Comment from Carlylrkn5

Average

I lobe this poem! The flow is very smooth, the topic is relateable and interesting. Plus I love the use of the older language, like "thy"; for me it increases the romantic feel of the poem. Great write!

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thank you so much for the positive comments, I am happy you liked the poem and the style. Do you recommend changes as it is rated as average,
Respectfully,
Carolyb

Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

The group of triolet is happy to see your work. A gentleman your work declares. Good rhyme and spelling command.

A good hold on artwork and alliteration.
"love/thee/dove/love
above/tree/love/thee"
Very polarized.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thanks Dan for the comments and affirmation of the alliteration. I appreciate your time so much. :-) Carolyn

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Even though this is a spiritual poetry, it could just as be a love poem from one person to another. The deep questioning and desire to know how to obtain love fits for both. Can you ever 'win' love?

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 Comment Written 01-Jul-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2014

Thanks so much for your fine comments. :-) Carolyn