I Am a Rock
Contest entry81 total reviews
Comment from MLEaton
An interesting take on "I am a rock'. I remember the original and had the tune running through my mind. Your words work perfectly with the music and convey a sense of deep hurt. I won't say I prefer them to the originals but they are certainly thought-provoking.
Thank you. Marion:)
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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An interesting take on "I am a rock'. I remember the original and had the tune running through my mind. Your words work perfectly with the music and convey a sense of deep hurt. I won't say I prefer them to the originals but they are certainly thought-provoking.
Thank you. Marion:)
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Yes, Marion, I prefer the original, too, but I rewrote them thirty years ago (!) to address the loneliness and isolation I felt at the time in a way the song failed to do. I am glad you found my interesting take thought-provoking. Thank you for your review.
Comment from foxangie123
Wow what an excellent take you took on this prompted contest. Excellent my friend. A great set of lyrics to restructure for our entertainment.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Wow what an excellent take you took on this prompted contest. Excellent my friend. A great set of lyrics to restructure for our entertainment.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, foxangie123, for your enthusiastic review. I am glad you are wowed by my restructured lyrics.
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Great stuff.
Comment from Pantygynt
A neat parody on what was at one time a fine pop song. It must have been popular. Even I was aware of it. This one of yours fits the form very well even though the philosophy is, as one might expect with a parody, a little different.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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A neat parody on what was at one time a fine pop song. It must have been popular. Even I was aware of it. This one of yours fits the form very well even though the philosophy is, as one might expect with a parody, a little different.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, Pantygynt, for your review of my "neat parody on what was at one time a fine pop song."
Comment from rspoet
This is a fine entry for the contest
A popular song most on fanstory will remember
Good reversal of the lyric meaning
from being a rock to being vulnerable
not a rock, merely isolated
from strong walls to frail and fragile
Very good re-write
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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This is a fine entry for the contest
A popular song most on fanstory will remember
Good reversal of the lyric meaning
from being a rock to being vulnerable
not a rock, merely isolated
from strong walls to frail and fragile
Very good re-write
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, rspoet, for your fine review of my lyric rewrite which reversed "the lyric meaning from being a rock to being vulnerable." Thank you also for wishing me well in the contest.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice job with the song re-write.
-You get across the idea of being an island very well--
building walls, and having no laughter or love.
-Nice ending:
"And this non-rock does feel pain,
And this island always cries."
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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-Nice job with the song re-write.
-You get across the idea of being an island very well--
building walls, and having no laughter or love.
-Nice ending:
"And this non-rock does feel pain,
And this island always cries."
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Oh, thank you, respa1, for your generous review of my song-rewrite. I am glad you loved the ending, too.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from c_lucas
Over time, a rock can be turned into dusk and an island can be washed away. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Over time, a rock can be turned into dusk and an island can be washed away. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, c_lucas, for your review of my metaphor-filled lyrics rewrite. Thank you also for wishing me good luck in the contest.
Comment from Treischel
A very good paraphrase of the original song. You captured its moods and rhythms quite well. Since it is December, I thought you might say: as the happy children frolic in the snow. As written, that line just sort of dies. I thought also, that you might benefit by changing the lyrics more as this is so close to the original words. Sorry, it just doesn't do it for me.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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A very good paraphrase of the original song. You captured its moods and rhythms quite well. Since it is December, I thought you might say: as the happy children frolic in the snow. As written, that line just sort of dies. I thought also, that you might benefit by changing the lyrics more as this is so close to the original words. Sorry, it just doesn't do it for me.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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That "snow" line is a most excellent suggestion, Treischel. I am going to use it. Thank you for for your review and helping me improve the lyrics rewrite.
Comment from robina1978
I did not know the song, but yours can be sung. I liked the I am not a rock but an isle best. The way you wrote it I could almost see it in front of me. It does not rhyme but flows very well. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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I did not know the song, but yours can be sung. I liked the I am not a rock but an isle best. The way you wrote it I could almost see it in front of me. It does not rhyme but flows very well. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, robina1978, for your generous, six star review. Thank you also for wishing me the best in the contest. I deeply appreciate it.
Comment from royowen
This is a really good interpretation of the lyrics to the song by Simon and Garfunkel. I'm just wondering that it hasn't wandered terribly far from the original, but a good reproduction of the lyrics, one can certainly sing a long with it, good job, good luck, blessings. Roy
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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This is a really good interpretation of the lyrics to the song by Simon and Garfunkel. I'm just wondering that it hasn't wandered terribly far from the original, but a good reproduction of the lyrics, one can certainly sing a long with it, good job, good luck, blessings. Roy
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Yes, Roy, other reviewer said " it hasn't wandered terribly far from the original." It does something more subtle. It reverses the lyrics from a position of rock-like strength to tissue-thin vulnerability. Thank you for your review and wishing me good luck in the contest.
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My pleasure
Comment from MacMhuirich
A wonderful parody on the Simon and Garfunkel classic. Love this:-
I have my looks
And my records to protect me.
I am shielded in tin armour,
Hiding in my cell, - Good imagery in your clever wording. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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A wonderful parody on the Simon and Garfunkel classic. Love this:-
I have my looks
And my records to protect me.
I am shielded in tin armour,
Hiding in my cell, - Good imagery in your clever wording. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 07-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2016
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Thank you, John, for your encouraging review and wishing me the best in the contest. I am glad you enjoyed my "Good imagery in your clever wording."
