2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "haiku (flash sonic boom and)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
66 total reviews
Comment from ciliverde
Wow, nice job!
Your first line introduces the sound, that follows the flash.
Your second line makes a special point of the bright flash, which is often fantastic (or scary if it's too close) to see.
The last line is my favorite - as a meteorologist (and human) I can truly appreciate the truly "alive" feeling of lightning.
Nice job!
Carol
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Wow, nice job!
Your first line introduces the sound, that follows the flash.
Your second line makes a special point of the bright flash, which is often fantastic (or scary if it's too close) to see.
The last line is my favorite - as a meteorologist (and human) I can truly appreciate the truly "alive" feeling of lightning.
Nice job!
Carol
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review and kind words, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku about lightning, Flash Sonic Boom, gathers a lot of things together for this brief poem. The sonic boom that occurs as thunder as the electricity shorts to ground, and the high-powered effect of light that we all recognize, work well to remind of the natural view. The final line, It's Alive, takes me to Frankenstein's laboratory and the Hollywood theatrics of using lightning to bring a creature to life. Nice job with this.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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This haiku about lightning, Flash Sonic Boom, gathers a lot of things together for this brief poem. The sonic boom that occurs as thunder as the electricity shorts to ground, and the high-powered effect of light that we all recognize, work well to remind of the natural view. The final line, It's Alive, takes me to Frankenstein's laboratory and the Hollywood theatrics of using lightning to bring a creature to life. Nice job with this.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your awesome review. :)
Comment from Neonewman
Beautiful piece of artwork you have chosen my friend. I enjoy watching lightning storms at night! wonderfully crafted piece you have entered for this writing prompt! Best of luck!
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Beautiful piece of artwork you have chosen my friend. I enjoy watching lightning storms at night! wonderfully crafted piece you have entered for this writing prompt! Best of luck!
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your awesome review. :)
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My pleasure!
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My pleasure!
Comment from paperwait
This haiku has great imagery, and the picture is a perfect choice. The break from the traditional 5-7-5 format enhances the power of the piece. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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This haiku has great imagery, and the picture is a perfect choice. The break from the traditional 5-7-5 format enhances the power of the piece. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much, I appreciate your awesome review. :)
Comment from Ekim777
A strong, arresting image. It comes alive on the page. For a classic Haiku, I wonder at the e syllable count.. Good luck, meanwhile I am enlightened. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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A strong, arresting image. It comes alive on the page. For a classic Haiku, I wonder at the e syllable count.. Good luck, meanwhile I am enlightened. -Ekim777
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :) The rules for this contest is 17 syllables or less.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
What an impacting haiku you've created. The initial impact is striking...;)
and electric! Thrilling sight and great entry.
Linda
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Poet,
What an impacting haiku you've created. The initial impact is striking...;)
and electric! Thrilling sight and great entry.
Linda
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from padumachitta
hi Whoever you are:-) a well chosen spark of words for this writing prompt...great picture as well.
I am never sure about using and at the end of a line...ya it connects...but ...
anyway, even with that it gets a five, becasue I could so see the lightning.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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hi Whoever you are:-) a well chosen spark of words for this writing prompt...great picture as well.
I am never sure about using and at the end of a line...ya it connects...but ...
anyway, even with that it gets a five, becasue I could so see the lightning.
padumachitta
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
Nice entry into the haiku contest which evokes visions of a rainstorm and the budding of nature. Also it makes you think of Frankenstein.
I hope you did well.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Nice entry into the haiku contest which evokes visions of a rainstorm and the budding of nature. Also it makes you think of Frankenstein.
I hope you did well.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
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You are so very welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from Tessa Kay
Lightnings are beautiful, but can also be very scary. I was wondering if it would make more sense to put the 'and' into the second line, that way the short /long/ short would be more pronounced. Just a thought.
All the best in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Lightnings are beautiful, but can also be very scary. I was wondering if it would make more sense to put the 'and' into the second line, that way the short /long/ short would be more pronounced. Just a thought.
All the best in the contest. :)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A very haiku with lines one and two interconnecting perfectly and line three is a perfect satori. Good description of lightning and I wish you good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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A very haiku with lines one and two interconnecting perfectly and line three is a perfect satori. Good description of lightning and I wish you good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you very much for the awesome review. :)