Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I like your poem. It is funny along with the picture. Everything seems right for the prompt. There is nothing that I would change. Good job and good luck with the contest. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

Chose a green m and m.......ha ha ha ...maybe not an environmentalist just a need for camouflage ...he thinks he is blending in....dies he or she not know its chocolate and women can spot that from twenty miles away?!?
God bless

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from dennis0530

Excellent

Ants are natural environmentalists, and very organized ones at that.

They don't litter and help clean up rubbish. The ant which is the subject in this writing must be a worker ant. And most probably it is a raider. Not by accident did it find the chocolate on the knapsack; they can smell sweets from a far distance.

Not likely will it gorge on the find; most probably it will go into the food store. Ants are known for "saving for rainy days."

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from Titan Black

Excellent

That's a hot, and houmorous
Haiku. And your flow was steady...
and did not waver. Therefore,
I give you a 5 star rating. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

This is a very interesting entry for this haiku competition, it shows the strength an ant has compared to body mass, good luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Proverbs advises watching ants and noticing how hard they work and smartly they work. Interesting how many times animals and insects outdo us humans!! They go about their business/es effectively. Whatever they need to do, they do it. Now, us...

I'm not putting people down; just noticing how we often don't use our potential...We get in our own ways so often!

Thanks for sharing.

Mike

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

hehehe Seems like quite a load the little ant must be carrying ! then again is an m'n'm ! Well done there and keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good 5/7/5 format, and I love the pairing of artwork and poem
great visual of that ant carrying off a chocolate treasure pilfered from your knapsack :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

Loved the art work and the choice of green. Your haiku is clever and seems to follow all of the rules. Creative and enjoyable. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

And that's right, M & M's don't melt either, so it should be a good trip for the ant.

Cute poem, and just as cute artwork. Great presentation.

Well done. Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)


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 Comment Written 30-Aug-2014