Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Night in Woods"Dawn of Chaos
29 total reviews
Comment from loveofearth
Unusual writing in poetry form with lines long "that happen to me" repeated with emphasis on me the "heart dances a tango" and I felt the fear.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Unusual writing in poetry form with lines long "that happen to me" repeated with emphasis on me the "heart dances a tango" and I felt the fear.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Not proper in conveyance, working on these pits in my writes. Thanking you for generous rate and guidance to its path.
Comment from Betty Rosenstein
This gave me the chills, but overall very detail. It reminded me of a story book I once read in High School. What I Loved the most was I definitely saw the picture in my head like a mini movie.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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This gave me the chills, but overall very detail. It reminded me of a story book I once read in High School. What I Loved the most was I definitely saw the picture in my head like a mini movie.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Glad aspects of interests were found in this write. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from NicciFaye
Initially this was a little challenging to read, but it is well described and gloomy. The notes are appreciated and needed. There is a lot of deep interpretation and meaning in this works. Enjoyed and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Initially this was a little challenging to read, but it is well described and gloomy. The notes are appreciated and needed. There is a lot of deep interpretation and meaning in this works. Enjoyed and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2016
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Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments about this.write.
Comment from Joyce Long
I'm please that you gave the notes that you lived among the trees. I read this as a person deep in depression, who is afraid of all that was around them. "I'm not a lucky person."
I enjoy it more knowing that it a walk through the woods on a dark night. However, I wouldn't want to be the one out alone in the woods at night. I would be 'despite to move on."
I don't know if I would rather see monsters or snakes. Snakes in the middle of a dark night--wouldn't be good.
Twenty-five lines down "A large predator must be (in) searching."
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 9-29-15
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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I'm please that you gave the notes that you lived among the trees. I read this as a person deep in depression, who is afraid of all that was around them. "I'm not a lucky person."
I enjoy it more knowing that it a walk through the woods on a dark night. However, I wouldn't want to be the one out alone in the woods at night. I would be 'despite to move on."
I don't know if I would rather see monsters or snakes. Snakes in the middle of a dark night--wouldn't be good.
Twenty-five lines down "A large predator must be (in) searching."
Thanks for sharing.
Joyce 9-29-15
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Change is good being outside ones norm box recreate values whether you desire them or not- an adventuring indeed. Loved your comments and will revise as all my works: plus generous rate.
Comment from frogbook
Very descriptive-I felt like I was walking there. . Enjoyed the poems form and flow. I especially liked the way you described the absence of sound with the crickets leg, frogs etc. The line "walk is in pit night alone" was a bit hard to understand.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Very descriptive-I felt like I was walking there. . Enjoyed the poems form and flow. I especially liked the way you described the absence of sound with the crickets leg, frogs etc. The line "walk is in pit night alone" was a bit hard to understand.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015
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Pit night the intent was absolute darkness, no stars, moon or lights just night. I enjoyed those heart pounding moments, which formed this write to share the experience -not perfect. Glad you enjoyed the ride.
Comment from Ben Colder
Interesting story poem, but if you were to space it where as to not run it all together, here on fan story, I think more readers world stay the course. It is hard when together. Just a thought. Thanks for sharing your hard work.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Interesting story poem, but if you were to space it where as to not run it all together, here on fan story, I think more readers world stay the course. It is hard when together. Just a thought. Thanks for sharing your hard work.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
Appreciate the feedback, all works in progress need remarks to make them gleam. Thanks again will eventually review comments and attempt change make this soft
Comment from emkoutny
As a teacher, I would use this an an example of mood and tone. Your description is perfectly done to create a feeling of dread and fear. I certainly wouldn't want to be in these woods at night.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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As a teacher, I would use this an an example of mood and tone. Your description is perfectly done to create a feeling of dread and fear. I certainly wouldn't want to be in these woods at night.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
Glad to hear emotions from ink took root in someone heart, so words do effect the ear Thanks for all
Comment from Lesley Collier
A nicely flowing poem about a walk at night where the nocturnal animals prowl and the imagination can take over producing eerie sights and a single sound can freeze the blood as the walker strives to reach their destination surviving the eerie darkness of a pitch dark high. Nicely written with emotion.
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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A nicely flowing poem about a walk at night where the nocturnal animals prowl and the imagination can take over producing eerie sights and a single sound can freeze the blood as the walker strives to reach their destination surviving the eerie darkness of a pitch dark high. Nicely written with emotion.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
Thanking you for generous and kind insights about work. Living in rural country does hold its night encounters with the dark. Be careful, even under daylight, where you step
Comment from tfawcus
How well you capture the fear that can suddenly grip us when walking home at night through the woods alone. Hearing becomes more sensitive and every sound sparks off a monster of some kind in the imagination.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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How well you capture the fear that can suddenly grip us when walking home at night through the woods alone. Hearing becomes more sensitive and every sound sparks off a monster of some kind in the imagination.
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Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
Glad you found interest in work The project "Endurance" seem off to good start Believe I said ten poems but came to count twenty Always good to have positive glow but salt although burn do crop full harvest