Comment from Trybuck

Excellent

dragon flies buzz bass
catch me, catch me if you can
fried fish for supper

Hmmm... One of these is enough to play around with.. Well done with your entry, Buck

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks Buck,
you sound like an 'Ole fisherman to me.... Why don't you enter. It would be fun. Maybe one of us would win.
:-) Carolyn

reply by Trybuck on 04-Sep-2014

I'll let you enjoy the contest and I'll enjoy leaving a might-be-contender as a review.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I like your poem. The light blue background reminds me of water. I like the many descriptions you included: bass, blackberries, birds. I would change 'dragon flies' to make it one word 'dragonflies'. Your syllables count will not be affected. The only change will be in looks. oops, I only counted 33 syllables. Please do not change anything unless you wish. This is just my opinion. I believe blackberry has 3 syllables and berries has 2. (I counted several times--I believe I am right, but I will stand corrected if not.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Hi there, I will count and count again per your review. Thanks so much.
:-) Carolyn

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 04-Sep-2014

It confused me, too. I looked up 'berries' and blackberry'. I believe it is the word 'blackberry' that makes one believe that the word 'berries' has 3 syllables when it really has only 2.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I like the words to your write
It captured my attention from the start. It is amazing how God made away FOR everything He CREATED to have something to eat.
THANK YOU FOR SHARING.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thank you misscookie for your wonderful review. I am glad you enjoyed the poem.
Love, Carolyn

reply by misscookie on 05-Sep-2014

You're very welcome. Have a blessed day.
Cookie

Comment from royowen

Excellent

A very clever entry in this 34 syllable contest, Carolyn, I think,it's very hard to write something with a limit of so few syllables, but this is a great effort, and I wish you luck, you cover person, you! Blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks Roy for this great review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Hi to Elaine, Love, Carolyn

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Thanks for entering.

Excellent imagery of the lake, it's busy inhabitants, and the surrounding nature at work, all providing insight into nature's progression and survival of the fittest.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

I appreciate your wonderful review and best wishes Ray. Thank you, Carolyn

Comment from stroncoso1

Excellent

I enjoyed your haiku and you definitely followed the appropriate amount of syllables. I especially liked how you connected the 5-7 line at the end: "blackberry bush grows
berries hanging lush and ripe-"

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for this affirming review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, Carolyn, you did an excellent job writing this double haiku about the dragon flies over the lake, I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for this great review. :-) Carolyn

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Dragon flies no more!! hahahaha. Funny stuff, Carolyn. I like that. Wouldn't it be Dragon Fly's no more? As in flying?

Either way, nicely done on the double haiku. John

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

So glad you enjoyed this one John. Actually the plural of Fly is flies in either sense. I separated the words just for emphasis. This one was fun to write. Hey.... how 'bout those Cards...?
LOl .love, Carolyn

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

You did a splendid job with this double haiku, especially given all the additional detailed instructions to follow. Syllable counts are spot and on the imagery is lovely. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thank you so much for the great review. So glad you liked it.
:-) Carolyn