Cock-A-Doodle Doo
The Rogue is back by upopular demand (see Author notes)30 total reviews
Comment from padumachitta
Hey. Well, first off, congrats on winning the poem of the month award. You deserve it.
And, thanks for posting something for Fryday. It makes me laugh, and by the end of the week it is needed.
There seems to be a fair number of people who read the Rogue...judging from the reviews on my poem.
The picture is, well, large. I guess whe can't sleep on her stomach.
I will try to get up, an answer for this week...
Be well,
padumachitta
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Hey. Well, first off, congrats on winning the poem of the month award. You deserve it.
And, thanks for posting something for Fryday. It makes me laugh, and by the end of the week it is needed.
There seems to be a fair number of people who read the Rogue...judging from the reviews on my poem.
The picture is, well, large. I guess whe can't sleep on her stomach.
I will try to get up, an answer for this week...
Be well,
padumachitta
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I got them both, my friend. Thanks so much!
Comment from Lysa Schuler
I thought this poem was a bit rough around the edges. I found it difficult to understand. It was too cumbersome to try. The last stanza, however, would have been funny if the rest of the poem was. Nice attempt.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I thought this poem was a bit rough around the edges. I found it difficult to understand. It was too cumbersome to try. The last stanza, however, would have been funny if the rest of the poem was. Nice attempt.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Save your passive-aggressive 'nice attempt' for someone else. It's hard to judge something as not funny when you're not in on the joke. The author notes might've helped you there...
I invite you to skip this light-hearted series, as you're obviously too heavy-headed and cumbersome to "get it".
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Thanks for your attempt at reviewing.
Comment from catch22
Oh boy, I guess old habits die hard (no pun intended). This is a bawdy write and I expect no less from the Rogue's persona. Lots of great wordplay and double meanings in this write. The third stanza had me chuckling. Is this a particular form of poetry, especially with the mixed iambic meter? Just curious because it sounds great when read aloud. Raunchy but fun piece of poetry.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Oh boy, I guess old habits die hard (no pun intended). This is a bawdy write and I expect no less from the Rogue's persona. Lots of great wordplay and double meanings in this write. The third stanza had me chuckling. Is this a particular form of poetry, especially with the mixed iambic meter? Just curious because it sounds great when read aloud. Raunchy but fun piece of poetry.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Gail. It's just an 8-8-8-6 count with internal rhymes in the first and third lines, an AAXB rhyme scheme with the fourth line in each stanza rhyming. I appreciate it, my friend.
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Aha thanks for the info. Take care.
Comment from Gloria ....
This is absolutely brilliant, Rogue. I especially liked the line, the rogue is back to snag a snack. That's good -- Very good! I think that's actually a marketable jingle. I hope that all is well with your dad, and that the doctor didn't poke and ... well you know the rest. I'm taking Auntie to the doctor today too. He isn't fond of me because I keep straightening out the crooked artwork on his office walls.
Anyway, love your perfectly cheeky poem. Very well written on the spur of the moment in the true spirit of riposting.
Lots of love from the hen who wants to break your comb.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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This is absolutely brilliant, Rogue. I especially liked the line, the rogue is back to snag a snack. That's good -- Very good! I think that's actually a marketable jingle. I hope that all is well with your dad, and that the doctor didn't poke and ... well you know the rest. I'm taking Auntie to the doctor today too. He isn't fond of me because I keep straightening out the crooked artwork on his office walls.
Anyway, love your perfectly cheeky poem. Very well written on the spur of the moment in the true spirit of riposting.
Lots of love from the hen who wants to break your comb.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much, you sneaky clever lady. I hope the ignoramus that just reviewed my poem doesn't hit yours, too.
It was a fun little exercise again, and I was pretty pleased considering how quickly I dashed it off. Loved how you took my previous poems and referenced them in yours. That was so well done, my friend. Have a great weekend. My dad's appointment was no biggie, and I hope the same for your aunt.
Comment from Rondeno
LOL I know Gloria wants to keep this drollery going but really, none of them can match you. The puns, internal rhymes and sheer exuberance of the shagging jokes mark out your territory better than and tom cat's spray.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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LOL I know Gloria wants to keep this drollery going but really, none of them can match you. The puns, internal rhymes and sheer exuberance of the shagging jokes mark out your territory better than and tom cat's spray.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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You're very kind, my friend, and I appreciate it very much. Love your even poetic reviews. Tomcat spray cracks me up. Thank you.
Comment from A Jesterstear
So its the rouge that wakes me up at five thirty every morning. I have a mind to join the hens and threaten him with a pair of nut-crackers... only jesting... he's back! and brilliantly funny as usual. AJ.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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So its the rouge that wakes me up at five thirty every morning. I have a mind to join the hens and threaten him with a pair of nut-crackers... only jesting... he's back! and brilliantly funny as usual. AJ.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Sorry about that, brother. He's up when the "sex alarm" goes off, unfortunately. Many thanks, AJ. I hope your brother is doing well today.
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I had my good laugh of the day, thanking this verse. The third stanza's a trip to read aloud; it's a poem within itself. I hope my trip to the Doctors Office today is as rewarding. Kenny
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I had my good laugh of the day, thanking this verse. The third stanza's a trip to read aloud; it's a poem within itself. I hope my trip to the Doctors Office today is as rewarding. Kenny
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend. Best of luck at the doc, and I hope you write a sonnet, or something of equal value.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Hate to give the devil his due...but, this is terrific. Love the quick, short rhyming, and you certainly get your umm point across.
Huffin' & puffin' I love your line: So cock-a-doodle-doo! Not unexpected, but exactly on target.
Great Rouge for Fry day! AT=/
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Hate to give the devil his due...but, this is terrific. Love the quick, short rhyming, and you certainly get your umm point across.
Huffin' & puffin' I love your line: So cock-a-doodle-doo! Not unexpected, but exactly on target.
Great Rouge for Fry day! AT=/
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Wow, AT. Thanks so much for that sixer. I don't expect those on these silly pieces, but you'll possibly make up for the ignorant review I received on this one. I appreciate it, my friend.
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I told ya - I rate what I like and this meter whatever appeals to me - as well as the short, sweet jabs (on all fronts.) AT=/
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Thank you, my friend.
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Hope you have read Dawn's reply! AT=/
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I did.
Comment from rama devi
I almost never click on content with the warming, but since it was YOU, witty Rogue, temptation got the better of me because you're the king of puns (not buns--or maybe those too)
Superb internal rhyme in line one:
The ladies arm the sex alarm
Superb alliteration of R and cocky pun on 'raise':
To raise the rogue's impressive charm--
Superb extended metaphor (subtle pun intended--LOL!) and internal rhyme and alliteration of D:
The power tool that makes them drool
And drills them through and through.
*comma suggestion:
The hens have schemes for him(,) it seems,
(nice internal rhyme)
Superb pun on WHET and fine alliteration:
And so to whet their wettest dreams
Fine internal rhyme and alliteration and consonace of S:
The rogue is back to snag a snack,
To saddle up and fill his sack
With ass-less chaps and Jimmy caps,
And aims to game a shrew.
Good internal rhyme and consonance of P:
The poem's short, but this report
Good echo wit explored and before:
The order you're explored before
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He cock-a-doodles you.
This is a fine closing, though I think it would be even better if you add the DO in there (for pun effect too)
He cock-a-doodle-doos you.
Warmly,
rd
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I almost never click on content with the warming, but since it was YOU, witty Rogue, temptation got the better of me because you're the king of puns (not buns--or maybe those too)
Superb internal rhyme in line one:
The ladies arm the sex alarm
Superb alliteration of R and cocky pun on 'raise':
To raise the rogue's impressive charm--
Superb extended metaphor (subtle pun intended--LOL!) and internal rhyme and alliteration of D:
The power tool that makes them drool
And drills them through and through.
*comma suggestion:
The hens have schemes for him(,) it seems,
(nice internal rhyme)
Superb pun on WHET and fine alliteration:
And so to whet their wettest dreams
Fine internal rhyme and alliteration and consonace of S:
The rogue is back to snag a snack,
To saddle up and fill his sack
With ass-less chaps and Jimmy caps,
And aims to game a shrew.
Good internal rhyme and consonance of P:
The poem's short, but this report
Good echo wit explored and before:
The order you're explored before
*
He cock-a-doodles you.
This is a fine closing, though I think it would be even better if you add the DO in there (for pun effect too)
He cock-a-doodle-doos you.
Warmly,
rd
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I'm almost surprised to see you here, my friend, but I appreciate that you took the plunge. Great thoughts, and I took your suggestion on the comma, but I like the end as it is, to maintain meter. This was a quick one, but somewhat rewarding otherwise.
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Did you get my pun on 'extended' metaphor? LOL A naughty nun!
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I did! I was SO proud, Rama! :)
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LOL! :-))
Comment from 24chas
I can't help it. This gets a six just because you wrote it quick and it still has the rapier wit we're so used to from you. Funny stuff, Marillion.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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I can't help it. This gets a six just because you wrote it quick and it still has the rapier wit we're so used to from you. Funny stuff, Marillion.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Chas!
