A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Raven's Fare"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Dean Kuch,
What a wonderful 'Horrifying' piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry!
Keeping in mind the Author Notes, the poem transparently displays its spirit.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme/ spontaneous and captivating flow/ nice rhyming scheme/ lively imagery and pictorial quality/ Marvelous Artwork and the sound effect.
The most striking lines are:
"All seems quiet, quite normal, first-
...........................nowhere about."
Superb! Outstanding!! Mind blowing!!!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Hello Dean Kuch,
What a wonderful 'Horrifying' piece of Horror and Thriller Poetry!
Keeping in mind the Author Notes, the poem transparently displays its spirit.
Wording is simple, impressive and perfectly matching the theme/ spontaneous and captivating flow/ nice rhyming scheme/ lively imagery and pictorial quality/ Marvelous Artwork and the sound effect.
The most striking lines are:
"All seems quiet, quite normal, first-
...........................nowhere about."
Superb! Outstanding!! Mind blowing!!!
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Hey, thanks a bunch, RPSaxena! I'll take comments like "Superb! Outstanding!! Mind blowing" any day of the week, LOL...
I really appreciate the fabulous review, and I am glad that you liked it...
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
When you write of actual places with existing legends it gives your work an extra bit of eeriness.
On a whim, I re-arranged the order of your rhyming scheme from ABAB to AABB. (Please forgive my audacity, it was just an experiment. In this case, they weren't even my words, and they settled back in their original form none-the-worse for wear.) Anyway, in this case, I kind of like the result. This juggle brings several related lines closer together, and in my (most humble) opinion smoothes the cadence of your poem.
Please, please, please don't take my word play as anything more than the compliment it is. I wouldn't have been tempted to mess around in your sandbox if your words had not completely captured my imagination. Your poem is certainly fine the way it is; I just thought it kind of cool that it stood up so well to my mental gymnastics. Take care, and thank you for sharing
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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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When you write of actual places with existing legends it gives your work an extra bit of eeriness.
On a whim, I re-arranged the order of your rhyming scheme from ABAB to AABB. (Please forgive my audacity, it was just an experiment. In this case, they weren't even my words, and they settled back in their original form none-the-worse for wear.) Anyway, in this case, I kind of like the result. This juggle brings several related lines closer together, and in my (most humble) opinion smoothes the cadence of your poem.
Please, please, please don't take my word play as anything more than the compliment it is. I wouldn't have been tempted to mess around in your sandbox if your words had not completely captured my imagination. Your poem is certainly fine the way it is; I just thought it kind of cool that it stood up so well to my mental gymnastics. Take care, and thank you for sharing
: )
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Hah, no worries, cry. There's plenty of room in my "sandbox" for the both of us, my friend.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Lots of images were created in my mind as I read through this, Dean. I enjoyed the video most of all... The sounds were very realistic. Raven's Fare sounds like an interesting place to visit. Giddy
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Lots of images were created in my mind as I read through this, Dean. I enjoyed the video most of all... The sounds were very realistic. Raven's Fare sounds like an interesting place to visit. Giddy
Comment Written 04-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, Giddy. I'm really glad that you liked this one!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This has some really good lines, like the last one and also "The devil sings as morning dawns" with alliteration there as well. I could see this on a roadside post before the "Welcome to" sign outside so many towns. It also has a lyrical quality.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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This has some really good lines, like the last one and also "The devil sings as morning dawns" with alliteration there as well. I could see this on a roadside post before the "Welcome to" sign outside so many towns. It also has a lyrical quality.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much for wonderful review, CrystalCookie999. I really appreciate that!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the the town that changes during the full moon and turns evil. i enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the the town that changes during the full moon and turns evil. i enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much, sweetwoodjax. I really appreciate it!
Comment from DthomasNY
Pretty creepy Dean. Even creepier to find out this is a real place (kinda want to visit it now). The audio definitely fits perfectly with the text. Thanks for the scare!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Pretty creepy Dean. Even creepier to find out this is a real place (kinda want to visit it now). The audio definitely fits perfectly with the text. Thanks for the scare!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Hah, you are very welcome, my friend. And pick me up before you go, will ya? (LOL)
I sincerely appreciate the fantastic review, DthomasNY..
Comment from gramalot8
Dean, oh my gosh. What a creepy, scary town. Don't see how anyone would want to visit let alone live there. But, it would be a great place to visit for a good Halloween scare, for those who are the bravest among us ( leaves me out, that's for sure... LOL)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Dean, oh my gosh. What a creepy, scary town. Don't see how anyone would want to visit let alone live there. But, it would be a great place to visit for a good Halloween scare, for those who are the bravest among us ( leaves me out, that's for sure... LOL)
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Ha ha, thanks gramalot8, I truly appreciate your wonderful review.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Sounds like a great place for a vacation. You are the King of the macabre - this is a terrific, hair-raising story-poem. Thank you for the interesting author notes. I'll have to check up on this place. Have good friends in Casper, Wyoming. ;) I have no idea how near or far from Casper but I'm intrigued! I enjoyed reading your poem.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Sounds like a great place for a vacation. You are the King of the macabre - this is a terrific, hair-raising story-poem. Thank you for the interesting author notes. I'll have to check up on this place. Have good friends in Casper, Wyoming. ;) I have no idea how near or far from Casper but I'm intrigued! I enjoyed reading your poem.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, Eleanor, I really hope you get to go and fill me in on all of the creepy details! Be safe, I hear the place disappears completely when the moon goes down, and whoever is within the town's limits when it does is taken to Hell with it! I'll let you do all the scouting for me on this one, LOL!
Comment from c_lucas
As usual, A very well written poem, from the dark side. The post has a smooth flow of words, making for a very strong read with good imagery.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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As usual, A very well written poem, from the dark side. The post has a smooth flow of words, making for a very strong read with good imagery.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks very much, Charlie. I thought you might like a poem with an old western flair. I am very glad that you did!
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You welcome, Dean. Charles.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Dean, I would love to know how you formatted this with the words over the artwork. It is so cool. I've only seen one other do that. Great poem. My house is haunted, but only by pleasant spirits. I enjoyed this story~Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Dean, I would love to know how you formatted this with the words over the artwork. It is so cool. I've only seen one other do that. Great poem. My house is haunted, but only by pleasant spirits. I enjoyed this story~Debbie
Comment Written 03-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2013
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Thanks, Debbie, I really appreciate that!
You should write about some of the things that go on in your house, as it pertains to the haunting. I'd love to read it!
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Great idea--I will look at doing that. Thanks~Debbie