Who Knew?
What happens when you least believe28 total reviews
Comment from PaddyMac
Do young children really have water beds? What fun, I do feel deprived! Your poem tells the story of changing tastes and stages of life with a lovely rhythmic rhyme. The last line I found a little forced, perhaps a word too many, only because the others rhyme so well. Good luck in the contest.
Paddy
  |
Do young children really have water beds? What fun, I do feel deprived! Your poem tells the story of changing tastes and stages of life with a lovely rhythmic rhyme. The last line I found a little forced, perhaps a word too many, only because the others rhyme so well. Good luck in the contest.
Paddy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from SLHarper
This is a very cool take on the writing prompt, and it seems like you really delivered a surprise, much like your (I assume teen-aged) progeny growing up "behind the door" suddenly developing new tastes before you are ready to accept them. This is a simply stated, but profound message. Good luck in your contest! Steph H.
|
This is a very cool take on the writing prompt, and it seems like you really delivered a surprise, much like your (I assume teen-aged) progeny growing up "behind the door" suddenly developing new tastes before you are ready to accept them. This is a simply stated, but profound message. Good luck in your contest! Steph H.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from LorraineK
A very clever write about a child growing up behind the door. Your poem flowed well and rhymed and was entertaining and fun to read. LorraineK
|
A very clever write about a child growing up behind the door. Your poem flowed well and rhymed and was entertaining and fun to read. LorraineK
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
watch your child grow up into a wonderful person is worth all the tea in china and the colors she wants is just the tip of the ice berg
|
watch your child grow up into a wonderful person is worth all the tea in china and the colors she wants is just the tip of the ice berg
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from DonandVicki
You have left the door wide open to the imagination, well done poet. I enjoyed the opening to the door and had my own observations... Don
|
You have left the door wide open to the imagination, well done poet. I enjoyed the opening to the door and had my own observations... Don
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yes, they seem to grow up overnight. One day it's toys, the next it's teenage fashion, and then it's a wedding dress. Then it starts all over again with the grandchildren. Your poem nailed it. Good luck in the contest.
|
Yes, they seem to grow up overnight. One day it's toys, the next it's teenage fashion, and then it's a wedding dress. Then it starts all over again with the grandchildren. Your poem nailed it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from Glasstruth
I imagine it's the bedroom door. This poem is so colorful with lines as:
"and only blue would do.
So, cobalt, royal, navy...;
marked the years in moody hue.
&
Yes, now it's china, lace, and white,
for you grew up behind the door."
Superb! Les
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
I imagine it's the bedroom door. This poem is so colorful with lines as:
"and only blue would do.
So, cobalt, royal, navy...;
marked the years in moody hue.
&
Yes, now it's china, lace, and white,
for you grew up behind the door."
Superb! Les
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014
Comment from Watermark1974
Bravo! Great play on words. The prompt itself is so mysterious, but you handled the question of what's behind the door in an awesome, creative way that I thought was wonderful.
It's a great entree. I wish you much luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
|
Bravo! Great play on words. The prompt itself is so mysterious, but you handled the question of what's behind the door in an awesome, creative way that I thought was wonderful.
It's a great entree. I wish you much luck!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2014