Comment from Sasha

Excellent

This is a lovely Villanelle. I especially like poems with repeating lines and this one is a true gem. As far as I can tell, you have followed the rules perfectly. This is such a deep, dark, yet beautifully written poem and I sincerely wish you all the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015

Thanks for this positive feedback, Sasha. Over the years, I've come to know you love poems with refrains. Glad you enjoyed this one too.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is beautifully constructed and fits the Villianelle form perfectly. Your words are well chosen. You use of "mourning" night sets the mood of the poem. Your references to devoid of light, darkness, and cloak of black suggest the solemn, despairing mood. There are not even stars. Grim, despairing thoughts about death. There is despair in the line "my dreams are bound to die." Such a lovely poem, such dark thoughts. This is excellent for the contest, so good luck to you. judi

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015

Thanks for this lovely and encouraging review, my friend! I know you don't like the dark themes much, so I really appreciate your positive comments. Thanks for the good luck wishes, too.

Regards,
Anupam

reply by judiverse on 31-Aug-2015

You're welcome. This should really do well in the contest. judi

Comment from Taffspride

Exceptional

An excellent entry for the contest my dear friend. It is one of the most heartwrenching, beautiful poem that I have read in a long time.

I love the repetition in the lines:

Come mourning night... no star will grace the sky.

And:

Devoid of light, my dreams are bound to die.

These two lines make such an impact when the poem is read aloud, which I have done several times. To say it is excellent simply is not enough. I cannot find the right words.

Thank you for sharing, and very good luck in the contest, this surely is a winner in my book.

Iechyd da

Ann

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015

That's a wonderful compliment, dear Ann. I'm so happy to know this poem made some impact with those refrain lines. It was a fun exercise framing a Villanelle. Thanks for your lovely comments and the glowing stars. Much appreciated. Have a great day!

Regards,
Anupam

Comment from mumsyone

Exceptional

Excellent, Anupam! Great title and first (and repeating line): 'Come mourning night, no star will grace the sky'.
An exact message about mourning, and a beautiful presentation. Excellent all round.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2015

Hi Lois,

Thanks for your positive comments and the gift of shimmery stars. I'm pleased to know you found the poem appealing. Your comments are much appreciated.

Regards,
Anupam

Comment from AnnieDawn

Excellent

What a difficult type of poetry you have chosen to write and you have done an awesome job doing so. I can only go by the rules given for the contest and as far as I can review you have followed them correctly. I like the subject matter and can relate to your writing as the flow was constant and easy to follow. Good luck in your contest.

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks for such a kind and positive feedback, Annie. The form is actually a bit tricky, and I'm glad to know you could relate to the theme. Your comments are much appreciated. Thanks for your warm wishes, too. :)

Regards,
Anupam

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

I won't like my dreams to die, I want them to come true. I want to be happy while I am still on earth, there is lots of time to live in the darkness where no stars light the skies when I leave this world. My humble opinion. Your poem is dark and morbid, I like more light and happiness.

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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks for reading and sharing your thoughts, Sandra. I don't think one can realize the importance of light and happiness...until darkness comes - just for a while. And if a dream dies, one might get born soon. Just some thoughts! :)

I understand we like different themes in poetry, so appreciate your comments. Have a wonderful day ahead!

Regards,
Anupam

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

The color scheme used, and the language, paint the bleakness of mourning this poem was written to create. Sets the somber mood well.

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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2015

Thanks for reading, Brett!