Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

I LOVE THESE TREES MY GRANDPA HAD A HUGE ON I USED TO SIT UNDER AND WRITE,IT KEP YOU COOL IN THE SUMMER HEAT IT WAS A MAGICAL TIME SPENT AT GRANDPAS

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Yes, we have a bench by ours, it is a serene place to be.
Thank you so much, :) Carolyn

Comment from Sarah Butterfly

Exceptional

Your haiku smoothly combines the emotions of weeping and smiling. Nice alliteration of the w sound used. You can hear the leaves whispering in the wind.

Very nicely done!

Kind regards

Sarah

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks Sarah for this wonderful review. So happy you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good alliteration in willow waits/weeping willow
I just love the concept of a weeping willow smiling and what would cause one too
delightful use of personification
Brooke

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks Brooke, only a child could make a willow smile. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

this is interesting. This change to 3-9-5 format.a very good photograph. Actually this is the first time i am seeing the photo of a weeping willow, though I have read about it in books and used to wonder why it is called weeping willow.good alliteration of 'w' sound with children even mature would smile.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Hi there Sanku,
Thanks for your wonderful comments. We have a WW in the back yard. I just love it. :-) Carolyn

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I really like this entry in this haiku poetry contest Carolyn, I love the paradoxical bent you've woven cleverly into this narrative, which connects beautifully with this it's accompanying artwork, well done Carolyn, good luck, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks Roy for the great comments and well wishes. It would be fun to win. :-) Carolyn

Comment from NurseBarb

Excellent

I love weeping willows and you are loving what you did with this entry. Creatively written and a lovely image to compliment it as well. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks NurseBarb,
I appreciate your fine comments and the good luck.. :-) Carolyn

Comment from kiwisteveh

Excellent

Nice alliteration in lines 1 and 3 and a clever visual juxtaposition of weeping and smiling add strength to this.

What makes the willow smile? A child - enough to bring a smile to any old dial.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks Steve, I enjoyed your review and affirmation of the haiku. :-) Carolyn

Comment from TamzinWhite

Excellent

Willow trees were my favourite as a child so I love the words you have used in your description. The words flow as a willow tree does, sweeping willow tree child (that I am). I feel reminiscing coming on. Thanks for the sweet poem.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Hi TamzinWhite, (I like your pen-name)
Your review is appreciated very much.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this very well written Carolyn, but it needs to be one thought across two lines and then a concrete image line. maybe

willow waits
as branches tickled by child
creates a smile




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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

I appreciate your fine review and suggestions. :-) Carolyn

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Love this entry for this competition Carolyn, it sounds and reads beautifully, this beautiful tree looking down and tickling a young child's face is great imagery, Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 31-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thanks Eric for a wonderful review of this one. :-) Carolyn

reply by Eric1 on 03-Aug-2014

You are very welcome Carolyn