and then nothing.
Mom was there but wasn't ...she was broken.
Like I said, I can relate.
I really like this form. If I read a few more, I may try it. The Poetry Potlatch gives me a chance to read many. It's like a total immersion.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Fantastic final lines: 'I raised myself this Irish elf.'
I can relate to this, Mikey. Many of us didn't know our fathers very well if at all. Mine visited. Rather robotic: hug, hand the child a gift, ask a few question, another hug and he was gone until the next holiday or birthday. Eventually, there were only cards and then nothing.
Mom was there but wasn't ...she was broken.
Like I said, I can relate.
I really like this form. If I read a few more, I may try it. The Poetry Potlatch gives me a chance to read many. It's like a total immersion.
:) ellen
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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This form has been a THORN for me. Finally, I think I'm getting a handle on it. I think cold dad's are worse than no dad's. I've met a lot of women who had cold dad's and the effect was not good. Something strange about a father who doesn't go crazy for his daughter I think. My mom was nutty as a loon. But actually she was loving, so she was really a good mother. I never held it against her that she was nuts. What a great review. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written minute poem. You seem to turn out well. It is sad though, that you did not know your father or that your mother was not much involved. You are very strong many others would end up with psychological problems.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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A very well-written minute poem. You seem to turn out well. It is sad though, that you did not know your father or that your mother was not much involved. You are very strong many others would end up with psychological problems.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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It never bothered me for some reason. I had other people in my life and I've always been a loner, so I guess it all somehow worked out. Thanks so much. mikey
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So many people will dwell on their bad circumstances it is all they can see. I admire you for rising above your circumstances.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good light-hearted minute poem for this week's topic mikey and with a little twist of the Irish in it. Got the meter down pat, we are all learning with these different challenge forms. Loving it.
cheers,
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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A good light-hearted minute poem for this week's topic mikey and with a little twist of the Irish in it. Got the meter down pat, we are all learning with these different challenge forms. Loving it.
cheers,
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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I'm with you. I NEVER thought I'd get a handle on this form. It's finally starting to become something I can work with. YAY!
So glad you enjoyed this. Thanks a bunch. mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey Mav, where did you find that picture? What a beautiful harp. Course we of the Irish persuasion all the play that musical instrument, right?
Your meter is off just a tad here:
yet there's nothing's lost inside me
suggestion
yet nothing's lost inside of me
I didn't know my dad much either and I see no hole in my soul. But then, who's looking?
raising myself is also off meter so suggestion to change:
I raised myself
Ha. Sounds like our backgrounds are fairly similar.
Super job with this and emerald green is my favourite colour.
Ange
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Hey Mav, where did you find that picture? What a beautiful harp. Course we of the Irish persuasion all the play that musical instrument, right?
Your meter is off just a tad here:
yet there's nothing's lost inside me
suggestion
yet nothing's lost inside of me
I didn't know my dad much either and I see no hole in my soul. But then, who's looking?
raising myself is also off meter so suggestion to change:
I raised myself
Ha. Sounds like our backgrounds are fairly similar.
Super job with this and emerald green is my favourite colour.
Ange
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Ha! It was funny, Ange. I saw the picture and didn't even stop to consider if it even went with the piece. Of course we can all play it. I see all these people lament not knowing their fathers and I just can't relate. It's never bothered me in the least and I don't see why it would bother anyone. Isn't whatever circumstance you're raised in kind of normal to you? Well, my theory of the day. Our backgrounds are somewhat the same in many ways. Of course, I'm not an enticing Irish women ... yet! LOL! Always go for the laugh. Love emerald green as well and I'd chose an emerald over a diamond.
You're a doll. Thanks,
Mav
Comment from Joy Graham
You're fast. I took most of my time finding a picture. Sorry about not knowing your dad. Father's Day must be a tough day for you.
- good rhymes
- meter is a bit off in lines 5 and 11, but the rest is superb.
suggestions:
- yet nothing's lost inside of me
- all by myself
Good showing for this Minute Poem challenge.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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You're fast. I took most of my time finding a picture. Sorry about not knowing your dad. Father's Day must be a tough day for you.
- good rhymes
- meter is a bit off in lines 5 and 11, but the rest is superb.
suggestions:
- yet nothing's lost inside of me
- all by myself
Good showing for this Minute Poem challenge.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Finally getting to some responses. :))
I fixed the meter right away as soon as I read this. Thanks for the tips, I used them. There's usually some glitches if you really write without stopping. I normally wait a couple days before I spruce it up. I was never sad about not knowing my dad. It was normal to me and Father's day doesn't bother me. The mentally ill people I take care of all call me dad, so it's kind of a fun day really. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Great minute poem. Love the content and the form, I am infatuated with after having written one! The read is smooth and I love the last verse! It's sad, but the last line is so cute! Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Great minute poem. Love the content and the form, I am infatuated with after having written one! The read is smooth and I love the last verse! It's sad, but the last line is so cute! Great job. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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I've never been sad about any of it, so no worries. It was all normal to me and still is. :))
I'm finally getting the hand of this form after about three years. LOL!!! Yep, I think I like it. mikey
Comment from tfawcus
This strikes something of a chord. Although I had both mother and father, we were separated by some 8000 miles for the greater part of my childhood. However, as is the case with your Irish elf, I'm not aware of any hole being left in my psyche! Once again, an accomplished poem from you, Mikey, and in record time!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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This strikes something of a chord. Although I had both mother and father, we were separated by some 8000 miles for the greater part of my childhood. However, as is the case with your Irish elf, I'm not aware of any hole being left in my psyche! Once again, an accomplished poem from you, Mikey, and in record time!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Wow. That's a distance indeed. I've always thought that however you're raised as a child would seem normal. I know it seemed normal to me and I had no particular angst.
I think Barb was off the hook in like nine minutes. HAHAHA! I feel slow almost. Thanks a bunch. mikey
Comment from seaglass
Nicely written and a tribute to all who had to grow up without this advantage. President Obama speaks of his childhood confusion of not having a father as other boys had and he turned out pretty good too, in my opinion. Much better than Thumpy Trump with his rich daddy. I had a present father who was emotionally distant so who's to say what's needed, really. We all have to answer for ourselves in the end.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Nicely written and a tribute to all who had to grow up without this advantage. President Obama speaks of his childhood confusion of not having a father as other boys had and he turned out pretty good too, in my opinion. Much better than Thumpy Trump with his rich daddy. I had a present father who was emotionally distant so who's to say what's needed, really. We all have to answer for ourselves in the end.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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I think distant fathers are worse than no fathers from what I've encountered. There's something very askew about that. I was never really sad as it was normal to me. Yep, whatever Trumps situation was, turned out a chump. We agree completely, we all have to answer for ourselves. I think that's the most important thing for everyone to realize. I'd guess that most problems stem from an unwillingness to do just that.
Thanks a million. mikey
