Lost!
Story- A high flight of imagination.41 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Nice to see you trying your hand at prose. An interesting flight of fancy in response to the Flash Fiction contest. It might pay to space your work out a bit more, just for ease of reading. It is a pity that such dream sequences have to be lost in the face of reality!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Nice to see you trying your hand at prose. An interesting flight of fancy in response to the Flash Fiction contest. It might pay to space your work out a bit more, just for ease of reading. It is a pity that such dream sequences have to be lost in the face of reality!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Hello Tfawcus,
Yes, it's my first attempt in this field. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Excellent Rating.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from PoeticXscape
This story was most enjoyable. It was so well written it felt like I was in that dream with you. The beautiful dream is reflected in the beautiful writing.
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This story was most enjoyable. It was so well written it felt like I was in that dream with you. The beautiful dream is reflected in the beautiful writing.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Hello PoeticXscape,
What a wonderful review with Exceptional Rating!
I am very glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely and morale boosting comments backed by the most coveted SIX STARS.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from chasennov
Story- A high flight of imagination. "Lost!" The part seems to have started off well, I hope it can bring you some success. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Story- A high flight of imagination. "Lost!" The part seems to have started off well, I hope it can bring you some success. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Hello Chasennov,
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Thank you very much for your so lovely, morale boosting comments and Good Luck Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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You are most welcome, RP.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Wellwritten and a interesting storyline.I enjoyed the read from start to finish,The layout and the descriptionwas easy
to follow. Mary
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Wellwritten and a interesting storyline.I enjoyed the read from start to finish,The layout and the descriptionwas easy
to follow. Mary
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Mary,
What a wonderful review with an Exceptional Rating!
As a matter of fact, it was my first attempt in this field i.e. in the field of writing some thing in prose.
You have really boosted my morale to go on racing on this track. I hope to perform better in times to come.
Thank you very much for your encouraging comments and the most coveted SIX STARS!
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Thank you very much for the same.
Comment from Emily George
Life could be sweet, what an awful conclusion to a heavenly dream. You pretty much emulated life here on earth. A few spoil it (terrorists')for everyone.
Well written you had me living the sweet dream there for a while.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Life could be sweet, what an awful conclusion to a heavenly dream. You pretty much emulated life here on earth. A few spoil it (terrorists')for everyone.
Well written you had me living the sweet dream there for a while.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Emily George,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging comments backed by Excellent Rating.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from hari anand
At first It was a fantacy tale with everything beautiful around amazes the the reader but ends into the harsh reality of the world. I liked the ride into the universe though. Great work. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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At first It was a fantacy tale with everything beautiful around amazes the the reader but ends into the harsh reality of the world. I liked the ride into the universe though. Great work. Best of luck.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Tera,
Thank you very much for your so lovely, encouraging comments, Excellent Rating and 'Best of Luck' Wishes.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from mikemagine
You wrote this very, very well. The ending was indeed a horrible loss. Nothing wrong with using one's imagination. Isn't that one of our most powerful tools for coping??!
Thanks so much for sharing this!
Mike
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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You wrote this very, very well. The ending was indeed a horrible loss. Nothing wrong with using one's imagination. Isn't that one of our most powerful tools for coping??!
Thanks so much for sharing this!
Mike
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Mike,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging comments backed by Excellent Rating.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
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You bet, RP!
Comment from CALLAHANMR
This is a strange and surreal experience, that in all probability, if it occurred at all, was dreamlike precursor of the terrorist's bomb.
L noted only one small nit: "What[do] I have to do?" {Did you leave out the word 'do' as shown?}
Good luck in the contest!
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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This is a strange and surreal experience, that in all probability, if it occurred at all, was dreamlike precursor of the terrorist's bomb.
L noted only one small nit: "What[do] I have to do?" {Did you leave out the word 'do' as shown?}
Good luck in the contest!
Roger aka Marilyn's writing partner
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Callahanmr,
Thank you very much for your so lovely, encouraging comments, Excellent Rating and Good Luck Wishes.
Yes, Friend, I have intentionally avoided 'do' to give the flavor of spoken English.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from emrpoems
they say imagination can take you to any place you wish and you certainly exploited this . Very creative writing,
you took us to outer space and almost made us believe we were there
Good character description
excellent choice of picture
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they say imagination can take you to any place you wish and you certainly exploited this . Very creative writing,
you took us to outer space and almost made us believe we were there
Good character description
excellent choice of picture
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Emrpoems,
Thank you very much for your so lovely and encouraging comments backed by Excellent Rating.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
Comment from Nosha17
Yes, fantasy is based on a creative and imaginative mind. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your descriptions were spot on, your characters likeable and you captured the essence of outer space very well in your story. Great picture and good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Yes, fantasy is based on a creative and imaginative mind. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your descriptions were spot on, your characters likeable and you captured the essence of outer space very well in your story. Great picture and good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Hello Faye,
Thank you very much for your so lovely, encouraging comments, Excellent Rating and Good Luck Wishes.
I am glad you enjoyed it.
Have a pleasant time!
~RP.
