Act of Endurance
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Comment from MSJVClarke
This was a very unique and interesting poem. Your words portrayed the intensity of the fall and the anxiety felt by your subject. It was a very good read and a delightful surprise ending.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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This was a very unique and interesting poem. Your words portrayed the intensity of the fall and the anxiety felt by your subject. It was a very good read and a delightful surprise ending.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Appreciate generous rate and comforting comments, glad the read went well
Comment from royowen
One thing, fate and circumstance pervade our existence, but eternity remains which I believe is the poem's patter, it reminds a little like the book of Ecclesiastes. Which appears as fatalistic and filled with downbeat assertions of vainglory, all that is written or spoken, has been before, all is in vain. But well done, a well written, declaration of irony and Destiny's predilection, well done, enjoyable, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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One thing, fate and circumstance pervade our existence, but eternity remains which I believe is the poem's patter, it reminds a little like the book of Ecclesiastes. Which appears as fatalistic and filled with downbeat assertions of vainglory, all that is written or spoken, has been before, all is in vain. But well done, a well written, declaration of irony and Destiny's predilection, well done, enjoyable, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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I feel this work touch you, well stated reply to mein comment,gave me something to consider -thanks for all
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Most welcome,
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading.......Life Change-A chapter in the book Endurance-Downward Fall: Story Poem. I agree with you, in life we all teach eachothers. I think you did a good job with your poem.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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I enjoyed reading.......Life Change-A chapter in the book Endurance-Downward Fall: Story Poem. I agree with you, in life we all teach eachothers. I think you did a good job with your poem.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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I thank you, not just for very generous rate but kind thoughts for encouragements
Comment from Gone but not forgotten
Perhaps this is over my head. I tried reading it more than once but got stuck when sometimes it says "I'm" and then another just says "I" where it felt like "I'm" would work (for clarity). Still I'm giving full credit just in case I'm not familiar enough with story poems...will research further.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Perhaps this is over my head. I tried reading it more than once but got stuck when sometimes it says "I'm" and then another just says "I" where it felt like "I'm" would work (for clarity). Still I'm giving full credit just in case I'm not familiar enough with story poems...will research further.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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I will check out this point thanking you for bring it to my sight my work filled wit pits
Comment from cercie
What a wonderful way to express to us the life and death of nature. I think we can also see ourselves in this piece. Thank you for sharing this poem that made me think
Chris
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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What a wonderful way to express to us the life and death of nature. I think we can also see ourselves in this piece. Thank you for sharing this poem that made me think
Chris
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2015
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Glad you found interests in this work, I appreciate kind remarks and over generous rate
Comment from writerz
This poem has a good premise. A few hiccups with wordage but possibly my choice is different but not the poet's voice. One can feel the anxiety of the character but eventual acceptance.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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This poem has a good premise. A few hiccups with wordage but possibly my choice is different but not the poet's voice. One can feel the anxiety of the character but eventual acceptance.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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I thank you for over generour rate but welcomed comments will look beyond and try to see these hiccups to make this read better
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Many people have dreams of falling down. My dream is about floating.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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This is yet another interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of work. Many people have dreams of falling down. My dream is about floating.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2015
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Glad the work captured a moment of your interest hoped you enjoyed the harmless descent still work lacks Touching thoughts super generous comment with rate
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Well done.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Another of your excellent offerings. A leaf? A soul? Or planet earth as time runs out? Although not sure of the interpretation I suspect the artwork is a fine compliment to the message itself.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Another of your excellent offerings. A leaf? A soul? Or planet earth as time runs out? Although not sure of the interpretation I suspect the artwork is a fine compliment to the message itself.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
Thanking you for generous rate and kind comments. With so much silence surrounding poetry. I feel most our notes will never be heard. So I will hold my notes and sing them in my heart
Comment from Eric1
Hi Tpac, what an absolutely brilliant free verse poem and all about the life of a leaf, wonderful use of description, fantastic imagery and a great flow to your words my friend.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Hi Tpac, what an absolutely brilliant free verse poem and all about the life of a leaf, wonderful use of description, fantastic imagery and a great flow to your words my friend.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Like working with a tooth pick on granite.
What you read, a finished product since I
joined group. You guys made this dream so.
Hope you guys, do not leave me, to end the
project. Need someone to blame. Great
comments, now I know this is a free verse.
I have a lot of associates; but few friends.
Friendships earned not granted.
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None of the above detracts from your wonderful writing my friend.
Comment from dmt1967
I felt this poem ran away from me when I read it aloud. There was no point, but I think that was the point. Everything going out of control was the message I felt. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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I felt this poem ran away from me when I read it aloud. There was no point, but I think that was the point. Everything going out of control was the message I felt. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
All which was said. Magnificent. Honesty does have its rewards. And once I get all these needles out my back. I am going to smile. Too generous, with rate but completely delighted by comment.