Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from Green Lake Girl
Bev, if I had ten stars to give, you'd have them. This was an absolutely thrilling chapter, with a fitting ending for Father Brian.
You had me utterly captivated from "moving in the manner of a recuctant puppet", to the very end.
Your last statement was tearfully beautiful. "Remember always . . . every mistake is undone by Grace."
Your writing is hitting on all cylinders these past couple of months, and are skillfully bringing this story to a dramatic, meaningful conclusion. Excellent, Bev.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Bev, if I had ten stars to give, you'd have them. This was an absolutely thrilling chapter, with a fitting ending for Father Brian.
You had me utterly captivated from "moving in the manner of a recuctant puppet", to the very end.
Your last statement was tearfully beautiful. "Remember always . . . every mistake is undone by Grace."
Your writing is hitting on all cylinders these past couple of months, and are skillfully bringing this story to a dramatic, meaningful conclusion. Excellent, Bev.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Hi, Marietta. Thank you so much for this awesome review! I've still got another little twist up my sleeve, but after that a few questions cleared up for the readers and it's done. So appreciate your grand review, my friend. Your words touch my heart. Hugs, Bev
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A little twist, eh? You better get crackin' on that next chapter then!
Comment from Aussie
I'm glad you explained the difference between possessed and totally evil. M. Scott Peck gave a good intro.
I thought you clever with your use of words - stuffing the dynamite and then Sniper don't give a rat's ass. Must be a word for linking sentences with the same type of situation? Huh? Dat's me, silly old lady. You would know about the terrible haunting called Amityville - even the priest couldn't exorcise the power and he was killed. If it wasn't so dangerous...fascinating evil is. Too dangerous to play with. Shape shifters are the ones to look out for and so many so-called innocents today, they belong to Legion. Our ancestors look after us (just like Brian's long-dead mother) if people would only realise there is no death, transformation to another form. We are all pure energy. Thanks for sharing - most enjoyable Mrs Monster!
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I'm glad you explained the difference between possessed and totally evil. M. Scott Peck gave a good intro.
I thought you clever with your use of words - stuffing the dynamite and then Sniper don't give a rat's ass. Must be a word for linking sentences with the same type of situation? Huh? Dat's me, silly old lady. You would know about the terrible haunting called Amityville - even the priest couldn't exorcise the power and he was killed. If it wasn't so dangerous...fascinating evil is. Too dangerous to play with. Shape shifters are the ones to look out for and so many so-called innocents today, they belong to Legion. Our ancestors look after us (just like Brian's long-dead mother) if people would only realise there is no death, transformation to another form. We are all pure energy. Thanks for sharing - most enjoyable Mrs Monster!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Yes, that situation with Amityville got a lot of bad press and reached a point of controversy, but few people realize that the house was built on land that was considered 'evil' by the Native Americans. Like you, I believe our Ancestors do a great deal on our behalf from the other side. Love the moniker - Mrs. Monster.
Thanks so very much, Kay, for both your generosity and support.
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Bryana
I'm sorry I haven't read all chapters but this one
caught my interest from the beginning, sign of a
good writer. It was rather scary at times but this
is what makes interesting. I will be waiting for the
next chapter.
Have a wonderful Sunday.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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I'm sorry I haven't read all chapters but this one
caught my interest from the beginning, sign of a
good writer. It was rather scary at times but this
is what makes interesting. I will be waiting for the
next chapter.
Have a wonderful Sunday.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Bryana, how are you? Great to hear from you. Thank you for stopping by to read my chapter. I really appreciate the support and encouragement. :) Bev
Comment from Twilightspire
What a climax. Bullets flying with abandon in a dynamite riddled cave, a demon doing its worst and a group of innocents caught in the crossfire. Excellent work.
It wasn't hard to catch up to what was going on in this chapter. The priest's guilt and resolve was evident in both his actions and dialogue. I could feel his need to save Rick and get rid of the dog-like demon.
There was no advice I could offer on this piece, it all worked so well. I just sat back and enjoyed the read.
-T.J.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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What a climax. Bullets flying with abandon in a dynamite riddled cave, a demon doing its worst and a group of innocents caught in the crossfire. Excellent work.
It wasn't hard to catch up to what was going on in this chapter. The priest's guilt and resolve was evident in both his actions and dialogue. I could feel his need to save Rick and get rid of the dog-like demon.
There was no advice I could offer on this piece, it all worked so well. I just sat back and enjoyed the read.
-T.J.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much for this great review. I'm especially glad that you felt Father Brian's strong emotions in this chapter. That means a lot to me, TJ. Appreciate your support and encouragement. :) Bev
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is magnificent multilayered writing. You know your subject well, Bev. The writing is informative, exciting and adventurous and I am enjoying it tremendously, 10 stars! Giddy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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This is magnificent multilayered writing. You know your subject well, Bev. The writing is informative, exciting and adventurous and I am enjoying it tremendously, 10 stars! Giddy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Giddy, thank you so much for this wonderful review. I sure appreciate your encouragement and generosity! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Drew Delaney
What a great story. I really like this. You did a superb job writing this. It seems to be posted under the incorrect genre. It's more gothic, isn't it? I just read the one chapter. I suppose there isn't the proper genre listed. Very enjoyable read. The cross has saved many a life, I have heard, in times gone by.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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What a great story. I really like this. You did a superb job writing this. It seems to be posted under the incorrect genre. It's more gothic, isn't it? I just read the one chapter. I suppose there isn't the proper genre listed. Very enjoyable read. The cross has saved many a life, I have heard, in times gone by.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you so much, Drew. I appreciate your interest and encouragement very much. Yes, I think it could be considered sort of gothic. Thanks again! :) Bev
Comment from Mastery
Hello, Bev. I am surprised to see you didn't win BOM for last two months?? I checked. This is great writing, my friend. Problem on here is, unless somebody is following it, they don't vote at all. (You know) I liked the powerful lines in this chapter.
Suggestion:
"he feared there was a slim window of opportunity to save her life." (Perhaps for more clarity put "only" before the words "a slim"
See you soon, my dear friend. Bob
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Hello, Bev. I am surprised to see you didn't win BOM for last two months?? I checked. This is great writing, my friend. Problem on here is, unless somebody is following it, they don't vote at all. (You know) I liked the powerful lines in this chapter.
Suggestion:
"he feared there was a slim window of opportunity to save her life." (Perhaps for more clarity put "only" before the words "a slim"
See you soon, my dear friend. Bob
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Hi, Bob. Thank you so much! I really appreciate your kind words and generosity... so very heart-warming to read. Your suggestion is excellent. Always amazes me how one word can change the power of a sentence. I hope to get to that point someday where I can see that more clearly.
Can't wait for our lunch!
Big Hug,
Bev
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We are getting closer and closer......LOL...Can't wait. 0 Bob
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Me, too. Just a week away. We're going to have a real gabfest, Bob. xxOO
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X0...LOL..Bob
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Bev - wow this was sure better read in daylight!!
Fabulous writing and really great descriptive lines throughout. I felt I was there, and really didn't want to be:)
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Dear Bev - wow this was sure better read in daylight!!
Fabulous writing and really great descriptive lines throughout. I felt I was there, and really didn't want to be:)
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Thank you so very much for this awesome review, Maureen. I so appreciate your support and generosity! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Dawn Munro
I knew I saved a six for some reason. This is masterful, Bev, and so full of action, as well as the wonderful, sentiment in the conclusion. I enjoyed every word!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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I knew I saved a six for some reason. This is masterful, Bev, and so full of action, as well as the wonderful, sentiment in the conclusion. I enjoyed every word!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Dawn, thank you so very much! I really appreciate your last six, my friend. You've been so very encouraging and supportive through all this. One more chapter and probably an epilogue and that's it! Hugs, Bev
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My pleasure, Bev - very much so.
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Love ya, buddy!
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Right back atcha. :)
Comment from Connie C
Don't let Father Brian stay gone! I've enjoyed his character, so I hope you'll bring him back. Lots of tension and excellent imagery in this chapter, Bev. I found your author's notes about exorcism interesting, and I like that you always include descriptions of each of the characters in the chapter for those of us who tend to forget sometimes who is who.
Great job, as always, my friend.
Connie
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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Don't let Father Brian stay gone! I've enjoyed his character, so I hope you'll bring him back. Lots of tension and excellent imagery in this chapter, Bev. I found your author's notes about exorcism interesting, and I like that you always include descriptions of each of the characters in the chapter for those of us who tend to forget sometimes who is who.
Great job, as always, my friend.
Connie
Comment Written 02-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014
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I love Father Brian, too, Connie.
Thank you so much for being supportive, generous and encouraging through all this time, my friend. Your support is one of the reasons I persisted with this novel.
Hugs, Bev