The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 72 "New born star ( Lune)"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
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Comment from country ranch writer
Star light star bright how I wish my wish tonight If you can hear you can make it right by welcoming the new start tonight so it can to shine brightly with the rest of you
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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Star light star bright how I wish my wish tonight If you can hear you can make it right by welcoming the new start tonight so it can to shine brightly with the rest of you
Comment Written 11-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2014
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What an awesome review of this one, thank you so much.
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welcome
Comment from Spitfire
An interesting format. For me this sets up a question. How do we recognize a new born star-- ah, I get it. Light comes through our dim brains and does make us alive again.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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An interesting format. For me this sets up a question. How do we recognize a new born star-- ah, I get it. Light comes through our dim brains and does make us alive again.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Hi there, I guess when we see them at night they are all new in a way. LOL
Comment from Sagnik Das
Ah, Carolyn! after so many days, a work from you to peruse... and.........
ha, yet again! - am I here - amongst you all (by YOUR benediction of course! [see my profile for further elaboration]), attempting what might safely be termed my very first review in 3 months! Hence, it is not without much trepidation that I scribble you today, these few unworthy lines, in grave anxiety lest they fail to render somehow, the fullest justice to your profundity. :)
Yet all I can easily infer is that you continue remaining as subtle as ever, resorting to sharp aphorisms (as evident in this work [or so I 'analyzed'!]).
Marked by paradoxes in contrasting sensibilities, the vivid depiction of natural dualities ( as light and night -- symbolic allusions for optimism emerging out of sable morbidity [if I am not wrong]), interacting to form a whole greater than either of the separate parts in effect (Ha! - were I a wee bit simpler in expression!), indeed deserves boundless appraisal. The precarious completion of quiescence (metaphoric complacency) which you highlight with an epigrammatic expression "invigorates soul", leaves the mind in a state of ephemeral contemplation ....
You herein cause your 'entranced' narrative to linger awhile, such that the reader may pause to reflect, & that is precisely what I seek in poetry: THE CRITICAL DEVELOPMENT OF THOUGHT PROCESS, marked by depth & clarity. And your work excels on both the accounts.
Remarkably improvised, my beloved friend! Hemingway would have been proud of this had he lived...
:)
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Ah, Carolyn! after so many days, a work from you to peruse... and.........
ha, yet again! - am I here - amongst you all (by YOUR benediction of course! [see my profile for further elaboration]), attempting what might safely be termed my very first review in 3 months! Hence, it is not without much trepidation that I scribble you today, these few unworthy lines, in grave anxiety lest they fail to render somehow, the fullest justice to your profundity. :)
Yet all I can easily infer is that you continue remaining as subtle as ever, resorting to sharp aphorisms (as evident in this work [or so I 'analyzed'!]).
Marked by paradoxes in contrasting sensibilities, the vivid depiction of natural dualities ( as light and night -- symbolic allusions for optimism emerging out of sable morbidity [if I am not wrong]), interacting to form a whole greater than either of the separate parts in effect (Ha! - were I a wee bit simpler in expression!), indeed deserves boundless appraisal. The precarious completion of quiescence (metaphoric complacency) which you highlight with an epigrammatic expression "invigorates soul", leaves the mind in a state of ephemeral contemplation ....
You herein cause your 'entranced' narrative to linger awhile, such that the reader may pause to reflect, & that is precisely what I seek in poetry: THE CRITICAL DEVELOPMENT OF THOUGHT PROCESS, marked by depth & clarity. And your work excels on both the accounts.
Remarkably improvised, my beloved friend! Hemingway would have been proud of this had he lived...
:)
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Welcome back with all my heart. And thank you for this glorious review of such a short work. :-) Carolyn
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The privilege as ever, is all mine; you are treasured. :)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Carolyn,
This is a really nice Lune poem. I finally got one written about Dylan. It was fun. I'll have to do more of them. I enjoyed this and the picture is very nice too.
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Hi Carolyn,
This is a really nice Lune poem. I finally got one written about Dylan. It was fun. I'll have to do more of them. I enjoyed this and the picture is very nice too.
Kat
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Thanks Kat, I am glad you enjoyed it. :-) Carolyn
Comment from wordtester
My goodness. I just fell in love with this little poem. Light of the Lord penetrates the darkness of the soul and guides us. I want to read more of your poems.Sincere best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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My goodness. I just fell in love with this little poem. Light of the Lord penetrates the darkness of the soul and guides us. I want to read more of your poems.Sincere best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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I am happy you liked this short little poem and would be delighted if you read more. :-) Carolyn
Comment from jmdg1954
Angelheart provided good artwork but you drove it out of the park with your version of the North Star. At least, that's how I see it. Although I could be wrong.
Light penetrates Night
New born star
Invigorates Soul
Black background, gold lettering and asterisks created perfect imagery.
Great work Carolyn. Wish I had sixes left. John
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Angelheart provided good artwork but you drove it out of the park with your version of the North Star. At least, that's how I see it. Although I could be wrong.
Light penetrates Night
New born star
Invigorates Soul
Black background, gold lettering and asterisks created perfect imagery.
Great work Carolyn. Wish I had sixes left. John
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Hi there, so glad you liked this 'home run', I loved it that you said I drove it out of the park. LOL... we just can't get away from baseball can we? You 'hit' it perfectly. Love, hope you are doing well John, and thanks for the virtual six. :-) Carolyn
Comment from 24chas
A well done poem, there is no doubt. You nailed the poem on the techincal side and the emotional side as well. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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A well done poem, there is no doubt. You nailed the poem on the techincal side and the emotional side as well. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much for this great review and good wishes. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Cajungirl
The New Born Star in my opinion represents Christ birth in the hearts of those with pure souls. I enjoyed the read and the poem in it's entirety is a work of art. best of luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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The New Born Star in my opinion represents Christ birth in the hearts of those with pure souls. I enjoyed the read and the poem in it's entirety is a work of art. best of luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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Thanks for the wonderful comments and well wishes. I am so glad you enjoyed this one. :-) Carolyn
Comment from mfowler
I found your artwork, including the deft use of asterisks etc in the text, really illuminated (pardon the pun) this lune. There's not much scope in a lune to build an image, so the extra presentation elements are important here. Your poem does stand alone, however, in its sweet imagery. It seems to have a metaphorical intent, in that the star may be a connection to the Bethlehem star, hence Jesus brings light into a darkened world. That's good. Or it may be a literal exploration of the natural phenomena. Whatever your intent, it creates a lovely mind picture.
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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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I found your artwork, including the deft use of asterisks etc in the text, really illuminated (pardon the pun) this lune. There's not much scope in a lune to build an image, so the extra presentation elements are important here. Your poem does stand alone, however, in its sweet imagery. It seems to have a metaphorical intent, in that the star may be a connection to the Bethlehem star, hence Jesus brings light into a darkened world. That's good. Or it may be a literal exploration of the natural phenomena. Whatever your intent, it creates a lovely mind picture.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2014
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I am happy you enjoyed this one and that it gave you some latitude of thinking. You have some beautiful comments. Thank you for all you do, :-) Carolyn