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Comment from Harlequin
I loved your cheerful, uplifting and positive tone and you sweet and serious theme.:-) The rhythm and rhyme is perfect and give an almost song-like quality to your poem.
Well done.:-)
Harlequin
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I loved your cheerful, uplifting and positive tone and you sweet and serious theme.:-) The rhythm and rhyme is perfect and give an almost song-like quality to your poem.
Well done.:-)
Harlequin
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wonderfully done, Mystery Poet. The challenge called for an uplifting poem, and this one certainly delivers with maximum effect. What else can I say, other than the rhyme, meter and flow were perfect, and I certainly felt up lifted after reading it.
Great poem, excellent message, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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Wonderfully done, Mystery Poet. The challenge called for an uplifting poem, and this one certainly delivers with maximum effect. What else can I say, other than the rhyme, meter and flow were perfect, and I certainly felt up lifted after reading it.
Great poem, excellent message, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from Acquired Taste
Beautiful - nice rhyming and thoroughly positive thoughts. It is uplifting without condemning anyone or anything as a problem.
Am particularly taken with: You'll think structure, form, design; I'll study brewing tea.
Very visual phrases. AT=/
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Beautiful - nice rhyming and thoroughly positive thoughts. It is uplifting without condemning anyone or anything as a problem.
Am particularly taken with: You'll think structure, form, design; I'll study brewing tea.
Very visual phrases. AT=/
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
I really enjoyed this. It was indeed, uplifting. Nicely formatted with the bright red, and the artwork is nice and subtle.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
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Hi,
I really enjoyed this. It was indeed, uplifting. Nicely formatted with the bright red, and the artwork is nice and subtle.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from tfawcus
The alternating line length and even rhythm both make it an easy poem to read aloud, as perhaps might be the case in a church gathering. The abcb rhyme scheme is also effective in carrying the narrative along. I like your message. A good entry in this writing prompt.
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The alternating line length and even rhythm both make it an easy poem to read aloud, as perhaps might be the case in a church gathering. The abcb rhyme scheme is also effective in carrying the narrative along. I like your message. A good entry in this writing prompt.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abcb rhyming
I like the "ripples born of thought"
I like the specific examples that reveal the personalities and attitudes of each person in this couple whose points of view often don't jibe
good alliteration in fertile field
and red rose
a lovely spiritual tone in your closing :-) Brooke
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solid use of abcb rhyming
I like the "ripples born of thought"
I like the specific examples that reveal the personalities and attitudes of each person in this couple whose points of view often don't jibe
good alliteration in fertile field
and red rose
a lovely spiritual tone in your closing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from SolomonStone
Great!! A very powerful message that has been kept subtle, sweet, and modest!! I enjoyed reading this and admired the devotion to sculpting the work!! Nicely done, would love to read more!!
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Great!! A very powerful message that has been kept subtle, sweet, and modest!! I enjoyed reading this and admired the devotion to sculpting the work!! Nicely done, would love to read more!!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
Comment from RYME4U
Very uplifting! I like the spiritual tone of this poem and the message it portrays. Your words are carefully chosen and the rhythm is good. Great job,
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Very uplifting! I like the spiritual tone of this poem and the message it portrays. Your words are carefully chosen and the rhythm is good. Great job,
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Coming from the wonderful pen-name of RYME4U, I consider your words great compliments...and I thank You!
Comment from jonmichael
Poet, this is a very uplifting piece about the unyielding power of hope. Each stanza remarks of the simple things in life sends the message to the busy couple that the simple things can rekindle the passion and together move toward a stronger goal in life. An underlining message is definitely moving away from or media driven, gasoline drive society to the quiet walks and talks. I like this poem because it touches some of my beliefs as well... Well done, Poet, well done!!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Poet, this is a very uplifting piece about the unyielding power of hope. Each stanza remarks of the simple things in life sends the message to the busy couple that the simple things can rekindle the passion and together move toward a stronger goal in life. An underlining message is definitely moving away from or media driven, gasoline drive society to the quiet walks and talks. I like this poem because it touches some of my beliefs as well... Well done, Poet, well done!!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thank you for your perfect insight! Thank you, also , for writing.
Comment from Dawny53
I really enjoyed your poem. You wrote it well, you kept a nice steady rhythm throughout, and your rhyme scheme fit together perfectly. But you know what I liked best? I finally came across a self improvement poem that I can understand! Not alot of huge words that I would literally have to go look up in the dictionary to understand! The reader needs to be a psychiatrist to understand some of these poems!
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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I really enjoyed your poem. You wrote it well, you kept a nice steady rhythm throughout, and your rhyme scheme fit together perfectly. But you know what I liked best? I finally came across a self improvement poem that I can understand! Not alot of huge words that I would literally have to go look up in the dictionary to understand! The reader needs to be a psychiatrist to understand some of these poems!
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Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Much love and thanks. I wish I could write "esoterically" sometimes...but my brain doesn't hold those thoughts...Thanks for your kind words.